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  1. Chapter 8 – Trouble with Gifts At eight am on Sunday morning Charlie finally took his car out of storage. Since Tina had been willing to pick him up everyday Charlie had put his car into his parking spot at the apartment, covered it, and only stopped to keep the battery charged and it clean. Needless to say it really hadn’t been driven anywhere in over five months. I hope I remember what I am doing. The thought shot through his mind when he finally got behind the wheel and pulled out i
  2. Thanks for reading this. I think most children get close to a parent and can sense what is going on faster than anyone else. Barbara is just extra good on her whole family. You won't have to wait long for the next chapter though. My editor is done with it. The story is complete to chapter 11 right now. Enjoy.
  3. okay I have a Beta and an Editor. Needless to say new chapter is up. Enjoy.
  4. Chapter 7 – Barbara Makes Her Presence Known Thursday and Friday passed in a blur for Charlie. He moved through the days on automatic, rising each day, going about his daily tasks, smiling, talking, and none of it really penetrating beyond the surface. It was only when he was in front of his students that Charlie came to life. For them he worked, joked, and was fully attentive. However, the moment the last one climbed on the school bus and it pulled away, the life drained away from Charlie.
  5. comicfan

    Wake-up Call

    Well he wasn't lead blindly into being a crook. However whatever went wrong must have been a doozy. Seems that everyone is going to pay for it. I wonder what John got them all into now. Till next chapter and maybe an answer or two.
  6. The story is Shane and Trey by AnytaSunday. Enjoy
  7. 1) Seeing my friends and family smile 2) Surprising someone with a small gift 3) Favorite music on the radio 4) Cooking 5) Traveling somewhere with a friend 6) Being told by someone they love me 7) Seeing a student get my lesson 8) Sharing a story and seeing it well liked 9) Being greeted at the door by the dog 10) Taking time to out for myself to read, or sleep, or do a hundred little things I usually deny myself the pleasure of. These are but a few of the many things that make me smile.
  8. KC, I found my betas in Chat. I find I have an advantage with them when they read. Because both use English as a second language they spot my errors in time, space, and basic sentence structure for me. They tell me honestly what doesn't make sense. I then have a native English speaker as my editor. He finds my spelling and grammar errors but helps to make sure the American slang stays in place and doesn't get lost in translation on me. Wayne PS - Cia makes a great point. I read and comment on a lot of work. That allows me to see what is out there, what works, and because I am willing to help them by reading many return the favor.
  9. comicfan

    Chapter 1

    Mark, Life doesn't always grant us the life we would like but it is up to us to make what we do have into what we want. In some respects I'm broken but I keep going. Wayne
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    The Senses

    Your work has become extremely erotic. You have gone from a place of pain to one of sensual overload. I wonder who the lover is in this piece but then again not knowing is half the fun.
  11. comicfan

    The Phonecall

    Well you know Mark isn't telling the truth. One or two spots you might want to reread a bit Frosty. Missing words but was able to put it together. Poor Zach. He is the caregiver, the one who cleans up after everything and now this. Mark might be the one who had to deal with a rough childhood but it looks like he never truly left that life behind when he got together with Zach.
  12. Okay so you lurk, you deal with everyone in your family, and your own health isn't the greatest. And they wonder why you chose chatterbox for a nickname. If you need a hand with anyting let me know. I have broad shoulders to cry on if you need them.
  13. Been on an Adele kick. Presently listening to her song LOVESONG.
  14. Design it. Then I get the money for it. Would you rather Own a dog or Own a cat
  15. Why would you believe them without questioning it?
  16. comicfan

    Chapter 1

    Jian, Finding the pain is never the problem, finding a way to convey it is. Thank you so much for reading.
  17. comicfan

    Chapter 1

    Thanks Sara, I am glad to know it reaches people.
  18. comicfan

    The Outside

    The world outside is your escape. The scents and sounds of your woods a comfort. Your dog your faithful companion. This shows your softer side. The place where you are most content and where you feel most at home. Your poetry is improving. The flow here was much easier for you and one can sense the contented atmosphere you have created. This truly is a beautiful piece of work Mark. Don't forget though, you have friends who willingly offer you support. Wayne
  19. I'm tired of being nice all the time, I want to be correct. would you rather Eat Ice Cream or Eat Cake
  20. Would you like me to tell you honestly?
  21. Now if I lived in NYC instead of out in Suffolk County I would hire him to walk my father's dog. Hell he could sleep in the spare bed. I might just share it with him. lol.
  22. comicfan

    Chapter 1

    Yeah Frosty. This is one of those pieces that show the hurt. Don't worry about what you write, I am always glad to hear what people have to say.
  23. What happens when your whole life leads you to believe that you are somehow broken and useless. How do you get through life feeling that way. What do you do if you reach the end of that rope? Do you reach out and to who? What happens if you are the one who is left with that person's note. Welcome to the world of Broken - a life.
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    Chapter 1

    The paper was left almost accidentally here in my office. I found amongst a small pile by the edge of the desk. It was barely a page long, neatly hand written and done in a dark blue ink on starch white paper. The pain contained in that page is something I hope never to encounter again. Hello, If you are reading this I am sorry. Just call me, broken, because that is who I am. I’ve been broken my whole life. I just figured it was time to explain it so everyone would kno
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