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    MacGreg
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Poetry Prompts - 3. Tanka #3

 
 

Floating on the wind,

The red-tailed hawk swoops and soars,

Brandishing freedom

And the luxury of flight,

While I sit mired in gridlock.


Thanks for reading. I am continuing to play around with writing Tankas before moving onto a new exercise. If you'd like to try your hand at different forms of poetry, check out Zero to Hero, a Guide by @AC Benus.
Copyright © 2018 MacGreg; All Rights Reserved.
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Mikiesboy

This is great, Sir!  Even more so if You wrote it while sitting in traffic.  In any case it brings home our true lack of freedom.

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MacGreg
4 minutes ago, Mikiesboy said:

This is great, Sir!  Even more so if You wrote it while sitting in traffic.  In any case it brings home our true lack of freedom.

Thanks, tim. I was, indeed, in traffic. That hawk was like an epiphany. I wrote it in my head, not on paper. Counting syllables helped get me through the mire.

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MichaelS36

Well. tim said to me, Michael You need to see Mac Sir's poem. Well, he's right. This is wonderful. Alive and as tim has said, tells us how grounded most of us are. Super .. and it's good to see you writing. You're an excellent poet, Mac. 

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mollyhousemouse

this is so good Sir

that the hawk is "Brandishing freedom" it sounds very much like a taunt while you are "mired in gridlock"

full of emotion, Sir

i really like it!

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AC Benus

I see I'm not alone in liking to watch hawks from the ground. I always wonder how great the world looks from their vantage. As far as Tanka go, this one checks all the boxes :) I like it very much. Good job!

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AC Benus
30 minutes ago, Defiance19 said:

I see this as clearly as I feel it. Make sense? Lol. 

 

Great! 

YES! That's a Tanka :) 

 

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