Graeme
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I remember reading this at another site, but I can't remember how it ends. I am looking forward to reading it again fresh. Landon definitely has some issues. I can appreciate his resentment at being forced to move, but the scene at the start with the police shows that the problems predate the move. I do remember what one of his problems is, but I'll wait until it reappears in the story before commenting. I did spot the clues in this chapter, though
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Thanks, Steve! I did as much research as I could, but there were certain parts I needed to make an educated guess as to what would happen. I know I'm unlikely to have gotten everything right, but as long as it's all believable, I'm happy
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Fire-affected farmers receive a helping hand
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Thanks, Tony! As I said on one of the other reviews, I am going to keep writing, but I don't have anything close to being ready to post at the moment.
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Thank you! I will be continuing to write, but I'm only in the early planning stages for my next novel so it probably won't start posting for at least a couple of months. I'll try to post some short stories in the meantime, but I can't promise.
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Thank you! I could've written a couple more chapters as things wound down from the crisis started by Troy being taken, but I felt that would have just been dragging the story out. I felt it was better to end it here, and then show Lisa returning home.
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Thank you! Yes, things have changed, and while change isn't always good (or bad), some good things definitely came out of this one. Some bad things, too. While some people will disagree, for Troy and Bradley to be almost cut-off from one set of grandparents is, to me, necessary but sad. Alan and Peter have also drifted away from some of their old friends, though whether that is good, bad, or just one of those things that happens is something that's not clear in the story. It's another change, though.
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Thank you, Rob! The story was always going to have a happy ending, but the path to that ending wasn't going to be smooth. I tried to make what happened as realistic as possible, based on my own experiences with kids, and the research I did on the legal side. A judge in the Children's Court will be one with good insight, because children are an alien race that can be hard to understand at times...
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The judge didn't question Troy about the zipper incident because the police had already done so in the previous chapter. What the judge was looking for was whether there were other, not-as-innocuous incidents that would raise a red flag in the judge's mind. He was also looking for more than what Troy said, but how he said it, how relaxed he was, etc. It was the sum of those things that told him that Troy and Bradley were not being abused. Oh, and yes, I practised macrame in my youth
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Thank you! I would've like the story to be longer, too, but I have an obligation to end a story when it is appropriate to do so. Alan, Peter, Troy, and Bradley's story ends here. There is more to be told, but that's another story...
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Thank you! I'm sad it's over, too, but I don't like extending a story past the end. I could write more about how Alan and Peter handle being parents, but that's ancedotes, not stories. If you want to see what being a parent can be like, I suggest you check out my Family Snippets, which are unedited snippets of my own personal family life
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Thank you! I will consider a sequel, but I'm not making any promises.
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Thank you! Yes, the judge indicated he was going to pay attention to more than just what was said. He looked at how it was said, and how the two boys reacted to their uncles. He used all of that in making his judgement as to whether Peter was a risk to the boys. Smacking is, I believe, illegal in New Zealand, but moderate and appropriate force is, as I understand it, acceptable in Australia. A single smack isn't the end of the world. Excessive smacking is. The two extremes are obvious. The problem lies in where to draw the line between the those extremes.
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No pressure I have a number of other things I want to write next, but I'm certainly going to keep Steve and Keidan in mind for a spin-off story. That won't be for some time, however, so don't look for anything soon in that area.
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Thank you! The scene with the judge took a lot of work, and I have to thank C James, rec, and Tom for a lot of input into that scene. They did a lot to improve that scene
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No plans at the moment, but since we have two new foster-dads, there's always hope for a spin-off story
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It was Saturday morning when Alan knocked on the hospital-room door and poked his head inside. “Lisa?” He saw his sister sitting up in her hospital bed, a nervous smile on her face. “Hi, Alan. Do I look okay?” Alan smiled as he stepped inside. “You look fine.” Her hair was short, she had bandages on both arms, and there was some scarring visible on her exposed skin, but she was recognisably the mother Troy and Bradley had known. He could tell that she had used makeup to try to minimise the app
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I use narration, not dialogue. What you're asking is how to express laughter in dialogue, and the simplest answer is not to. There are a wide variety of sounds we can make that we don't normally consider to be dialogue, laughter is merely one of them. As an aside, I have a son who says LOL in conversations, but he's not laughing when he says it. He uses it to indicate he's amused.
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https://www.gayauthors.org/forums/blog/634/entry-16557-new-author-advice-1/ I used the Author Advice tag to find all items with that tag
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Jager is still one of the best short stories I've ever read. If you don't read any of the others, read that one.
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I love Tyler's level of maturity. I think that's what Ryder needs. Despite all the time he spends with the older guys on the team, Ryder is still a young teenager with a lot of growing up to do. Having a more mature, and considerate, boyfriend will help him grow in adulthood.
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Thank you. The worst (criminal charges hanging over Peter's head) has gone away, but the guys still have troubles they need to overcome. Unfortunately, those troubles mean that their times together are limited. At least they can still see each other, even if they can't spend as much time together as they would like.
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Troy and Bradley are both loving children. For Troy to be missing Peter is not unusual. Remember when Troy gave Alan a hug because he was having a 'sad day'? Troy is also a self-centered little nuisance at times, but that's typical of someone that age. It takes time before they start thinking of other people first.
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You're right, but Alan is protective, not only of the boys but also his sister. Given his past reluctance to let Lisa know what's been going on, he's likely to continue to hesitate before telling her.
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The Lyntons have done wrong, and I'm sure they know they've done wrong, but their motive was, in their minds, pure. That doesn't make what they did right, especially with the effect it's having on not only Peter, but also Alan and the boys.
