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Not a review as such, but just a reassurance to Gandalf that CJ has not been swallowed by a whale. He is perfectly OK.
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Writing Tip: Adverbs And Adjectives ~ Helping Or Hurting
Low Flyer commented on Renee Stevens's blog entry in Writing World
There's more than a little of the grammar nerd in me. -
Writing Tip: Adverbs And Adjectives ~ Helping Or Hurting
Low Flyer commented on Renee Stevens's blog entry in Writing World
You're confusing adverbs and adjectives in the article. Adverbs qualify verbs, adjectives or other adverbs. Adjectives describe nouns. So, when your character is wearing dirty jeans and a ripped hoodie, "dirty" and "ripped" are adjectives. In English, adverbs typically end in "-ly", so it could be raining heavily, or someone could walk briskly. It could be raining very heavily where both "very" and "heavily" are adverbs - "heavily" qualifying "raining" and "very" qualifying "heavily". LF -
It was all right for CJ with the vast GA expense budget to cover his travels... ;-)
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Congratulations, CJ. Well deserved - so much more so than all those scurrilous rumours about cliff-hangers...
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Circumnavigation (99+57) final chapter: From Hell's Heart
Low Flyer replied to C James's topic in C James Fan Club's Topics
I would not have guessed if you had not mentioned this. Your use of English is considerably better than many for whom it is a first language... -
Circumnavigation (99+57) final chapter: From Hell's Heart
Low Flyer replied to C James's topic in C James Fan Club's Topics
I have been exchanging emails with CJ today and he is fine. -
It's got to be quite likely that the cartel might have someone in Carnarvon, though I don't think it's Grundig. It's an isolated port, so ideal, I'd have thought, for importing their product in small boats loaded at sea. Whoever the contact was would be able to pass lots of information on. It's a small town - word spreads.
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Why should CJ change his ways now? Surely "the" epilogue will, sooner or later, become at least a three-parter?
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I'd like to know when/how often they go back to Australia to see Trevor's family and Shane's friends. Maybe they could live on Kookaburra whilst Atlantis is being rebuilt...?
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Where the hell is the final chapter!?!?!?
Low Flyer replied to C James's topic in C James Fan Club's Topics
I forget the exact sequence but I think I posted a comment on one of CJ's stories as my first ever posting and CJ sent me a PM welcoming me to the forum. We swapped PMs for a while and then email addresses and discussed a wide range of things outwith his stories as well as the tales themselves. We agree on almost nothing, as far as I can tell, but we have some great discussions. You can imagine, though, that it can be quite scary arguing with someone like CJ - his level of research is not confined just to his story-writing. Over time, I sent him a few corrections I'd noticed in some of the chapters for which he thanked me. Out of the blue he wrote and asked if I'd take on the proof-reading role as the previous incumbent wasn't able to continue. I was very flattered to be asked and, I have to confess, I was also keen to see the chapters a few days early! I'm reasonably good at grammar and spelling - the result of an old-fashioned education a long time ago. On the other hand, I have no imagination whatsoever. CJ recently explained to me some of the process that led to Circumnavigation and he makes it sound so simple. He's always very generous in his praise for the team but, in my case, you wouldn't really see any difference if my stage were dropped. There would be some spelling mistakes and some misplaced punctuation for sure, but the story would not be fundamentally different. The others - editors, advisers on various aspects of the story - make much more difference, I think. Editing is a very particular skill which I don't have. Proof-reading is much easier. So I don't know how you get to be a member of the team. It just happened to me... -
Where the hell is the final chapter!?!?!?
Low Flyer replied to C James's topic in C James Fan Club's Topics
Not to mention catching all those places where "it's" should be "its" and vice versa... -
Where the hell is the final chapter!?!?!?
Low Flyer replied to C James's topic in C James Fan Club's Topics
Interesting, Nick. I use both of these techniques when Zeta-reading (whatever that is) the chapters. Firstly, I read through whatever CJ sends me. There are only occasional catches from the spell-checker, which is hardly surprising as CJ also has a spell-checker. Generally, the first read is at normal speed as I, like everyone else, just want to find out what happens next. Secondly, I reformat the whole document to, usually, comic sans. I find it makes the differences between letters more obvious and it also shifts the line breaks to different places. This second read is much slower - I'm trying to consider each word and sentence as a collection of words as much as part of a story. Do the words make sense? Are they the words CJ thinks they are? There can be occasional problems as, being British, I sometimes have different ideas about what is "correct". I have several American friends and relations and, over the years, I've become used to many common Americanisms but there are always new ones to learn. Sometimes I correct, sometimes I add a comment suggesting that something sounds odd to me but that, obviously, CJ's use of US English is better than mine. In the scenes in Australia and the Falklands, I insisted on the UK spellings for words such as Harbour. I ran a few questions past Australian friends where possible to check on their usage - it's generally closer to the UK than the US but it's actually a version to itself. For the same reason, I've "corrected" some of Shane's usages away from obvious Americanisms. After the second run-through, I make a pdf of the document and use Acrobat reader's "read out loud" feature. This almost always catches more errors, especially things like "later" and "latter" where it's so easy just to read what's obviously intended but which sound different. This can also catch repeated words and missing words which are easy to overlook. The reading is quite slow, too, which forces me to slow down as I read along and this also helps. I always try to do this final read-through in one or two sittings to help spot continuity errors. I know CJ always insists that the final responsibility is his, but I get very embarrassed when someone points out something I've missed, especially when it's actually quite obvious... -
Where the hell is the final chapter!?!?!?
Low Flyer replied to C James's topic in C James Fan Club's Topics
One thing I think nobody's picked up on is that the title's a quote from Star Trek II, The Wrath of Khan. Not sure of the significance, though. Khan came to a sticky end in the film, though. -
Circumnavigation (99+56) The Belly of the Beast
Low Flyer replied to C James's topic in C James Fan Club's Topics
That was a h*ll of a reading project. Well done! -
Doubt it. The German's beautiful.
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Where the hell is the final chapter!?!?!?
Low Flyer replied to C James's topic in C James Fan Club's Topics
Actually, it's getting on for twice as long as War and Peace. According to Wikipedia, W&P is about 561,000 words. According to GayAuthors, Circumnavigation is over 1,100,000 words, even without the final chapter. In fact, adding in the final chapter (20,304 words), makes Circumnavigation the second longest novel ever published, on Wikipedia's list anyway. However, I must protest. Giving away key plot lines at this stage is simply unacceptable. I'm sure I wasn't alone in assuming that the use of an aardvark's burrow on the Yucatan would have provided ideal shelter from the storm. Although I, of course, now know that that wasn't the case, it seems grossly unfair to those millions of others still waiting to see the final chapter. Shame on you, CJ! -
Circumnavigation (99+56) The Belly of the Beast
Low Flyer replied to C James's topic in C James Fan Club's Topics
It should have been obvious from the context - I mean, what's the one thing that we all know CJ hates more than anything else? -
Circumnavigation (99+56) The Belly of the Beast
Low Flyer replied to C James's topic in C James Fan Club's Topics
From askoxford.com: vertiginousDefinition of vertiginous adjective extremely high or steep:vertiginous drops to the valleys below relating to or affected by vertigo. -
Circumnavigation (99+56) The Belly of the Beast
Low Flyer replied to C James's topic in C James Fan Club's Topics
If the chapter's as large as you say it is, is it worth splitting it in two? Of course, it may be that, given your well-known aversion to all things vertiginous, there may be no suitable place to break it. Just a thought. -
Circumnavigation (99+56) The Belly of the Beast
Low Flyer replied to C James's topic in C James Fan Club's Topics
Trevor, Shane, Joel and Lisa are on Atlantis. Kookaburra (AKA Aries) is in Western Australia. We have absolutely no reason to believe that she wasn't sailed there after the two boats parted company off the east coast of Australia. To have her suddenly appear to save the day would be a bit too "deus ex machina" for CJ. Apart from anything else, it would be just as impossible for Kookaburra to escape from the eye of the hurricane as for Atlantis. Where you're almost certainly right, though, is that it will be something insignificant that none of us spotted. Otherwise it wouldn't be CJ. -
Circumnavigation (99+56) The Belly of the Beast
Low Flyer replied to C James's topic in C James Fan Club's Topics
Seems as likely as any other explanation... -
Circumnavigation 98: And the Sea shall give up its Dead
Low Flyer replied to C James's topic in C James Fan Club's Topics
I stopped being amazed by that a long time ago... -
Circumnavigation (99+56) The Belly of the Beast
Low Flyer replied to C James's topic in C James Fan Club's Topics
I suspect that Dean will have taken care of the Cartel guys at Treasure Beach long before the Norte Cartel can get to them. CJ sent me a picture of an aircraft carrier that had survived a Cat 5 hurricane. It wasn't a pretty site though it was still afloat. I'd imagine that Atlantis would be reduced to matchwood pretty quickly. -
Bridget's already turned away from the chase because she knows that she's running out of time to escape Dean. I don't see how anyone could escape on Sea Witch if she were also towing Atlantis.
