I just loved it from start to finish! Original, tho I have my doubts/concern on using the pool to clean clothes.
Absolutely adorable story, well written, I just would hope that it was the starting chapter of a longer story!
Nice story overall! I was most definitely entertained from start to finish. I wish there were more to the story!
Would there be things that I would have liked to see differently? Yes, but nothing that stopped me from wanting to read it to the end and wishing for more.
Very entertaining, it’s certainly keeping me interested.
That said, I might have missed something, but not sure why would the Artise boys know the safety password… wouldn’t that be some kind of security issue.
The only negative comment that I have up to now, is that I get confused at times with having different characters speaking within the same paragraph.
On a side note, I now have that song stuck in my head!
I think I almost forgot the story! I would need to read it all over again too.
I wasn't aware that there was an more recent edit of it somewhere out there.