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Rhymes - 13. I Never Learn

Poetry Prompt 7 - Blank Verse

Stranger, could you have left any more scars?

How quietly you stole into my heart

And robbed me blind of all these precious things

I did not know I still possessed these days.

You whispered empty promises I’ve heard

Too many times before, yet I never

Learn that sweet words burn harsh on their way up.

I lie awake picking at the stitches

That holds together someone I don’t know.

When did they fall, these walls I built so high?

Poetry Prompt 7 - Blank Verse: Questions for You.
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totallyy
On 04/12/2015 11:58 PM, carringtonrj said:
good work. strong, direct. passionate.
Thank you so much for the review. :) it's nice to know people read the poetry i write seeing as this is mostly a narrative site. :)
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Lisa

Another chill-inducing poem, totallyy.

 

I read it a few times and each time brought chills.

 

Very well-written and thought provoking. =)

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totallyy
On 04/13/2015 04:50 AM, Lisa said:
Another chill-inducing poem, totallyy.

 

I read it a few times and each time brought chills.

 

Very well-written and thought provoking. =)

Thank you Lisa! :) I'm glad you enjoyed it as much as I enjoyed writing it. Thank you for the review!
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AC Benus

Thanks for taking the challenge, and I love to see how you've tackled a 10-syllable approach for each line. This is a very personal poem, but it's also telling the narrative of that pain and how you met and so forth, so the Blank Verse form fits perfectly.

 

The poem is beautiful: direct and open. This is the kind of poem it takes courage to write, and the kind that once done offers the poet a bit of freedom from that same hurt.

 

Thank you for sharing it.

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totallyy
On 04/14/2015 06:30 AM, AC Benus said:
Thanks for taking the challenge, and I love to see how you've tackled a 10-syllable approach for each line. This is a very personal poem, but it's also telling the narrative of that pain and how you met and so forth, so the Blank Verse form fits perfectly.

 

The poem is beautiful: direct and open. This is the kind of poem it takes courage to write, and the kind that once done offers the poet a bit of freedom from that same hurt.

 

Thank you for sharing it.

Thank you for the great review. :) Poetry is a catharsis of sorts after all. As for the freedom from hurt part, I'm still waiting on it. But thank you :)
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Parker Owens

I wept at this - the image of words burning on their way back up - bile as harsh and vile as melancholy. You have written something very, very powerful.

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totallyy
On 02/05/2016 02:29 AM, Parker Owens said:

I wept at this - the image of words burning on their way back up - bile as harsh and vile as melancholy. You have written something very, very powerful.

thank you for the review. it still amazes me that my words could touch someone else, so thank you for letting me share my writing with you in such a personal way. :)

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