Timothy M.

so am I the only one to think Ethan an idiot for ditching his friends and not taking the chance to make Drew a part of their group. It's gonna come back and bite him in the ass, especially that he did not come clean to his best friend. Serves him right if they don't have his back when the shit hits the fan.

Will you please, please, continue with this story. I've read it three times now, and I'm desperate for more ! It's so fun and intense and even cute at times. Tay may be my favorite in both stories, but all of them are great.

Oh the irony of that last sentence 'where I could start over and hopefully not screw up my life so much' was just too hilarious. Hindsight is a wonderful thing - and I'll say again that your story just gets so much better and is more fun with the switches in time. Bay's parents are idiots, but I hate his Coach more. What a shitty, unfair thing to do - especially not to include Bay at the graduation ceremony, when he was their most important runner. Getting on that train might have been running away, but he was totally justified and better off.

Poor Bay - the one time he sees a man he really admires and desires, the guy is a nasty predator who demeans him by using female 'names'. He may have escaped the rape of his body, but his mind was fucked with and a whole load of issues were added. Yeah, I also guess that was the end of his clubbing. No wonder he freaked out as Issac's suggestion - but on the other hand: shame on Bay for not realizing that there is a huge difference between the man who loves him and has already given his body selflessly and people who disrespect him and try to make him into a 'girl'.

I think you are being unfair to Bay in this chapter - and the next chapter confirmed my feelings. And the fact that you've not described their lovemaking in any detail suddenly became a problem, rather than just being slightly annoying - ie went from 'nice to have' to 'need to have'. Cause I wonder how much access Issac has had to Bay's ass until now. If Bay has totally avoided even simple caresses, or if he has tensed up and moved away from gentle fingering, this should have told Issac that his boyfriend had issues about anal sex, at least as the recipent. And Issac should have figured out that there might be something traumatic involved, as the next chapter shows. And as the more mature guy it was up to him to ask about this gently and not during foreplay and in this way. On the other hand, if Bay was OK with being touched intimately in relation to his ass, then I can understand why Issac would be so surprisd and angry that he refused to receive - and in those words. But if Bay let Issac insert fingers, then why would he be so shocked to be asked to go the whole way ? But maybe he just ignored the possibility, the way he ignores most of his other issues. Just confusing... But I still think that Bay deserves more understanding - from Issac as well as us. Glad to see I'm not the only one to feel that way.

I've read this great story on Literotica countless times, I liked the few improvements you've made here, though I noted you didn't catch every mistake. My 'favorite' is in chapter 3 where they are suddenly naked on the bed without any indication of how it happened. One of the subtle tings is how you use Mac and Andy to show how Mike feels about his mechanic. And Mac realizes that, too, saying how being called Mac was like a jab to his heart.

A bit weird, but fun :-)

Thank you AK for the info about nifty, so that I could read the last three chapters of this great story. There's even a promise of a sequel, so I'll hope for that.

Blimey, once Aaron opens up, he really does let everything out, doesn't he ? We're talking major dam bursting here - and Ben's reaction after the flood is soooo cool. 'Yes, I'll be your boyfriend', just awesome.

I think this was the chapter where I realized how shy or even repressed and insecure Aaron really is. And the cliff hanger was hilarious, but also a bit scary. I had no clue how Ben will react to Bmad.

I always crack up when Ronnie and Amanda pull the 'complete make-over' trick on Aaron, I wish you had written that part in more detail, just to enjoy the sarcastic and uncomfortable internal ramblings.

Interesting that Bmad is already Ben now in Aaron's mind, but Dave stays Cosmo. And I just loved the reverse pick-up at the end.

This story is even more fun the secod time around. I just love the observations and internal monologue and the fake boyfriend scheme. And I applaud Aaron for not going up, at least he did have some sense left.

Totally agree with you, Thorn, that was painful. Not that I blame Bay for being scared, and I even shared his sadness at the fact that Alex changed when he came out. Hope Bay won't do that even when he has dealt with his issues (I'm gonna hate if he suddenly wants to wear pink). But calling Alex names was totally uncool, even more cruel than breaking up with him. No excuse for that. Loved the 'you can't keep running away' dig from Alex - wonder how many people will have told Bay that by the end of the story :-) I'm putting my money on Issac and Dale to be among them, but I guess Bay will only head the former, if anyone.

Having read this for the second time, I agree with the comment you made at the end of ch 1. The ending (and I mean this chapter as well as the next) doesn't fit the pace and tone of the rest of the story. Your gut feeling as an author is spot on I think. Especially the explanation (from Olivia) of why Michael never told Jason he loved him, and the idea that Jason wold have stayed if only he'd heard those words, seems out of kilter to me. Though not quite so much on the second read, but the whole flight scene still seems overly dramatic somehow. Not that I blame Jason for wanting to run, I really felt like slapping Michael for forcing Jason to submit in the previous chapter. He should have stopped assuming he knew what was best and actually tried to ask and listen and understand. And that's another thing I'd have liked to see from this story (not just in passing in your other main stiry) - that their relationship became more equal. Anyway it's mostly a great story, so thanks for the fun. However, I'm sure all your readers will appreciate a different ending - why don't you leave the first one up and do an alternative as well. That way you'll make everyone happy ;-)

Short but sweet. I like that Issac does not hide his interest in Bay (saying that he is there to see him), but without pushing. I think Issac knows that Bay will bolt if he takes things too fast, so he calms his boy as best he can. Clever and considerate, oh yeah I really approve of Issac, he's perfect for Bay.

So glad that Bay finally had a good experience with being gay. Even if it doesn't last, at least he knows what being in love should feel like. And I suppose he must have had some memories that would make him want to come out and live his life truly. Otherwis he would have stayed in the closet and hated himself forever.

Bloody hell, that was HOT !! I'm not usually keen on exhibitionism, but this hint of it was quite tantalising, and the teasing was absolutely masterful. And then the very erotic climax followed by the promise of more. Brilliant.

I'm really beginning to like the way you flash back and froth between the past and present in order to let us understand the issues that Bay has. It's very cleverly done, and I'm looking forward to the next chapters. I liked Bay from the beginning, and I can certainly emphasize with his need not to seem queer and his irritation with other people trying to stereotype him. So what if he's a bit repressed, he'd work it out in his own time, if they let him alone. I don't like meddlers and busybodies...

It's a great story - I think this is my third read. But I still get annoyed that they leave their used condom out in nature. They should know it's bad for the wild life.

Very mature and admirably restrained - but if there isn't any sex (even just a bit of making out and nakedness will do) in the next chapter, I'm gonna be sooo disappointed. After all, they are young, male and HOT ! And I hope they all have king size beds in their new house :-)

Well, I guess that was a nice romantic ending, but it would have been great with a few more chapters to see how Ryan and Connor got on, and what happened with the other guys in the story. And just a minor detail: in a previous chapter you said that Trent graduated, so why is he mentioned being there in the new school year ? But all in all it's a great story, you have me empathizing very much with Connor, and even if he makes mistakes, he is mostly quite sensible and likable. Now I'm off to see what else you have written.

Connor broke the door down - damn, just as I was getting really impressed with how good this story is, you pull a stunt like that. I supporse it added to the drama, but the chapter was tense enough without getting unreal like that. No scrawny boy can break a locked door down, not matter how angry he is. But apart from that I liked lots of things about this chapter: that the rapist got caught, that Connor got together with Ben, that there was a good explanation for the date, and that Toby is getting better, of course.

So I got half way through this chapter and though liking the story, I'm already annoyed by the first major inconsistency. In the beginning you state that Connor and his mom has just moved to this place. Then later on you tell about the job he has had since he was fourteen playing at a bar. And then a bit later you say that he can stay at Ryan's place over the weekend because he's not working at the bar. So suddenly he's still at the same place at fifteen, that he was at fourteen - and you didn't say that he got the job after he moved. Another thing is that you should NEVER watch TV when you have concussion. Lying down and resting in a dark room is the right thing to do. At least Ryan's mom told him to go have a nap, so that helped.

OK, I know I said I might stop reading due to the rape stuff, but of course I couldn't :-) Too much interest in these two guys. Thanks for the long reply to my rant on ch 14, it helped a lot with understanding your choices in how the story went along. You've managed a good come back in the past two chapters, so I guess I'll stick with the story till the end. Hope all the issues gets resolved - and not necessarily in a sentimentally happy way. I'm not afraid of bad things, just don't like to see otherwise intelligent people act silly. And you've made them fairly mature and sensible in other ways, so it was hard to accept that they were too afraid and closeted to act rationally. Oh and I'm just laughing about how stupid Dave's dad is. Does he really believe he can get away with this sort of controlling behavior in modern time. But Dave should tell Matt asap.