The violent scenes in the first few chapters are not representative of the story as a whole. While these initial scenes were painful to read and over the top at times, they were successful in making me want to read the whole story so that I could see Ian survive and find a better life.
The Pentecostal theme was interesting for me personally because my family was Pentecostal in my early years. My memories of that time are foggy but I certainly remember a pervasive feeling that like the devil was always watching me and reading my mind. Even without any child abuse, that kind of religious intensity is very damaging for children’s mental health, in my opinion. Probably goes a long way into explaining why I’m an Atheist now. So while I appreciated Ian’s spiritual journey, I wonder why it was so easy for Ian to come to the conclusion that God made the good things happen, but not the bad. Did he really believe Jesus was carrying him while his dad tortured him? Sounds more like he was abandoned in hell, to me.
I also understand how it feels to be raised in a bubble, and how frightening and exhilarating the world feels once the bubble is escaped. I related to Ian’s feelings often as he tentatively explored the world around him. It felt good to read about all the positive experiences he had once he left home. He was certainly lucky to find people who cared. Even people with the purest intentions and kindest hearts can be stomped on by the world. So I don’t believe what anyone said when they told Ian it wasn’t luck.
Oh look at me getting all emo. Your story hit a lot of notes for me and made me think a lot. I am glad I read it and glad you posted it. It’s been a full in decade since you wrote it, so who knows if you will ever see my comment? Either way I hope you do, so you know that your writing is seen and thoroughly enjoyed.