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Rhymes - 21. Second.

Poetry Prompt 15 - Free Verse

That’s the thing about second loves:

His smile could never be so bright

As to erase the fragments of crooked grins.

Blue eyes cradle your body gently

Summer rain quenching a drought.

But every inch of your sunlit skin

Has been branded by the fires of another.

And when he drapes himself over you,

Your rigid bones fight this skeletal prison,

Remembering the winter nights that hardened them

Against the passionate fires of novelty.

Even as you contort yourself to mould

Into a fitting piece of this new puzzle,

Your bed remembers the warmth of the one before,

And so you learn to sleep in threes with ghosts.

Poetry Prompt 15 - Free Verse
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Parker Owens

The imagery and language of this is so evocative, so gently melancholy, and yet so brutally honest. It is a magnificent poem.

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totallyy
On 12/14/2015 06:29 AM, Parker Owens said:

The imagery and language of this is so evocative, so gently melancholy, and yet so brutally honest. It is a magnificent poem.

Thank you so much for the review. :D

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AC Benus

In just a little over a hundred words, I think you do something amazing. This poem seems to have a beginning, a middle and a conclusion – just like the arc of the relationship it portrays.

 

All the images are very strong, and particularly the use of 'fire,' 'sunlit,' and 'brand' leaves a deep impression.

 

I love this poem. I think it's great.

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totallyy
On 12/15/2015 05:41 AM, AC Benus said:

In just a little over a hundred words, I think you do something amazing. This poem seems to have a beginning, a middle and a conclusion – just like the arc of the relationship it portrays.

 

All the images are very strong, and particularly the use of 'fire,' 'sunlit,' and 'brand' leaves a deep impression.

 

I love this poem. I think it's great.

Thank you for the review :) I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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