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I loved the second of the poem...being alive is priceless moment sublimed...beautifully worded...nice poem!
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It was such a sweet way to ask for Valentine...it felt like a confession! So cute!!
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The process of fruit blooming in spring n the fruit falling when spring is away only to be regenerated into tree when the spring is back was described in so few words n in such a lovely way! U really have captured it well!!
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It is a nice poem. Feeling of being rejected well I know it only too well. I like your comparison of skydiving with rejection! N also I loved the way you described how the rejection led to wakeful nights crying n soaking the pillow with tears! Lovely!!
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Such true lines! It is no easy task to pull yourself from a dark spot n rise full of spirit! I loved your expressing it in such simple yet strong words!!
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Wow the 2nd prompt was really good...how sweetly told about little trail of souls N the 1st prompt was picturesque...I can see the after rain n the sun coming out from behind the clouds, forming a beautiful rainbow
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Chapter 3 Fractures and Judgement
Aviana commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 3 Fractures and Judgement
Fracture seemed very sad but honest. 'Brutal reality slaps like a switch' this words made my heart ache. Reality can sometimes be really cold and brutal. But Judgement was what touched me the most. I m in awe. It was RAW! It speaks so truly of the narrow mindedness of humans that I almost flinched when I read it. I could sense the bitterness in your words, n how deeply hurting it must be to come out in such awfully harsh form. Wonderful!! It is really like looking into the mirror. I m honestly in appreciation of your writing!! Thankz for writing this. -
Chapter 2 Resignation and Progression
Aviana commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 2 Resignation and Progression
even though the poem definitely have some pain underneath but I noticed the fight and spirit in it. Esp Self-pity is ugly It can swallow you whole Accept and move on An eventual goal in these lines...yes we need to accept and move onn... Your words are your voice which speak of your inner feelings which can not be said!! And you always do a fabulous job of expressing urself so beautifully in your words!!! I will keep my fingers crossed that you overcome this depressing stage soon -
Hey Gary, I have seen that you speak volumes in just few lines. Belonging...yeah I can get that. But I feel that for belonging people need to accept you for who you are. Acceptance automatically leads to belonging...I feel (please don't mind the childish babbling of mine) As always Amazing writing!!!
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Nice...all the poem's were beautiful in its own aspect but my favourite was blindly bleeding...the last four lines were the best!! Keep it up!!
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Wow...the way u compared the smell, sound, taste, touch, with your beloved was beautiful! Nicely potrayed!!
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Message for me was a superb! What I liked the best has to be the last three lines!! Promise was lovely...the promise of being there for someone always was heart touching!! life is short felt like asking us to see the beauty in our surrounding!! I loved how you started Shedding ...so true words!!
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Oh wow! Roped n tied was really interesting but my heart got stuck in good outlook! It was like a life lesson...positivity is what we need n let the joy come from within instead of laying blames gains us nothing! I thought the poem was telling us to find joy in little things....as always ur poems brighten my day!!
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NaPoWriMo 2016 - Week Three
Aviana commented on Valkyrie's story chapter in NaPoWriMo 2016 - Week Three
I have to say the same...waking up to such lovely poems was a joy!! -
Chapter 9 Ode to Something New, and Visit
Aviana commented on Headstall's story chapter in Chapter 9 Ode to Something New, and Visit
I loved your wildflower...to see beauty in such a neglected thing like that of wildflower is a beauty in itself but to actually word in such a lovely manner is beyond words...I think the next time m taking a walk...m definitely going to notice the flowers growing by the side of the street n remember this poem... Great writing!! -
The first line I read n instantly my mind remembered John Keats words A thing beauty is a joy forever n truly I celebrate this beauty by reading this poem...
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Loved it! The last line of drought was so lovely...burning for nature's quenching embrace...such beautiful use of words...
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NaPoWriMo 2016 - Week Four
Aviana commented on Valkyrie's story chapter in NaPoWriMo 2016 - Week Four
Great writing...(m actually running outta words)...wow...just wow!! -
NaPoWriMo 2016 - Week Three
Aviana commented on Valkyrie's story chapter in NaPoWriMo 2016 - Week Three
It is such a beautiful set of poems...but I think it was #18 poem which touched me the most...really we keep living alone n get so use to it n comfortable in it that we start believing we don't need anyone... Loss n Music of barn had imagery which I really liked...wonderful writings!! -
Wow....Word such an honest poem. We really have been relying so much on gadgets nowadays that we have forgotten the essence of curiosity, and gaining knowledge by our own strength... All your poems were awesome but I have to say my favorite was #12 poem. It shone like diamond!! Wonderful!!
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Wow...I never thought it like that...true I wouldn't have started writing if I didn't experience it...N you are right our experience does mold us, n make us who we are! N I knew that you will understand... thankz for your words
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Oh Thank you so much Gary...Yeah, you see my dad was more than half the year outta house, n my sister left when I was 11 and my mum was well always busy with herself unless my grades are falling that is...(she use to get quite brutal at those times )...so I guess staying in home alone, doing homework and no one to talk to maybe did the trick
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Because you don't quit is why I say you are strong!! N light will come to you..seeing your will...it'll shine upon you!!
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Ok...Gary then...!!
