Mattyboy

Amy might be smarter/ more socially aware than we think. She lives nearby and may have an opinion about George. And she might be acting to make sure Colt and Noah can be friends with each other without getting beaten up by Brett or murdered by George. The cute boyfriend play might just be bonus points.

Fair enough. I support her being treated well, in this town that doesn't seem to be a hotbed of that.

Amy gets status points for dating "the new guy," and some cock (which she seemed to like), and Colt isn't otherwise asking for much. It's a better deal than Rylee and Brett are getting with each other.

Small town, Colt may be the best bet for Amy out of maybe a pretty limited field. And a very useful relationship for keeping the heat off Colt for being friends with the gay kid.

I've had the "fix the wording in one line" bloom out into "delete the scene." This can be overthinking, alright, but it can also be that the little hunch that something wasn't right with it all was sensing a real structural issue. I've often had people reading my (nonfiction) stuff say to me "so what's the point here?" and I then say a solid summarizing line that does a good job of making that clear. I know, but that can't do this for myself. You picked out the bit that needs work because you kinda know it needs work and there's something not right. It's way easier to start with a subordinate clause than it is with "what's the point of this scene?" but that's sometimes the start of pulling the cord that unravels the veil and exposes that what's underneath is an unnecessary side-quest. (My sense is that AI can't help you here, but I'm aware that people vary on that issue) Cut and paste it into a "deleted scenes" folder. If it turns out your story needs it, you can put it back in later.

Hmm, still many mysteries but it does seem like maybe "George is awful" and "Noah has a health problem" might both be true and maybe aren't even related (unless its ulcers or something). Some nice quiet moving forward in this chapter. (Which probably means something terrible is about to happen, this is a @mastershakeme story, after all)

Or something even weirder like poisoning? Ivermectin pills dressed up as vitamins? I don't have any doubt that George is awful, but it's also possible Noah has a cancer or something and that "I was sick" was true. We do not know much at all for sure about what goes on next door.

Colt's a teenager but it's bit annoying how unevenly he's getting there. He absolutely thinks Noah being abused, but hands him a joint without looking over his shoulder to see if George is watching. Colt's annoyed that Noah doesn't entirely trust him, but Noah can't afford to trust people that might set George off.

Feels like it might be very good for Colt. A lot of "sounds-good" things weren't all that great, and he stood up for himself. He's going to need the practice, but perhaps some lessons learned. And Amy seems to be actually nice.

Yeah, Simon needs to get going on the Ben and Justin legal defense sidestory before they get sideswiped again.

Oh no, I've caught up just in time for the cliffhanger! Ugh that was rude. Oh no Nathan has been stabbed!

Justin obviously needs a new car. If only he had a father-in-law who's recently inherited a fortune to lean on for that. Or, y'know, something.

I was expecting a good deal more of Simon swinging into action on Benjamin and Justin's behalf. I wonder if Ben's passport app can be amended so he's listed as a full Monty?

Yeah, we had some foreshadowing but that was pretty awful. And yeah, whatever Martin and Natasha liked about each other to start with seems to be pretty over with.

Well, yes, but this struck me as a case of meeting people where they are. The world's changed (and is changing) a lot, and not all at the same pace.

guessing there's maybe quite a bit about this that Natasha don't know.

Amazing weave of a very fun "slice-of-life" chapter with bittersweet elements of Alex's past and personality. Parker having a recorded song out is new, right?

Yay, we're back

The orphic fragments were a very nice ornament to this. Will we be getting more of the series here?

Oh, the picture gallery is fun.

So far this story seems to be what you'd get if the old "rattlesnake joke" crossed-over with a deleted scene from A Midsummer Night's Dream. So probably, yes. I liked the teaser that maybe Eros will show up as a tiebreaker. We haven't had a solid brat-god sighting around here since @Demiurge went on hiatus, and it's about time.

"just swallow. Don't think about it." . . . "shocked by how close he had just come to blowing his load" These guys need to check in with their representation: Do they just need to do it, or does the forest need to see it? Is edging the right play in this moment? Lord, what fools these mortals be!

It can be tough to get off with just the tip, but he is a god, after all.

It was just the tip of the antlers! I'm confident Pan can do something about getting them off, since it was just the tip.

Thank you, Fry, for continuing to wave this flag.