Okay. So, I'm here. I've finished reading the whole chapter. And I'm reviewing..
I like. It's realistic and the characters, especially Mark is captivating. It's the first chapter, so I'm expecting more fun.
I don't know what that was, but it's horrible. I saw the expression on Will Smith and his family when she did a bend over and it was shocking. It was hilarious.
Okay. He's back. Wondering how that's going to go for the both of them in the long run, with Birch being angry and all. I'm like the drama and exciting. Looking forward to the next one:)
Eleven, it wasn't just you, anyways:).
So, this is the first alternate earth, fantasy I'm reading here and...it wasn't a let down. In fact, the first chapter is pretty good. Apparently, you're already wildly popular, as shown by the number of people following the story. I like the whole big picture & idea.
The only thing is the difficulty ascertaining who's telling the story .
Good work:)
I'm glad you've posted the next chapter already:). That said, I noticed some... things.
‘what kind of a benevolent god would send my into a hell hole like this?’ I think you mean ME and not MY?
Also, I've noticed that you use a lot me adjectives, and prepositions (example: anyway, though and a lot of so's). It's not all bad but too much of everything is bad.
Okay, I think that's it for now. Moreover, I enjoyed reading this chapter.
Okay. I shower twice a day, usually. When school's in session, I shower at 6 am and then between 6pm and 10pm. When school isn't in session, I don't shower till 9am and then 7pm.