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Everything posted by Timothy M.
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Very compelling story - I had to read all the chapters in one setting. This last chapter was by far the worst, I feel so sorry for both Andy and Matt that they made the huge mistake of having sex right at that moment. That knot will screw up their lives even more than what Dillon did. Yes that was bad and inexcusable even if Dillon was himself a victim, but they could have sorted that mess out via extensive counselling with a good therapist, including being angry and hating Dillon for what he did, before going on to forgiving him as a way to forgiving themselves and each other - Andy especially would need to be taken through all the steps and to lay off sex for a long time, until he was better. But now that they've crossed that line, I worry that Andy will drag Matt into the quicksand and the possibility of a happy future together will be much less likely. I almost do not dare to continue with book 2 for fear of what will happen. In any case you are a wonderful writer, and I like that you had sensible girls in the story. Too many of these high school gay romances only use stereotyped girls (either sad or heartbroken wannabe girlfriends or bitches or fag hags), and that gets a bit tiresome.
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So please tell us what kind of revenge Kyle does this time. Hope it's something really clever and cruel.
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Sorry, but I really hate this chapter with the public confrontation and the whole awful scene in the church. It's just to embarrassing and emotional for my tastes. But I'm glad it ended well, and I'd like to see how they got on in college.
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I agree, Lisa, and I wish there were more chapters too. This chapter was both surprising and very predictable, but it sure did clear up a lot of questions. I liked the Sheriff doing the right thing in spite of what he may feel about gays, maybe he's not so bad for the town after all.
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It's so great the way that Danny, while being younger, is so mature and forces Ed to thinh things over. And he is being very sensible about having to compromise - both of them, not just him giving up his dream. Compromise and looking out for the happiness of each other is a big part of a relationship - though good sex is just as important :-)
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Wow they went all the way on the first night - and without being prepared for it too. That was not what I expected - though I suppose Ed was not a virgin with male sex before. But I still thought it would only be oral for their first time. I do wish you had let us in on more details about their time together, I know you are able to write sex well, and I always feel cheated when you omit this part.
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Yeah Danny-boy has got Eddie's number all right. I admire you for choosing a bully as your main character and showing us the kind of pain and denial that is often behind such behaviour. Most stories here only show bullies from the victims' point of view (which works very well too, but few of them get into why or lets the bully change). And I bet Daniel will make Ed change one way or another. Only question is how much...
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Such a dramatic ending, but logical in it's own way. But I agree with Gene63 - I'd love to see what happens in Britain, I'm sure Micah would be able to piss off a lot of snobbish boarding school boys and have fun with Corey at the same time. Hope you get round to a sequel soon.
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Well that ending was a surprise - not just to Corey. But I think Micah was so very right in asking his boyfriend to make love to him just then, and I do like a versatile couple. Hope they'll have a lot more intimate time together. Oh and Mrs Howard is just great - respect ! Though she may resurrect the idea of a shot gun marriage if she finds out what they did. I'm sure she'll insist that Corey makes an honest man out of Micah :-)
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OK, the end of this chapter is the point where the story starts to annoy me a bit. I really liked Micah's victory and return to the Academy and his work as MA. But now things are starting to get messed up again and I don't like the direction it takes. Though it does have some interesting aspects.
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I absolutely love this chapter - and even more so knowing it is just the start of a deviously funny and awesome war between Micah and his mother. So wonderful how Micah manages to wind up his mother by being polite - and how he gets Katy on his side immediately. Also great that Micah gets to understand his unknown past and have a better relationship with his father (which is how I consider Mr Jericho no matter he is not the 'sperm-donor').
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Don't know why I like the shopping spree chapter so much. Maybe it's because I hate buying clothes, and I sure wouldn't mind having a lady of taste and means sorting it out in one afternoon. And I' be okay with the perving too :-)
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I think this is the chapter where I realized that Micah was going to really grab the chance to correct his mistakes in relation to Corey, especially admitting that he loves him. So cool especially as the story also tells how much they were both hurt by Micah's wrong choices in the original past. I really like time travel stories (including the Back to the future trilogy).
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I don't know why, but this story is even better when you read it the second time, where you actually know what is going on. It quickly became a favorite story for me, and now that I'm back to read it for the fourth time, I guess I should start letting you know, how muck I enjoy it. It's amazing how you grip our attention with this first chapter, with lots of intriguing hits about Micah's personality and past and perceptiveness. And I just want to cheer him for his inherent honesty and high morals.
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The Day After Yesterday
Timothy M. commented on Thorn Wilde's story chapter in The Day After Yesterday
Well that was a couple of emotional chapters - and somewhat scary with the drug thing too. But still quite believable, including Ben as caretaker and anti-drug (though I'm still not sure about the connection to Ben's past as shown in later chapters, whether he is a hypocrite or being anti-drug due to his personal experiences). However, I did find Ben somewhat naive believing that the statement in his email would solve the situation. I'm impressed that Harry went along with it, shows he is probably more of a friend than a professional contact. PS: I looked up consensus and consent, both can mean agreement, so I guess both are correct in the context (ch 3). Just me not being familiar with consensus being used that way. -
The House with the Rose Coloured Memories
Timothy M. commented on Thorn Wilde's story chapter in The House with the Rose Coloured Memories
Seeing as I've already read the next chapters, I won't comment on Ben's behavior. I liked Carol and I hope Ben will keep in touch with her, he could do with some more real friends to keep him grounded in reality. -
Okay, so if Mark is sore why don't they switch ? Otherwise very hot on the sex part. Oh and it should be: They dispensed with words, not no words. Plus I think it should be 'by mutual, silent consent' not consensus later in the same paragraph. Quite rare to find you making such errors, you're a good writer and I appreciate the lack of grammar and language mistakes.
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The Man with the Velvet Voice
Timothy M. commented on Thorn Wilde's story chapter in The Man with the Velvet Voice
You're spoiling us: cute snuggly bits and hot sex and witty dialogue as well as some serious thoughts about what this is and it's only the second chapter. And I really liked that they did not rush to see each other (texting instead) but on the other hand did not deny the mutual attraction. They may have issues and worries but they are intelligent and mature guys. Such a relief after reading several stories of teenage angst and insecurities in a row. -
Out Standing In Our Field
Timothy M. commented on Sasha Distan's story chapter in Out Standing In Our Field
I don't blame Jase at all. Noone forced Rhy to drink so much, and Jase took it slow, was gentle and made sure Rhy enjoyed it. A wonderful first time, and it's not Jase's fault that Rhy is a romantic, needy teenager. As show by his earlier crush on Caleb (or was it Sam?). I agree with Gee that it was better than a longer lead up during which Rhy could have really fallen in love. Right now he's mainly in love with the idea of a boyfriend and of course fascinated by the sexy and alluring Jase. However I'm not sure that Jase is actually done with Rhy - I have a feeling that he may like the young boy more than he wants to admit (to himself and others). In that case I guess thing might both get worse and better. It'll be interesting to see how the story unfolds from here. -
The Boy with the Lavender Eyes
Timothy M. commented on Thorn Wilde's story chapter in The Boy with the Lavender Eyes
I think this story will be your best ever - or at least the greatest so far. I've read the first nine chapters and I love it. Your awesome ability to portray characters who are mature and intelligent in spit of what issues and relationship difficulties they may have, really work well for this story. The story line is original and realistic, and I enjoy hating the fucking media. I have a feeling this story will end up being a favorite of mine, to be read over and over again. -
Even better - and I was not surprised that they got more involved than just friends with benefits. They are good for each other, no matter how long it lasts. Hopefully Alan will take the last step at some point and let Matt top. I'm sure he'll be gentle and give his lover a sweet memory if nothing else. But your characters are still a lot more mature than the stated age of sixteen, I'm always surprised when it's mentioned.
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Don't know how I missed this extra story when I read Nemesis, but I'm really glad I found it. Even if I had to read Nemesis again, just to be sure I remembered the story line right. But it was worth it to seeing Alan redeemed somewhat. Apart from the intimate scenes, which were great, I really liked the bit where Alan saved Nick from the two other bullies. That was cool and also the way he stopped himself from being an idiot when Matt came on to him.
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Presents and Responsibilities
Timothy M. commented on Sasha Distan's story chapter in Presents and Responsibilities
Nice point about the Olympic sponsor and I bet he's also happy that Zu is starting to dress better and has his very own anger management solution in Zander. Both improvements are very good for his image as representing sportsman. Wonder how the parents will react to the ring - I think Zu would have been better of not saying anything in the airport and let them ask if they wanted to know. Hope the dinner goes better than the first meeting. -
Three strikes and you're out... Ouch that's tough. He loses his job, his wife wants a divorce, and his lover says "Nothing to hold you here, is there?" Somehow I'm guessing that the last part hurt the most. Great to see a new story from you, and as usual you grip our attention from the very beginning. Can't wait to see how Carl will rebuild his life, I hope he'll end up happy and out of the closet.
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OK, the relationship has covered most of the important ground which is probably why you have stalled with this story for a while. They've dated, kissed, had sex, said the L word, gone public, meet friends, travelled together as an official couple and started living together. Not much left to be said on these points, although I would like to see Zander puts his own touches on their joint home, while teasing Zu about the masculine bachelor style of the twins' apartment. This might also involve some of the joint shopping with Bay and Issac that Zu was dreading However, there is one important aspect that has not been dealt with yet: meeting the parents. Will Zu take Zander with him to the airport to see Zoltan off ? Cause I'm assuming the twins' parents will be there too. How will they react to Zu suddenly being with a guy ? Unless they already know since they would probably worry about him being on his own after all these years. I can just see them suggesting that Zu should move in with them - or maybe assuming that Zander is just a room mate, untill they see him and Zu being affectionate. Lots of possibilities for humor and embarrassment in that situation. And what about Zanders parents ? Are they even in the picture and OK with him being gay ? How will they react to Zu ? Hopefully they'll be happy that their son has found a great guy to love, but I guess there are other not so good reactions which they could have. Finally there is the whole sports issue - are sponsors and the para-olympic authorities happy with their representative being openly gay ? Or at least publicly with a guy. I kept wondering how the two week European tour went - I suppose it depends on the destinations - Baltic countries are not good, but Scandiavia would be mostly OK.