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Great to hear from you, my dear friend. I’m eagerly looking forward to your new work. In the meantime, I’ve been rereading A Bad Education - what a book… a true masterpiece!
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Look at it this way: the number of comments is inversely proportional to the number of new chapters. The comments on the previous chapter will drop because everyone will move on to the new one - so… more frequent chapters, please!
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Frosted Hearts: The Overlook
Cane23 commented on Jason Rimbaud's story chapter in Frosted Hearts: The Overlook
You're the author - fulfill our wishes and bring our fantasies to life. -
Frosted Hearts: The Overlook
Cane23 commented on Jason Rimbaud's story chapter in Frosted Hearts: The Overlook
Hopefully Percy is at least verse… It’d be a shame for such a weapon to go unused! 😜 -
More than mirrors, this situation is reminiscent of a Dorian Gray portrait… the beautiful, idealized soul Lyn once saw in Brad no longer exists. It has been replaced by an unapologetic, amoral, and opportunistic person. Brad knows that portrait, which is why he needed Lyn - because Lyn "looked at him as nobody else did."
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This is a chapter about misrecognition - what each man thinks the other is, and how violently their images clash with reality. Brad’s emotional sequence is very telling: shock (“You what?”) - guilt (looking away, the quiet “Fuck.”) - rapid denial and deflection - personal attack (“You wanted to be in Luke’s place, didn’t you?”). This is classic defensive shame behavior - when someone feels exposed, they lash out to regain control. Brad changes the subject from his wrongdoing to Lyn’s supposed crush, because that is the one thing he knows will destabilize Lyn. He weaponizes their past because he feels cornered and is terrified of being truly seen. This confrontation shows that Brad and Lyn have lived eight years with two different internal stories. Lyn’s story is “I ruined the friendship. Brad hated me. Brad never cared like I cared. I was foolish, naïve, in love alone.” while Brad’s story is "You abandoned me after I screwed up. I tried to apologize. You vanished. I was left humiliated and blamed at home. You never gave me a chance.”. The heartbreaking thing is that both stories are partially true, but neither man can see the other’s pain clearly. Thus, instead of finding reconciliation, they crash into each other’s assumptions revealing the fault line that caused their original breakup. Brad says “This is all about you. About your perfect little image of me.” This is unjust, but emotionally honest from his perspective. Brad is used to Lyn being the one who keeps moral order, stays calm, holds the line and believes in “right and wrong”. Brad, meanwhile, has lived his life freely, impulsively, sometimes recklessly, and he felt, probably for years, that Lyn saw him as the “golden boy” who never made mistakes. He calls it out not because he wants to hurt Lyn, but because he is drowning in guilt. Guilty people often lash out by attacking the expectations they failed to meet. When Brad brings up the night that ended everything, we see that he’s still carrying the hurt because: his parents scolding him, Lyn disappearing, the humiliation of being blamed, the frustration of being denied closure. So, we see that Lyn’s abandonment hit Brad much harder than Lyn ever realized. He felt left behind, maybe even disposable. This turns the chapter’s emotional axis... for Brad, Lyn wasn’t the abandoned one - Brad was, this reframes the entire last eight years. Brad’s bitterness cracks for a moment “I just wanted—ah, fuck, what I wanted doesn’t matter.” This is the emotional climax, the thing he “wanted” does matter... desperately. It's the one moment where Brad comes close to admitting the truth - he needed Lyn at the wedding, not as a guest - as an anchor to reassure himself that he is still a good man, that someone who once believed in him still sees him...that he isn’t ruining his life. But the shame of what Lyn witnessed destroys the possibility of honesty. Even when it was obvious you were drooling over me like a puppy with a bone.”. This line isn’t just Brad being rude. It’s a flash of the real Brad - the Brad who surfaces only under pressure, when the polished, easygoing exterior collapses. It’s like a momentary psychic slip that exposes how he has always processed Lyn, even if he never said it out loud. It tells us Brad’s darkest truth - he knows exactly where Lyn is vulnerable and part of him is willing to push there. This is a moment where Brad’s mask slips and we see the sharp edges beneath and it absolutely suggests that the end-of-college collapse was fueled by this same pattern... Brad’s inability to handle emotional pressure leading him to crush Lyn with words he can never truly take back. If anything, this is the clearest sign yet of how and why things fell apart between them back then. “If you tell her, I’ll never forgive you.” This is Brad’s lowest moment - a mix of fear, shame, panic, and emotional immaturity. It is also a confession disguised as a threat because the real meaning is “Please don’t leave me again.” Brad cannot face Bella; he cannot face himself and the thought of Lyn turning his back again terrifies him.
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Haha, interesting idea. I wonder how Bradley imagines the perfect campaign: Lyn, the campaign manager, doing all the hard work; Bella, the picture-perfect wife for public appearances; Luke, the behind-the-scenes fun; and Alexander, financing the whole operation! 😜
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I faced more than 30 notifications this morning, most of them from this story. I feel like I accidentally pressed a red button and launched nuclear missiles!
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Yes, it did… though one small remark - they’re both actually right. Still, I’ll keep the explanation for my analysis. 😉
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Yes...amazing what we can see and hear when the mask finally comes off!
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Let’s not give him excuses… he’s just a slut. Or, using Alexander’s intellectual language - an opportunist!
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After 26 chapters - a hell of a binge-read, and countless comments… here I am, waiting for the next chapter with everyone else. I’m thinking… should I stay off topic, or spoil the party and actually say something about the chapter? 😁 From what I can see, @Krista still has to find adequate matches for Lorianne and Roy. 😉 And by the way, it seems to me that Gavin knows… He’d suspected for some time, but I think now he really knows! Even back then, when Joel spent the night at the twins’ house, it was suspicious to me that Gavin left - not just to be with his girlfriend, but to give Joel and Davin some space to connect. Hehe, the Cupid twin!
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Wow… what a way to make a statement! I don’t know if it was a dumbass thing to do, as twins suggested, or if it was revolutionary - Joel, the baseball Che Guevara! 😁
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Especially for telling him ‘See you on the field’, not ‘You’re a traitor.’ The idea that he might be seen as a traitor has already been a heavy burden on Joel
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Perfect When You Touch Me
Cane23 commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in Perfect When You Touch Me
He’s the arc before their triangle becomes fully operational. 😜- 14 comments
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Another fantastic and genuinely hilarious chapter! The Turkish ABBA restaurant sounds so wonderfully absurd that it has to be based on something real - I laughed out loud. 😂 And that line about the “insane food that’s going to absolutely make you shit yourself” … priceless! 😂 Dennis trying to outsmart a modern teenager? Not a chance. They’re basically born with smartphones and a sixth sense for everything. All in all, their first “online” introduction was… well, definitely interesting!
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Of course, this is just a theory...but, it is entirely possible, and narratively very compelling, that Alexander could have been the silent benefactor, but the help reached Lyn through the wrong hands, transforming a gesture of support into an accidental humiliation. Alexander is hyper-perceptive. He remembers every emotional boundary Lyn ever set, and that particular conversation from the past - Lyn bristling at the idea of being some “charity project,” insisting he would always pay Alexander back - would be carved into Alexander’s memory like a warning sign. $15,000 is large enough to suggest a wealthy donor, not a casual “former client.” That amount reads as generosity from someone with significant resources. Alexander knows - if he gives money openly, he risks humiliating Lyn, so he chooses the silent route - an anonymous transfer, a discreet help. Except…he miscalculates one major detail... Alexander knows how to give, but he does not fully understand the human fallout of how that giving is delivered, especially when he uses intermediaries. So, the key is the rude chauffeur... Is Alexander the secret benefactor or... the benefactor came from Lyn’s mother’s world. Is it generosity or it is removal money from someone who wanted Lyn paid off - not comforted?
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This is not just a bridge chapter, but a structurally essential hinge between two eras of Lyn’s life. It carries Lyn from trauma into the makeshift stability of the foster household and set up the emotional debts and attachments that will dominate his adult choices. Also, it doesn’t reveal much in terms of plot, but it explains everything about the emotional future of the story. @Laura S. Fox reveals one of the deepest and most important dualities in Brad’s character. The chapter shows that Brad’s kindness is real, but it is never pure. Every gesture he makes toward Lyn is layered with emotional instinct, unconscious need, and a subtle, unspoken dependence that Brad himself doesn’t fully understand. So even in this rescue scene, Brad is, unconsciously, pulling his anchor closer. His heart is pure - but his emotional psychology is self-serving; he needs Lyn - not because Lyn is convenient, but because Lyn fills a hole in him he doesn’t name. This chapter shows both truths at once - Brad is the best friend Lyn will ever have in his youth, protector and safety. Brad is also the first person who accidentally traps Lyn in a lifelong emotional debt. Alexander is not physically present in this chapter - he who is always the first to intervene, always the controlled, strategic problem-solver… and yet here, at Lyn’s lowest, he is nowhere to be seen. That silence begs for interpretation. The story gives us a Brad-style rescue (emotional, noisy, physical), but Alexander’s style of caring is always strategic, invisible, and deniable. Could Alexander have sent the money? But the chauffeur’s behavior is the biggest contradiction. Alexander would never send someone rude, threatening, or mocking. He would never let someone degrade Lyn’s mother, he would choose discretion, elegance, control. Alexander would overpay for a professional who knows how to be invisible. BUT, what if Alexander did not send the money himself, what if he may have caused it to appear? This is exactly the kind of help Alexander would provide - useful, effective, invisible, deniable. The ugliness of the chauffeur’s behavior could be the unintended cost of dealing with people Alexander does not actually control - only persuades. Anyway, this chapter is full of shadows of Alexander. He is the unseen architect who arranged the financial help indirectly or the person who meant to intervene but was outpaced by Brad’s impulsive heroism.
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“I don’t want you to know, because I need you,” This line broke me...
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Colt is a classic teenager- stubborn, rebellious, and a total smart-ass. He should be the one going with Trace and Joel to Joel’s parents’ place. Not to witness Joel being outed, but to see for himself what kind of saints his own parents really are.
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Reading about how the twins live made me genuinely sad. It may not be as dramatic as the first chapter, but it’s equally heartbreaking- quietly sad. Maybe “abandoning” wasn’t the wrong word after all; there’s definitely neglect. Their life in that “sterile museum,” with parents who maintain their distance and monitor them through surveillance equipment - like bizarre voyeurs watching a reality show...not out of concern for the children, but for the things in the house… it’s unsettling. It makes me wonder - is all this drinking actually the twins’ way of rebelling?
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Trace really feels like a true father figure. It’s good that Joel has someone who actually knows the truth- and even when Joel tries to hide things, Trace can read him like a book. That’s the only way he can truly protect him. As for the twins’ parents, I honestly thought they were abandoned at first...until we saw they live in some kind of palace!
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I thought about it too...mainly because they've chosen the dog together!
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Get out of my house… just like that?! No ‘let’s talk about it,’ no familiar denial, no ‘it’s just a phase,’ not even the usual nonsense about conversion therapy? Just this? Cold. Final. Cruel - so very, very cruel.
