Poetry Prompts - 1. Tanka #1

An excellent Tanka, Mac. It's like the raindrops are real tears being shed over a love that has ended/parted/gone away. Very profound.

First @BHopper2 your comments are profound. I'm pleased to see you finding all sorts of words!

Mac, A, is right. It is heart wrenching this piece. Truly a master work.  Bravo.

6 minutes ago, MichaelS36 said:

First @BHopper2 your comments are profound. I'm pleased to see you finding all sorts of words!

Thank you, Mike.

7 minutes ago, MichaelS36 said:

Mac, A, is right. It is heart wrenching this piece. Truly a master work.  Bravo.

I agree it is heart-wrenching.

On 7/30/2018 at 5:43 PM, Mikiesboy said:

oh my Sir.. that is truly wonderful . my gosh i can see the rain drops .. . i hope you write more, too

Thanks, tim. I plan to write more, at some point.

On 7/30/2018 at 5:50 PM, AC Benus said:

Very strong work. Thank you for kicking the tires on my re-worked Tanka prompt. To think it produced this in you, with no prior Tanka knowledge, makes me feel I must be doing something right  

 

I'm glad you posted it

Your prompt was/is brilliant, therefore it was easy to grasp the idea. Writing this Tanka, however, was not quite as easy.  It was a good challenge for me. I should have written a series of Tanka, as your instructions suggested, but this was all I had in me at the time.

I appreciate you asking me to give it a try.

On 7/30/2018 at 5:59 PM, Starrynight22 said:

I like this.  I can feel the burning ache it evokes. 

Thank you for reading, Starry. 

On 7/30/2018 at 6:53 PM, mollyhousemouse said:

very nice Sir

i can hear those first rain drops, and smell them too

thank you for sharing your effort on AC's prompt 

 

Thank you, molly. I hope you will share yours!

On 7/30/2018 at 7:32 PM, Defiance19 said:

Wow.. This is great.. well done, Mac. 

Thank you, Def. I appreciate you reading it!

On 7/30/2018 at 8:20 PM, BHopper2 said:

An excellent Tanka, Mac. It's like the raindrops are real tears being shed over a love that has ended/parted/gone away. Very profound.

Ah, A. I'm glad you felt what I wrote so strongly. The intended emotion came through. Thank you for reading it.

On 7/30/2018 at 9:20 PM, MichaelS36 said:

First @BHopper2 your comments are profound. I'm pleased to see you finding all sorts of words!

 

Mac, A, is right. It is heart wrenching this piece. Truly a master work.  Bravo.

Thank you, Mike. Your words are equally profound.

On 8/2/2018 at 12:14 PM, Parker Owens said:

Okay, this absolutely sizzles, like the words you wrote. It’s alive and vivid. I love it. 

Alive and sizzling - perfect. I'm glad you felt what I wrote. Thank you for the kind words, Parker. This was a good challenge.

On 8/2/2018 at 12:53 PM, MacGreg said:

Thank you, molly. I hope you will share yours!

yes Sir

i've done the challenge, my results are not on Your level, but You may see it soon

Just now, mollyhousemouse said:

yes Sir

i've done the challenge, my results are not on Your level, but You may see it soon

What level? I'm a novice, it's my first Tanka! I look forward to reading yours.

13 minutes ago, MacGreg said:

Alive and sizzling - perfect. I'm glad you felt what I wrote. Thank you for the kind words, Parker. This was a good challenge.

You succeded at the challenge admirably. Thank you for sharing it. 

This is beautiful!