Timothy M.

Nice to know more about Scott and Josh, and wonderful that there is hope for Luc. But sad that you have not added to this story for a long time - will we ever get to know what happens next ?

So I guess there's not much I can add to the other comments, concerning how great this story is. I was quite relieved that it ended well, for a while there you had me believing the worst. But it was a very skilled blend of genuine anguish and solving the problems by following your heart. Oh and I really liked that you let them transcend the one-sided sex and showed how right it can be to reverse roles. To me such relationships are much more meaningful, even if I'm OK with the other kinds as well.

I was enjoying this story, but after this chapter I'm a bit disappointed. You didn't complete the description of their night together, and you haven't written another chapter. I can see you are still active in GA, so I guess there is still hope for more. And please let Jordan recall his first time with Shawn in more detail :-)

First of all I want to say that I think having Craig rape Nick was a totally unneccessary choice of dramatic development. There are enough difficult matters to deal with for these two boys as it is, and this is over the top. I expected a beating, and that would have been bad enough, but rape is just too much. But it's your story, so only you get to make that decision. All I can do is stop reading, though that's hard to do once hooked on a story. Oh, yeah and tell you how the plot makes me feel about the story and the main characters: really really annoyed with their stupidity. Nick paid the price for him and Dave being so stupid and not doing the right thing in the first place. If Nick had told Zoe about Craig beating him up, he would not have been violated even more. If Dave had not been such a pussy about coming out and about having sex with his boyfriend, Nick's first time would have been with the boy he loved and not rape. If Dave was not so utterly in the closet, Nick would have admitted being gay to his sister, and that would probably have revealed Craig for what he is, meaning he would have been dumped by Zoe. I hope Dave gets to feel as guilty as he should, and I could almost wish that he lost Nick over this. But I still want Nick to be less unhappy, and I guess that's not going to happen without Dave. Oh yeah and I'm pissed that they didn't report the rape, means they haven't learnt anything from the mistake of not revealing Craig's first violent act. Sorry, I'll stop ranting now. Good luck with sorting out all the issues in this relationship.

Reading this for the second time I like it even more. But I wish you'd add another chapter or two. Not just for the hot make up sex, but to see how their relation progress, both with the issues they still have but especially with the pressure from outside attention. I liked it that you showed that being rich and known isn't just a bed of roses. I can never understand why people envy royalty and other public figures. Sure they have a lot of priviliges and fun, but the price they pay is high too.

So we're past the one year anniversary for the last post on this story. Will begging make you write another chapter ? I really hate when a good story is left hanging like this.

I'm on my second read, it's an impressive story, though it makes my gut ache. I like Meghan, she caught on to his anguish immediately and didn't torment Quinn any more.

Okay, it's sweet that Zack gets all exited when the door bell rings, and he and Brody get to kiss at Adam's house. But there's a lack of consistency here. Where are the other guys that usually come to play games in the morning (as we are told in on of the first chapters) ? Also the fact that they are not present makes it somewhat unbelievable that Adam does not notice the lovers' behaviour even more. But it's still an awesome if gut wrenching story.

Hmm you're not keeping track of your details here. Last chapter we were told that Sam never came to play games in the mornings, and now suddenly he is there to lose a CD. Very compelling story, wonder how Zack will finally crack. If it's by killing his dad or being found out after an even worse beating.

I like the story, but the beginning of this chapter pissed me off. Nick is an idiot as well as very illoyal to his sister when he does not tell the truth abot his injuries. I'm guessing that you mean to use 'the Craig bastard' for more drama later on, but that part lost all credibility for me, when you let Nick be very outspoken to Craig during the actual confrontation, but not follow up by telling Zoe. Otherwise, it's great to read and with a good blend of angst, fun and hotness.

Good thing Zach had already warned Ryan about Alex being protective. Wonder if Amy called him or he came by accidentally.

I actually fel sorry for Ethan. I know he is being annoying on purpose here, and that he does something even worse in the next chapter. But I don't think that upcoming thing is on purpose, he is just upset and tells his best friend why. Because I think Ethan is in love with Caleb, but he has held back for Caleb's sake. Because he is so messed up, and afraid of being gay, and still mostly in the closet, and freaked about the drunken sex with Jake, and just very fragile altogether. Ethan was trying to respect that and be there for Caleb, who did actually see that Ethan was waiting for him to say or do something that would show he was ready to go further. But he never did, and now Ethan realizes that he has lost the chance and I bet he is really heartbroken. So I feel sorry for him - its just one more thing that's totally fucked up by Caleb's being so repressed about his real self. One thing I've come to like about this story is how Caleb can be totally clueless and at the same time realize how wrong things are with what he is doing, and how his thoughts reveal even more to the reader. Though I want to strangle or smack him sometimes when he is rambling on. But I think you want to have that effect on us, and you're certainly doing an amazing job so far.

Sometimes it's nice when a story develops just as predicted ;-) But I do feel it's too soon for Justin's little brother to catch on to the potential of the threesome. Oh well, it did advance the plot nicely. But I hope that they have some time to build a firm friendship first, before all the romantic problems really begin. And well done on the jealousy angle, good to see that Brice knows what he is feeling and why and is trying to fight it. I like intelligent and sensible characters.

I quite like this story even if Caleb's rambling drove me crazy at first. So is there any chance of more chapters ?

I'm liking this story a lot, but you've just lost my respect by having Kevin and Cam deciding to have their son circumcised. That is so barbaric and totally uncool.

I can see why your readers love this story, I'm fairly hooked myself. And I find myself hoping that Corbin will find happiness even if he mostly comes across as an clueless alcoholic with a viscious vindictive streak when he is upset. As a European - and being from a country with one of highest per capita alcohol consuption in the world - I've often thought the US law about drinking age of 21 to be absurd. But reading this story almost makes me change my mind and wish that they would actually enforce this at OD. I keep wondering whether one purpose of this story is to make us disgusted with mindless, pointless, senseless drinking. If so you are doing a very good job ! I have no problem with people enjoying beer or spirits or whatever, but the amounts are ridiculous, and the negative consequences are beginning to pile up. Corbin is even starting to realize this, he's had a couple of moments where he tells himself he should try not to drink so much when he is with Pete. But he still drinks himself into oblivion, and he has no clue how this plays a major part in how stupidly he is behaving. I'm not surprised Pete does not want to get involved with Corbin, who has made no effort to get to know him, and even when they do talk half the night, he is still drunk. I almost feel sorry for Pete (and Mike) that he's probably lost his heart to Corbin, even if I feel sorry for Corbin too. But hopefully everything will sort itself out one way or another, although I'm not too optimistic, having read The List. Probably your main (and very impressive) feat as a writer is how you are able to make us emphasize with your characters, making even the dumbest stunt understandable from their POV. You make us accept them and even like them in spite of their flaws. For that I salute you.

OK, I've read the 12 chapters present so far, and I've thought quite a bit about whether to write a review or not. I noticed that very few people have commented, and this may be for the same reason that I'm hesitating. You've really made a great effort to write a dramatic and interesting story, so I want to say something nice, but unfortunately there are some major problems with this tale. I like the concept and the characters and the issues, so full credit for that. And especially that you made the mother the main problem, rather than the father. I can skim past and ignore all the silly bits about Brit royalty, so never mind that those soap parts detract from the whole. I understand why you want the drama of Chris being badly hurt and in a coma, so he has to be saved by Josh. And that you subsequently wanted Chris to get back to the Coach's house fast, so the story could continue. So I just pretend not to notice that he would have been dead, if the accident had really happened the way you describe. And that he would have needed a long period of recovery and physiotherapy and other treatment in the hospital, if he had really been so badly injured. The willing suspension of disbelief you know... Lots of other unrealistic stuff is also easy to shrug off - like the fact that Josh would never be able to perform on the piano after just a few weeks of learning. Or that Liz doesn't catch on after Heather talks of being dumped by her gay boyfriend. Or that you just have those Frank and Patrick episodes to give us some hot sex scenes, but never make the two boys real for us in other ways. Or that the older brothers would really be so irresponsible as to have a mock fight just there and then, so they knock over the ladder. Such things are just minor irritants. As is the last cliff hanger you left us with in chapter 12 - why do you think you need such silly nonsense, the story is intense enough without resorting to tactics like that. Comes across like another bad soap, I'm sorry to say. No the main problem I have with this story is about the dialogue. A lot of the time it consists of very artificial, idealistic, pompous speeches, rather than something you can actually believe that people (especially teens) would say. I appreciate that you want the characters to make statements that will show their integrity or honesty or whatever, and get your message across. But the more I read of this story, the more annoyed I get about this matter. And I'm almost to the point, where I cannot bother to follow the story any more, as much as I want to know what happens. I realize there is not much you can do about it, since the story is already written (as far as I understand), but hopefully you'll be able to use my criticism in a constructive way in future stories. But if nothing else I got to rant about it, so now I feel better :-) Good luck with your writing

Oh damn there's a lot of potential for heartache here. But maybe Brice would actually be relieved if Cody and Justin are attracted to each other. It would take the heat of him for a little while, as he tries to sort out his feelings. And if you can pull off a believable threesome (emotionally as well as erotically), I'm all for it. It would be awesome as well as very impressive - but I have faith in your abilities as a writer, and the title and intro do sort of hold a promise of this. And I guess we'll see some bonding over horses and dogs again :-) Not that I mind, I quite like your signature story trait. Hope you'll post regularly, I'll keep checking for the next chapter.

I liked the story, but I wish you had written about what happened in their school. Did they come out as boyfriends or was Tony still too scared to do this ? I suppose at least Jordan was accepted since he kept on with his sports, but it still seems stange that you ignore this issue completely.

Read all the chapeters in one sitting yesterday (and I should have been doing some work instead), and I'm totally hooked. You are a great writer, making your characters very believable and likeable. I especially like how our understanding of Jenny suddenly changed when they became friends rather than dating. I hope Corey and Clinton can help each other with the issues facing them from their surroundings. At least Clinton's parents seem sensible and kind. PS and I have a feeling I know what Clinton's surprise is, but I don't want to spoil anything, so I'll just give the intials R B and comment again if it turns out I was right.

Great story so far (I've read the first 19 chapters), but something caught my attention in the last chapter with the move, and I came back here to check. And in the very first paragraph I found the same contradiction, which slipped my attention when I first read this. You say (here and in ch 19) that he has had the same room for almost 18 years, but at the same time you say here that they moved to the house after his mother started working in the store (9 years earlier), plus he has memories of their earlier house and the surroundings and had friends where he lived before. I know it's a minor thing, but it still annoys me when the rest of the story is so very realistic and captivating. Can't wait to read more and hope it ends well.

Absolutely fascination and fabulous - but I'm so pissed that you didn't write that extra chapter about their weekend and how the relatonship went from there. And I also want to hear more about Glen and Jer, I liked them a lot. How about some chapters from other POW, like Jer's ? I wish I could work out how how I favorite authors here on GA, you'd definitely be on my list. And I like your writer's name too :-)

Good solution, but I would have liked more details ;-) You are a very good writer and I'm sure it would have been both hot and delightful.

The faster Aaron gets out of his relationship with Ben and back to Mark the better. But I guess he needs to be worked over mentally first, so that he is no longer the uptight, thoughtless prick, otherwise it would be bad for both of them. Hope you manage to take up the story again sometime, I really liked the Buy me a drink story. Almost in spite of myself - but the humor and quality of your writing actually made me enjoy the clueless drama provided by Aaron and the cast.

I like all kinds of fanfiction, for all of the reasons mentioned above. And I've seen some nice examples on this site already. But there is one thing I sometimes wonder about. Does it make a difference whether the author of the original work is against fanfiction based on his or her world ? I've read that some authors dislike the idea, others approve or just accept fanfiction as flattery. Should we respect their feelings or just say tough luck if the primary author hates fanfiction based on their story ?