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Trials and Tribulations - 3. Chapter 3 New Friend

What will the Principal say? What's the consequences? What's up between Andy and Joey?

Chapter 3
New Friendship

I figured, sooner or later, we would be called to the office, but I didn’t expect it to be within ten minutes. This was one of those consequences I had said damn to. I guess it was time to pay the piper.

I shrugged, threw my arm around Joey’s shoulder, and with more confidence than I really felt, I told Joey, “Let’s go see Mr. Horn and get this over with.”

Turning to Roger and Timmy, “Look, I’ll just tell Mr. Horn exactly what happened and why and everything will be okay. Besides, everybody knows what a jerk JT is. I’ll catch up with you two in fourth period biology.”

Roger looked as concerned as I felt on the inside and Timmy just looked, well he was staring at Joey with a, I don’t know what kind of look. It was like he was an alpha male wolf staring down a challenger for the pack.

“Timmy”, I said to him to get his attention.

He blinked and turned to look at me and said, “What?”

“Be sure to tell Debbie I’m okay and we’ll talk later, okay?” I asked.

He nodded and I led Joey out of the restroom hoping he hadn’t noticed the way Timmy was looking at him. The hall wasn’t too crowded since most students were still in the lunchroom. But there were a few of them around and some were friends of JT’s. I caught a few stares and quickly dropped my arm off of Joey’s shoulder and quickened our pace.

Once we got to the office I could see through the glass in Mr. Horn’s door that he was on the phone. Mrs. Perry, the secretary, looked up and saw who we were.

She asked, “What can I do for you Andy?”

“We were told Mr. Horn wanted to talk to us.” I answered.

“Have a seat, Mr. Horn is on the phone at the moment and when he’s finished, I’ll let him know you are here to see him.” She replied.

I looked at Joey and nodded towards the chairs along the wall and we walked over and sat down. I was wondering if Mr. Horn was going to expel me. I wasn’t worried about Joey, he hadn’t done anything. I on the other hand, did throw a punch, in self-defense mind you. Okay it wasn’t strictly in self-defense; but, it was in defense of someone: Joey. I was still worried because they have a zero tolerance for fighting here at Pine Hills. I was also concerned how Dad was going to react. And then there was Timmy and how he was staring at Joey in the restroom. What was that all about? Then I felt it. Joey’s leg and mine were touching. Every other thought in my head flew right out the window and I was totally focused on that contact. I could feel the heat from the contact racing up my leg to my groin causing little Mikey to inflate. I had even forgotten that the back of my shirt was still damp.

As I started to turn my head to look at Joey, Mr. Horn’s office door abruptly opened. There he stood all six foot five, two hundred and fifty pounds of him, looking directly at me. He won the brief staring contest in record time as I quickly looked down at my shoes. Suddenly, I was a bundle of nerves. My leg started shaking against Joey’s and he looked from Mr. Horn to me, placed his hand on my arm.

He leaned in, and whispered, “Everything will be alright.”

Wow I thought, here he was trying to make me feel better. I felt like such a dork. But I didn’t have much time to contemplate it as Mr. Horn cleared his throat.

“Mr. Collins and Mr. Adams, would you be so kind to join me in my office?” He asked, but in a way that left us no option to say ‘no thank you, I’ll pass'.

Although, I really did want to take a pass this time; we both stood and walked into his office and took a seat in the two chairs in front of his desk, as he closed the door behind us. He sat down at his desk and picked up two folders.

Opening one, he looked at Joey and said, “I see this is your first day here Mr. Adams. I want to apologize for what took place here. We have a zero tolerance for fighting and bullying. It appears we had both happen, either to you or in front of you, on your very first day.”

Okay, I was shocked! I think I just heard Mr. Horn apologize to Joey. Now, don’t get me wrong, I was really happy that he did; because Joey had done nothing wrong and was the victim here. But, I was still shocked.

“Thank you sir, it could have been a lot worse if Andy hadn’t stepped in and defended me. I thought for sure that that guy was going to kill me the way he was looking at me.” Joey replied.

“This brings us to Mr. Collin’s actions today.” Mr. Horn said as he picked up the other folder. He thumbed through it for a minute and placed it on his desk as he looked up at me.

“Would you like to tell me what happened and why you thought you had no other choice but to take the actions you did?” Mr. Horn asked.

I thought about it for a second and decided it was best just to tell it as it happened, leaving out my obsession of Joey, of course. I told him exactly how it happened, Joey being shoved into me, dumping most of his tray on my back, JT calling Joey a fag, not once but twice, JT punching Joey in the nose as hard as he could, and then looking like he was going to go in for the kill.

I looked Mr. Horn square in the eyes and told him, “Mr. Horn, everyone knows JT is a bully and has a crazy temper. I’ve seen him half beat guys to death and laugh at them. And he never gets into trouble over it, because he’s smart about it or people lie for him.”

I swallowed hard and plowed ahead, “I’m not one that goes looking for trouble. I guess that’s my school folder you were looking through and you can see I have never been in a fight at school ever before.” I pointed at the folder on his desk. “I always try to talk things through with people, except today. I just met Joey today and I have no clue if he is gay or not. Frankly, it’s none of my business. If Joey wants to tell me he is gay or not that’s up to him. JT was calling him a fag in a hateful way, trying to hurt him and embarrass him in front of everyone in the lunch room. Then without reason or cause he assaulted him. Even then JT wasn’t done; he started towards him in a threatening manner and started to open his mouth to spew more hate.”

I paused taking a big breath and continued, “I wasn’t going to be one of those people that do nothing and just walk away. Even if Joey was gay, no one has the right to treat anyone that way. Everyone has the right to be who they are without people like JT assaulting them. So seeing that words were not going to stop JT, I used what force I thought necessary to prevent further harm to come to Joey. I am sorry it came to that. Now, I am going to have to watch my back; because I know JT or his friends will want to get even with me for what I did. But what else could I have done? Run for help and have JT hurt him bad while help was on the way? I believe I did the right thing. However, if you think I was wrong, I will take my punishment without complaint. But, I still believe I did what I had to and would do it again!”

I think my dad would have been proud of my closing argument. I think I hit every strong point I had going for me and threw myself on the mercy of the court with my apology and acceptance of any punishment. I looked at Joey and seeing him smile at me, made me smile, even considering the circumstances.

“I’ve already talked to several people,” Mr. Horn started “and they all confirm what you have told me. However, with the zero tolerance policy set by the School Board, I have no choice but to punish you for fighting.”

Here it comes I thought, suspension.

“But, I do have some flexibility.” He continued. Okay, here’s some hope for me, I thought.

“You have two options. The first is a three day suspension, starting now. Or you could work your three days off working the concession stand the next three home football games, your choice.”

I thought about it for a nanosecond and told him, “I’d like to work off my punishment at the concession stand.”

Joey spoke up, “I think it’s only fair if I helped him work it off.”

I looked over at him and said, “No way Joey, you didn’t do anything wrong. You were the victim. You didn’t start anything or even throw a punch.”

“No, but you made sure I wasn’t hurt worse. It’s only fair I repay you by helping you now. Mr. Horn?” he said and looked back at the principal.

“Alright, everything is decided. Both of you report to the stadium this Friday night at six pm ready to do whatever you are asked to do. I’ll be by to check up on you and see that everything is going smoothly. Any questions?” he asked.

We both shook our heads no.

He stood and said, “JT has been suspended for five days for using unacceptable, hateful, insulting, and provocative words and for starting a fight on school grounds that’s in violation of school board policy. He also will not be allowed to take part in Friday night’s football game. Those five days should give him time to cool his heels and to drive home the point. He’ll also have to answer to his coach for missing a week of practice, plus the game. When he comes back next Monday, I suggest you let the past be the past and he had better too.”

“Off the record Andy, I’m proud of you. On the record, no more fighting. Both of you have Mrs. Perry write you a pass and head to class.”

I smiled and nodded. I really didn’t know what to say to all of that. I was just glad I wasn’t suspended and have my Dad on my case too.

We stopped and got our passes and headed to class. As it turned out we both had biology together. But our lockers weren’t together, so we bumped fists and headed in different directions to our own locker to grab our books and I got a Red Hot Chili Peppers Asterisk tee shirt out I used for just stuff like this to change out of my wet shirt. When I walked in, I handed Mr. Moore my pass and noticed everyone was looking at me. As I glanced around the room I saw Joey had gotten here ahead of me and was sitting in the back next to an empty seat. I also saw Timmy and Roger were here too. I nodded at them and turned back to Mr. Moore as he finished reading the pass.

“Glad you could join us Andy. Please take a seat.” He said.

I walked back to take the seat next to Joey. As I passed Timmy, he kind of looked at me funny. “What is it with Timmy and his looks today?” I thought.

After passing out his outline for this semester’s class and going over his class rules, Mr. Moore allowed us some free time to talk or whatever as long as we were quiet about it.

I asked Joey, “Are you riding the bus home today?”

He said, “Yeah, I plan to. Why?”

“Well, Roger is coming over after school to hang out and maybe play some video games or something. I was wondering if you would like to come over too since we all live on the same street and all. You don’t have to if you don’t want to. There’s no pressure or anything. I just wanted to let you know it was cool if you wanted to.” I felt all those butterflies returning and knew I was starting to ramble on, so I stopped. I also kinda told a lie, I hadn’t asked Roger yet, but I knew he would.

“I would love, I mean, I’d like that. Yeah, that’s cool of you to ask.” He said starting to blush for using the word love.

I didn’t want to embarrass him more so I said nothing about it, but I was glad I wasn’t the only one that blushed. The rest of the period we talked about our visit to the office and JT being suspended. I really liked this guy. He was so easy to talk to and I loved watching him talk. The way his lips would move as he formed his words was mesmerizing. They were so red and full, so kissable. Oh My God! No I didn’t just think that!!! No!

Joey could tell something was wrong and asked, “Is something wrong? Did I say something?”

“No.” I lied. “I was just thinking about my dad and what he is going to say about me fighting. And I just remembered, I think I slept through our government class. Did he give us any homework?”

“Yeah he did. He wanted us to pick out a current world event and write a five hundred word paper telling him how it affects you by Friday.” he answered.

Sighing, I thought homework on the first day of school should be totally against the law. Then an idea popped into my head and I knew exactly what I was going to write about. Just the other day a friend of mine from Nigeria on the Gay Authors web site told me he was almost robbed and killed. Yes, I’ve talked to others online about being gay and stuff; but, they didn’t really know my private information, like where I lived and my last name and stuff. He said it was just a bunch of guys who had robbed a bank and were checking cars or something. But what I had read in the Sunday’s paper yesterday told a different story. At least sixty-seven people were killed by a radical Muslim sect known as Boko Haram who promised to continue its bloody sectarian fight against Nigeria’s weak central government, leaving residents nervously moving through empty streets waiting for the next attack. It looked to me like a civil war was coming between Christians and Muslims. I would make the case that a stronger and more democratic central government like ours was needed there to protect my friend’s human rights; and that perhaps our government should do more to aid my friend’s fellow citizens.

I thanked Joey as the bell rung and said that I would see him at the bus after school since we didn’t have any more classes together. I caught up with Roger and Timmy in the hall and told them what all happened in the office as we walked to our lockers which were next to each other. They both told me they would have my back if anything went down. I knew they would, but it felt good hearing it.

I had French fifth period. Why we had to learn French was beyond me. I mean, who spoke French any more but the French? English was now the diplomatic language and I already knew it, well kind of knew it.

Debbie had this class with me and I had to tell her everything from beginning to end. When I finished, she had this strange look. I raised a questioning eye brow at her.

She said, “Be careful with JT, Andy. And be careful around people you don't know really well.”

Okay, I had no clue what she meant by that last statement, unless………

“I’ll keep my eyes open and I’ll be careful too. So I guess we’ll both be working Friday night.” I said, trying to change the subject.

We talked a few more minutes before class ended. I had study hall sixth period, since I needed that period free to play baseball in the spring, and it seemed like it would never end. I mean it was hard sitting there for fifty minutes and not being able to talk just because it was the library. I could have used the time to start on my paper for government class, but I knew already where I was going with it and had until Friday.

Finally the bell rung and since I had brought my backpack with me, I didn’t need to go to my locker. Instead I headed straight to the bus. Being the first one there, I said hi to Mr. Banks, the bus driver, as I got on and headed to the back. After about five or six people got on, Roger garrived and sat down beside me bumping fists.

I asked him, “Hey you want to come over and hang this afternoon? I invited Joey over and he said he would. We can take turns on the Wii or whatever.”

He smiled nudging my shoulder with his and said, “Sure, it’ll be good to have some competition for a change.”

“Smart ass”, I said, laughing at him.

“Hey guys.” Joey said sitting down in the seat in front of us.

When we got off the bus, Joey pointed down the street to where he lived. While we were walking up to my house, Roger pointed out his house next to mine and told Joey he and I had lived next door to each other since we were born.

I unlocked the door and let them both go in before me. As he entered, Joey looked around and said, “Wow, this house rocks, Andy!”

“Thanks Joey. It’s just home to me. But, it’s not mine, its my Dad’s.” I said.

Roger and I took our shoes off and dropped our backpacks by the door. Joey did likewise and they followed me up to my room. I walked over to turn on the Wii and Roger jumped on my king size water bed grabbing the remote from my night stand to turn on the new Samsung fifty-five inch 3D LED TV I got for my birthday in July. Joey just stood in the door way looking around my room. I had posters of Alex Rodriguez, Derek Jeter, Mariano Rivera, Andy Pettitte, Rajon Rondo, John Wall, Brandon Knight, Josh Harrellson, and Rupp Arena.

After looking around a little more, Joey walked over to my bed, sat down and asked, “Are you rich or something?”

I quickly shot Roger a look telling him to keep his mouth shut and turned to Joey hoping he didn’t see it.

“I’m just a spoiled only child of a single parent who loves me very much.” I offered.

I never liked giving away too much information about myself, as people tended to treat me differently if they knew my family history. Roger was different of course, but I had just met Joey. I liked him and really wanted to be friends, but I needed to be careful.

I threw in Major League Baseball 2K10 and let Roger and Joey play first. They sat on the end of the bed and I took a seat in my desk chair. It was fun watching Joey being all animated. But my focus kept coming back to his lips. They just seemed perfect to me with his curly blond hair. He had a little button nose that also looked perfect.

From out of nowhere, Joey jumped up with a worried look and said, “I need to use your phone.”

I tossed him the wireless phone off my desk. He quickly dialed and waited for someone to answer.

“Hi Mom it’s me. Wait!” he seemed nervous as he waited for whomever. “Hi Dad, No Dad, I’m just down the street at a new friend’s house. Yes Dad, I just forgot. Yes Dad, I would have told you all about it when I got home. Yes Dad, I will Dad.” Hanging up the phone ending the painful conversation, he quickly turned with a scared look

He said, “I got to go, sorry.” I swear I thought I saw tears in his eyes for the second time today.

And before I could say anything, he was out the door of my room and down the stairs putting on his shoes as I got to the top of the stairs.

“Call me later!” I called out to him as he was opening the front door and stepping out. I’m sure he didn’t hear me as fast as he took off.

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Really a nice flow to the story; fun easy read. Well edited too, my compliments to you and your team. thumbsupsmileyanim.gif I do have a question for the team, you used the expression "pay the fiddler" - I'm more familiar with "pay the piper", as in Pied Piper???

 

So Andy's a Yankee fan; I'll try to get past that. tongue.png

 

Andy's "argument" to the principal was excellent - definitely had that skilled lawyer touch to it. The Q Man will be proud of you, I'm sure! thumbsup.gif

 

Sounds like Joey has a tough row to hoe with his father. sceptic.gif

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On 11/09/2011 11:17 AM, Conner said:
Really a nice flow to the story; fun easy read. Well edited too, my compliments to you and your team. thumbsupsmileyanim.gif I do have a question for the team, you used the expression "pay the fiddler" - I'm more familiar with "pay the piper", as in Pied Piper???

 

So Andy's a Yankee fan; I'll try to get past that. tongue.png

 

Andy's "argument" to the principal was excellent - definitely had that skilled lawyer touch to it. The Q Man will be proud of you, I'm sure! thumbsup.gif

 

Sounds like Joey has a tough row to hoe with his father. sceptic.gif

Yup, pay the fiddler! Around here there's a lot of square dancing going on every weekend with the fiddle and banjo as the main instruments. So pay the fiddler here is the same as pay the piper. No fiddler, no square dance. :)

 

Thanks for reading and your warm comments. They make writing the story worth while in ways a lot of people don't understand.

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On 11/09/2011 01:06 PM, Kiltie69 said:
This aint gonna be good poor Joey, not looking forward to 4. nice to see them all hit it off though
Time tells all tales as I like to say. But Joey did seem upset for some reason.

 

I like to comment on something here that Conner brought up. I really do like to give credit where credit is due and Trevor deserves a lot of credit for taking what I hand him and making me look a lot better at this than I really am.

 

I don't know how Joey feels exactly; but it appears Andy sure likes what he sees when he's looking at Joey. But will he overcome his fears to let Joey know? Again, time tells all tales ;)

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Nice build-up and story so far, eager to see where it is going. I have never known anyone in Joey's situation, so I guess we must expect bad news here. That's sad, also i RL, brings out tears for sure.

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On 11/09/2011 10:16 PM, kkdc said:
Nice build-up and story so far, eager to see where it is going. I have never known anyone in Joey's situation, so I guess we must expect bad news here. That's sad, also i RL, brings out tears for sure.
Thank you for reading and taking your time to leave a review. That means a lot to me. Thank you.

 

I can't say exactly what's going to happen, but maybe with a friend like Andy, things will get better. But you're right, no matter how things turn out, it's a sad situation.

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On 11/12/2011 07:21 PM, Michael9344 said:
Okay. Still enjoying the story. Like I said, for a first try, you are doing great. Looking forward to more chapters.
Thank you Mike for taking your time to read the story and leave a review. It encourages me to write a better story.

 

Chapter 4 is with the editors.

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I agree with Conner that the story is an easy read. There are one to two places where it backs up a bit and gets slightly stilted but on the whole it is still very easy on the eye. Things are moving on and developing at just the right pace. Nice work

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On 11/24/2011 03:52 AM, Nephylim said:
I agree with Conner that the story is an easy read. There are one to two places where it backs up a bit and gets slightly stilted but on the whole it is still very easy on the eye. Things are moving on and developing at just the right pace. Nice work
I'm hoping I'm learning as I go and by the middle of the story everyone will enjoy it and not be distracted by a mistake on my part. Thanks Nephy :)
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I like the pace of this. it is quick and steady. I'm liking Andy, and i wonder what's up with Joey. I have a bad feeling about his home life it concerns me. the principal's reaction was really cool.

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On 12/27/2011 09:19 AM, Jammi said:
I like the pace of this. it is quick and steady. I'm liking Andy, and i wonder what's up with Joey. I have a bad feeling about his home life it concerns me. the principal's reaction was really cool.
I like to think that not all principals are jerks. :)
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I like the way this is unfolding. Joey sounds so cute but it has to be hard being the kid of a preacher. Can't wait to read more. Write faster Billy!!! :P

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On 04/17/2012 11:02 AM, K.C. said:
I like the way this is unfolding. Joey sounds so cute but it has to be hard being the kid of a preacher. Can't wait to read more. Write faster Billy!!! :P
*rolls eyes* I'm still ahead of you... for now :P
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Hmmm, pondering here why Joey had to run home so quickly???? I'm getting a gut feeling that him and his family may have voluntarily moved to get away from some bad ju-ju that was surrounding Joey and to try and protect him. Some preachers can be very strict but I'm not sensing that Joey's father is being strict just because he can be or he is naturally strict. I'm sensing more of a protective vibe going on here. I have no proof of that as we know nothing of the families past. It's just a feeling really.

 

Really wondering about Timmy as well. Could it be jealousy or could it be the fact that he has figured Andy out and he is trying to be protective? Trying to prevent Andy from getting hurt and having Andy's secret become the gossip of the town?? Timmy seems like a pretty observant person so maybe he has figured Andy out. Should be interesting if we ever find that answer out.

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On 05/02/2013 06:44 AM, CW Prince said:
Hmmm, pondering here why Joey had to run home so quickly???? I'm getting a gut feeling that him and his family may have voluntarily moved to get away from some bad ju-ju that was surrounding Joey and to try and protect him. Some preachers can be very strict but I'm not sensing that Joey's father is being strict just because he can be or he is naturally strict. I'm sensing more of a protective vibe going on here. I have no proof of that as we know nothing of the families past. It's just a feeling really.

 

Really wondering about Timmy as well. Could it be jealousy or could it be the fact that he has figured Andy out and he is trying to be protective? Trying to prevent Andy from getting hurt and having Andy's secret become the gossip of the town?? Timmy seems like a pretty observant person so maybe he has figured Andy out. Should be interesting if we ever find that answer out.

The next couple of chapters will explain Joey's situation clearly.

 

I promise that at some point the motive behind Timmy's reaction will be revealed.

 

Again, thank you very much for leaving a review. It's the only reward my team and I receive.

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A group of typical teenage boys. You have captured the essence of lads that age really well, from the wild swing in emotional tugs, to the forgetful nature of responsibilities to be informative to their parents.

I am not sure I understood the full meaning behind Debbie's warning. :P

You have taken Joey and turned him into a really rather charming young man. :) It is no wonder that Andy is somewhat attracted to him, despite his good looks and wonderful eyes. Cherry red lips and stunning smile.

What more could a gay boy want. ;)

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On 05/10/2013 08:53 AM, Yettie One said:
A group of typical teenage boys. You have captured the essence of lads that age really well, from the wild swing in emotional tugs, to the forgetful nature of responsibilities to be informative to their parents.

I am not sure I understood the full meaning behind Debbie's warning. :P

You have taken Joey and turned him into a really rather charming young man. :) It is no wonder that Andy is somewhat attracted to him, despite his good looks and wonderful eyes. Cherry red lips and stunning smile.

What more could a gay boy want. ;)

Joey does seem to be the all around package, good looks and heart. Andy is one lucky guy.

 

Thanks, I try to make each character react as a person their age would to each given situation.

 

Thanks for your review. It means a lot.

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I hope joey's reaction to his father isn't an indication of what his home life is like. I'm thinking Andy has an interesting family history with the answer he gave to joeys question. You thrown quite a few hints it will be interesting to see how this little group works out.

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On 08/22/2013 01:05 PM, Daithi said:
I hope joey's reaction to his father isn't an indication of what his home life is like. I'm thinking Andy has an interesting family history with the answer he gave to joeys question. You thrown quite a few hints it will be interesting to see how this little group works out.
Thanks Daithi!
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I chuckle lots through your story at Andy's comments, eg. his knowing English, a bit anyway! A delightful self-effacement and a gentle poke of humour. It is good. Love how the characters are unfolding and how you are building suspense over a number of issues. I have a concern about Andy's project as he seems to be outing himself here by talking of "his friend" who is gay and again springing to his defense. Seems that if he wants to stay in the closet he would be better off choosing a safer topic and one in which he is not personally involved, though on the other side, I can see how you are speaking through Andy and rooting for the cause. This is proving a good read. Thanks for writing!

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On 09/02/2014 01:53 PM, Jaro_423 said:
I chuckle lots through your story at Andy's comments, eg. his knowing English, a bit anyway! A delightful self-effacement and a gentle poke of humour. It is good. Love how the characters are unfolding and how you are building suspense over a number of issues. I have a concern about Andy's project as he seems to be outing himself here by talking of "his friend" who is gay and again springing to his defense. Seems that if he wants to stay in the closet he would be better off choosing a safer topic and one in which he is not personally involved, though on the other side, I can see how you are speaking through Andy and rooting for the cause. This is proving a good read. Thanks for writing!
I think I heard or read somewhere that plans exists until they are put into action. :)

 

Thanks for the comments!

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I love the story but the limit they place on likes, I can not click the like button. love is far better than like.

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On 10/09/2014 07:21 AM, Ray169 said:
I love the story but the limit they place on likes, I can not click the like button. love is far better than like.
Thank you! The whole system of likes, comments, and reviews could be changing in the near future.
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Finally the bell rung … Finally the bell rang 

The quotation by one if your commenters is … a well thought out plan of battle is good only until the first gun is fired. I believe it is said by a Chinese General many years back in history. I could look it up, but I am too lazy!

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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