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  • Aviana
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  • 07/04/2017
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Poetry posted in this category are works of fiction. Names, places, characters, events, and incidents are created by the authors' imaginations or are used fictitiously. Any resemblances to actual persons (living or dead), organizations, companies, events, or locales are entirely coincidental.
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Silently speaking; Poetry collection - 1. Flown with the tears

It's actually one of my first writing, during....well not-so-good time of mine...so it might sound super depressing...sorry about that!!!

FLOWN WITH THE TEARS

 

The sand slips of the eternal flowing time

Wrapped in the arms of riddles and rhyme

I can hear the distant echo

Of the once cheerful voice

The cries of the desire of those warm rejoice;

The choices I made are now hurt and bleeding

The forlorn shadow of the

Smile quietly pleading,

The scattered parts of the dreams

Swimming in my tear

The hollow laugh of the values I held so dear;

All vanished in the

Blink of an eye

Leaving behind only the traces

Of my open blue sky!

 

 

 

 

Is this some magnificent

Painting of the Lucifer?

Littered with grey and dark pastels of future?

Like the blurred image

In the turbulent water

The wind of reality

Made the illusions falter;

Lost at the hands of

The merciless wheel of fate

Snapped the thread that couldn’t bear the weight

Of the hopes that will never come true

Opening the door to the road

Of colorless hue;

The unbearable pain of

the shattered aspiration

Wells up the eye with

Inexpressible frustration...

 

 

 

 

Flown with the tears

Of helpless longing,

The flames of which keeps on burning

If only it was easier

To bow and accept the failures that I

So inevitably face

But I guess am in love with this pain

As I walk out to try & achieve my dream again!

I hope you enjoy it....please feel free to give your opinion...
Copyright © 2017 Aviana; All Rights Reserved.
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Poetry posted in this category are works of fiction. Names, places, characters, events, and incidents are created by the authors' imaginations or are used fictitiously. Any resemblances to actual persons (living or dead), organizations, companies, events, or locales are entirely coincidental.
Note: While authors are asked to place warnings on their stories for some moderated content, everyone has different thresholds, and it is your responsibility as a reader to avoid stories or stop reading if something bothers you. 
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MrM

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I see great promise in your poetry. You have a beautiful ear for rhythm as well as rhyme structure. I always say that great art comes from great pain. If this can be any solace to you and your pain then do take it. Make good from bad.

 

Congratulations on your first entry. Mine was also a poem and it opened a door of great happiness here at GA.

 

Welcome! :hug:

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MacGreg
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I was just going to say what jp said: Never preface a poem with an apology for writing it or feeling a certain way when it came to you. Poetry is meant to express emotion in whatever the circumstance or environment is. This poem expresses a part of you that many of us can relate to on a personal level. Longing, regret, self-punishment, the question of "why?".

 

Keep writing and sharing.  Cheers - Mac

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I struggle with writing reviews, especially for poetry, but my goodness, you are very talented. There is nothing wrong with being humble my dear, but I think you underestimate yourself. For me, poetry, like art can be interpreted through the eyes of the beholder. I see a struggle with oneself. I see someone who falls down, but claws her way back up to once more see the blue skies, after being down in the hole for so long. 

 

What a beautiful soul you have.:heart:

 

 

 

 

Aviana
2 minutes ago, R J Drew said:

I struggle with writing reviews, especially for poetry, but my goodness, you are very talented.

Oh My Rj...tha's an extravagant compliment...I m overwhelmed...since you got the feel of the poem :thankyou:

3 minutes ago, R J Drew said:

I see a struggle with oneself. I see someone who falls down, but claws her way back up to once more see the blue skies, after being down in the hole for so long. 

This line of yours shows it clearly!!

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Aviana
Just now, Lyssa said:

Hi Aviana, glad that you posted your poems. They are beautiful and like I said before, your gift is shining.  As I see you achieved your likes. Congrats to this as well. Hugs Lyssa

Frankly speaking I m myself surprised...I was totally not expecting to receive such a warm review...I just wished people wud enjoy reading it...:*)

Thankz a lot Lyssa:glomp:

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