SilentandBroken

I’ve seen a thing or 2 in my time.

Glad I’m not the only one.

Ok helluva chapter. I didn’t expect the loud voice to be Joey’s. Andy’s vitals crashing make me think something else is happening because that typically doesn’t happen with concussions. As a former EMT myself l, I’ve seen a few. The conversations with both spirits while knocked out seem to repeat the same message and warning. I have the feeling they’ve got something to do with Jr’s father. Plus, the way Joey handled Jt, may have begun to expose something about Joey that is not yet clear.

Don’t get me wrong..I understand his logic..but..idk..I guess hitting on friends he knows well enough to feel safe on is safer than someone else he doesn’t. Maybe that one time I saw it happen there was more to the story I wasn’t aware of. Maybe it wasn’t his first attempt on this dude and he didn’t take no for an answer. Maybe it made the other snap . Who knows. It definitely is a trial and error thing for sure and yeah you gotta start somewhere..somewhere safe. I guess I’m just more of a more anxious and cautious type from my history. I know I’d lose sleep over this if I were in his spot.

Just come back because we have a vivacious appetite for your stories.. well I do at least. I don’t know about the rest of you 😝

Hmm short chapter. That’s ok. Sometimes they’re necessary. James seems to maybe put a lure in Ollie’s pond to see what bites…maybe. But, I’m still put off by how free Ollie feels towards almost exploiting his friendships with some of his other friends as sexual possibilities. I’ve seen that go way sideways IRL with friends. So sideways the one advanced on took so offense to it they beat up the boy making the advances. Badly. Surprisingly no charges were filed. The teen doing the advancing spent a few days in the hospital for observation. I guess he wouldn’t give the law or his parents a name. Needless to say that friendship disappeared. Ollie might want to be a little more careful. Maybe I’m reading into it wrong or too much. But based on what I saw in my real life experience, this is tracking the same way bc that boy acted the same way…like Ollie doesn’t think they’d take offense to sexual advances at all. Does anyone else see Ollie’s behavior that way?

I’m right aren’t I lol

Hmmmm, I don’t like that TJ was coincidentally around on the road…almost as if he was looking for Andy.

I feel Walter is a dangerous shark not just to Josh but Greg especially as he’s the one who would be the one to be in position to expose the whole project

That’s a bit further east if I recall. But, one thing I’ve noticed is Appalachian folk are the epitome of resilience.

It only took ..25 yrs to get 5 yrs straight of therapy. 😔

Nice story so far. Lots of moving parts. I do question how the judge can basically throw his weight around but it’s a small town with a lot of history he is a huge part of it. Anyway, it kept the coals hot and story moving so it’s a minor point. I don’t know why Roger is confused. He should know Andy well enough by now to have figured him out already more than anyone else except the Judge. Again, minor point. Other than that, I’m enjoying it. I’m just across the Hollar so to speak across the Ohio River and near Cincinnati. I bump into folks who hail from the Eastern Kentucky region in the heart of Appalachia. They are some of the toughest folks you’ll ever meet. I don’t know how they do it to be honest. I just don’t l know how they survive year to year. But they do.

Better. I don’t like hearing boys get beat to a pulp. Getting kissed however…

Unfortunately I can relate to the beginning of joey’s story as I was deceived by an older student. You related the feelings Joey felt exactly how I felt. I had friends too and slowly became a loner except for ..him. I’ll stop here so I don’t take over this thing but …I’ll say this…Joey’s father is a real sack of shit.

Btw I am committed now

Oh and the way Joey tore out of Andy’s house and he already sharing his father is a preacher..I sure hope he’s not one of those hard liners who view Corporal punishment as the proper standard for the rod of correction. If Joey had misty eyes like Andy thought, I am afraid I’m right.

Great chapter. I giggled out loud at “little Mikey”. Too cute. Timmy is either on to Andy or secretly crushing on him and sees how Andy is acting over Joey and is jealous..or at least doesn’t accept gays. Time will tell there I’m sure. Debbie’s warning seems more to me to be about Timmy vs the bully. Perhaps she’s seen or heard it. After all, the fight was in the lunch line and no doubt the rumor mill catches faster than a grass fire in July in the Midwest

When Joey went to use the food tray to block tells me he’s dealt with bullies before. Proud of Andy for serving the bully a knuckle sandwich for his lunch. I have no doubt Joey soaked up all the attention Andy was giving him basically cleaning him up in the bathroom afterwards.. too cute. Also, I really appreciate how you use Andy’s thoughts to monologue his day. I think you have the mentality of 15yo closeted teen boy down pat.

Same. I love how in depth this story is getting. The deep rogue players can’t stop at Walter. This has me on the edge of my seat. Greg feels it, but is also torn between duty and family. I love the family..well except for Claire’s mother ..gag! I worry someone in the family is going to get killed off. Hopefully not but I’m waiting for the other shoe to drop

This is the most critical point. Tweaking doesn’t mean scrapping. You’ve already established a great base and structure. Work with it. A story is like a clay mold. Once you’ve established a firm foundation, then you can work with the rest with flexibility

But you did it and that is enough

Thx. I’ll start there.

@EnochGreat start. I loved the way you described the interaction between Mike and Sammy. I loved Sammy’s confusion and yet…clarity. I read a few comments below, I think your excited about describing baseball might’ve got to you. That’s ok! Because you slowed down a bit there after . That said, this is the first story I’m reading of yours. Sounds like I’m starting the wrong story first. Is there one I should start before this one?

I’ve never had Taco Bell make me question life choices. White Castle however…