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  1. raven1

    Chapter 30

    Frightening image @weinerdog! What's a world without snark? Poor @Mrsgnomie would miss her evil twin! Or not.
  2. raven1

    Chapter 30

    Kage seems to be on more than one mission. He must have left quite a big chunk of himself in Elijah to power all the things that have happened so far!
  3. raven1

    Chapter 30

    Sorry, but seriously that sounds gross! To me it sounds like something a guy would say to his baby after it farted or...
  4. I've now get to tell you how clever and delightful I found the last three chapter, especially this one. There are more that a few reasons, so I'll just list them. 1. Everyone expected the prophecy meant that since either Vincent or Stefan had to die, it would come at the hand of the other. You instead wrote an unexpected twist that pranked us, and I personally found this a wonderful surprise ending. I am sure Terik inspired you! 2. Whether the Zombies in the Shadows thing was a real suggestion or not, I am sure readers wanted Vincent to continue the fight against evil with his superpowers and are now disappointed. Personally I like the idea of Zombies, but think the new improved (mortal male) god of mischief would make a great comedy novel. Especially if Erik retains his former sexual preference in a male body. 3. Vin and Mason now have time to focus on each other and the Owensville pack with the universe of friends. 4. Gods making and bending their own rules is an ancient idea and makes great sense and fit. Ever heard of miracles? 5. Personal sacrifice to defeat evil is a logical, inevitable event in human history. Something else would feel disconnected to reality and make the ending contrived. 6. I celebrate the ending, because all the wonderful characters you created are now free to become MCs in their own novels in this universe. You now have a wealth of possibilities for huge universe of stories with abundant material, and chances for many guest appearances. This chapter is perfect, and the initial comments were quick reactions to the unexpected surprise. Just one slight observation. One nice comment mentioned this was one chapter and there are 35 chapters with great comments. This is true, but the entire story is in three novels which so far consists of 98 chapters. So, in my opinion 98 great chapters, since I and other commenters think this is also a great chapter.
  5. Your Rock Kitt!
  6. @astone2292 @kbois is 100% right. You have written great stories that have brought me fun, adventure and great times. How many awesome chapters? Don't know, but they outweigh the impact of just one chapter. Which I really liked on many levels I thought the battle and death of Stefan was excellent. You can stumble, but don't crumble at the comments. You should read this Writing World essay by @Comicality before writing the epilogue. My advice is to write the epilogue exactly the way you planned it and make no compromises based on the comments! This is a great story, and I will post my comments next on why I think it's a great ending when I finish this. Great job, Aaron!
  7. OOOH! You also seem to have very violent reactions. Very concerning! 😮
  8. Continued repeating yourself is not a good sign. 🤔
  9. Definite short (and very convenient) memory problems.
  10. That's a furniture company Albert. There is also a company named Acme based in Malvern, PA, but it's probably not the one either since it sells food. However, if your are referring to Warner Bros company, it is located in This is from the ever reliable and extremely accurate Wikipedia.
  11. Good question, but I'm not worried. I have genetics working for me!
  12. That right! I remember I had to promise not to diss you for 24 hour. That's a fair trade, not a loan.😠
  13. I need some studs in reserve in case your aim every improves. That's not greedy, just prudent insurance. !
  14. I see you have a definite short memory problem. He was in the herd you just tried to destroy! I recommend you see your doctor. There are some amazing advances for Alzheimer's now.🤔
  15. Only if this guy follows me there. His beard may tickle, but it would be worth it! 😛
  16. This brings back so many fun times from my youth.
  17. Hi Albert! Orchids are so beautiful and these are spectacular!
  18. Blah, blah, blah. We can all read the small print! Greedy!
  19. Wow!!!! I got a hat trick. Drew gave me three angry emojis in less that 20 minutes.
  20. I doubt it, but if you're right, I will just have to start again. That means fewer additions to your herd, greedy!
  21. Unlike you, my memory hasn't retired!
  22. ...and your memory like you is short. ( Not sure if Drew's aim has improved, so duck and cover everyone.)
  23. Pre-Ap World Geography? You're talking to a teacher. That isn't even freshman geography at the college level. It obvious you have even forgot the geography you learned at highschool!😛
  24. Did you forget you destroyed Canada recently?
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