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Broken - A Camp Refuge Story - 9. Yonder

20 November (Friday evening)

Bill parted the curtains, watching as Avery trudged up the sidewalk. Fridays typically found Avery rushing from school to Camp Refuge where he'd spend the weekend.

But not anymore.

Letting the curtain fall back into place, Bill looked over his shoulder. "He's here."

Anna smiled nervously. "Oh, I hope he likes this."

"Yeah, me too."

Avery's key slid into the lock, and he opened the door. He stopped to stare at the assortment of gear, coolers, and fishing poles piled in the living room.

"Good, you're home." Bill patted his back. "We've already packed a few changes of clothes for you, but go get anything else you might want out of your room. Oh, make sure to take your raincoat; it's November, and it'll probably rain on us at some point."

"What?" Avery closed the door. He took in the mound of supplies and then looked in confusion at Bill. "Where are we going?"

"We've rented Mccarthy Point Lookout, in Lassen National Forest. It's a haul to get there, but we've got time." Bill grinned at a secret well kept. "You've got all week off for Thanksgiving, and we both took time off too. We'll be there till next Sunday."

"We know it's not the campground," Anna began, "but there's hiking, fishing, and great views. We've seen pictures; it's beautiful."

Avery blinked. "But, Thanksgiving … we were going to Carol's?"

"Aunt Carol understands, and we'll see her at Christmas." Anna rubbed his back.

Bill watched Avery. The young man looked over the room once more, then smiled. "I'll get my coat."

He bounded down the hall to rummage in the coat closet.

Anna reached for Bill's hand. They shared a smile, then the family packed up the truck and set off.

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03 December (Thursday morning)

A little over two weeks had passed since Lee had returned to the campground. Now, early on a chilly, foggy Thursday, he walked carefully on his healing leg.

The disapproval on Greg's face was apparent; Lee snickered as he neared the patio table.

"You should still be using crutches, damn it." Greg drummed his fingers on the glass tabletop.

"I hate them." Lee slowly sat in a camp chair, making certain his leg didn't brush anything.

"Hmm." Greg sipped his coffee. "Well, how's it feel?"

"Itchy." Lee flexed his fingers, giving the impression he wanted to scratch the skin off the limb. "I know it means it's healing, but I wake up scratching it."

“That’s what the cotton sock is for.” Greg narrowed his eyes. “You’re wearing it to bed, right?”

“Yes.” Lee poured coffee from a thermos. He took a drink and sighed.

“Good.”

Lee leaned back and looked up the trunks of the great redwoods. Their tops disappeared in the mist flowing through the campground. There was almost no wind, but what little blew in from the West pushed gently on the giant trees, causing them to sway to and fro.

"It's so peaceful here." He watched the slow dance of the trees. "So calm."

Greg sighed contentedly. "Yes." He too looked up. "I love this place."

Lee nodded in understanding. A few silent minutes passed, then a cabin door opened. Joseph said something indiscernible to Orson. Lee smiled.

He sat up, then pushed to his feet. Turning toward the kitchen, he began the slow walk there.

Once behind the counter, he put on his apron. Tying it in place, he considered his options. He knew his stock without having to look and settled on lemon blueberry pancakes with sausage and eggs.

Lee pulled out his big mixing bowl and got to work.

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24 December (Thursday, Christmas Eve Morning)

Something needled at the back of Lee's mind, and it had while he had healed over the last three weeks. Lifting the apron from its spot, he looked at the embroidered letters, lost for a moment in thought.

"How's it goin'?"

Lee started as Harlan swung a leg over the stool at the kitchen counter. He laughed at his own reaction and tied on his apron. "It's okay." Lee frowned. "I won't be starting breakfast for a while; it's really early. I just came out here to clean and think."

"That's fine," Harlan said.

Lee idly wiped the counter. He didn't know much about Harlan, but there were moments when the fellow reminded Lee of a cat—quiet, careful, and precise. "Well, why are you up so early?"

"To think." The green in Harlan's eyes caught the light from the kitchen. He smiled, then looked at the campground exit near the Airstream.

Lee followed his gaze. That needling intensified, and he wet his lips. "Do you ever wonder what's out there?"

Considering a moment, Harlan nodded. "Yes. There's always more to see and do." He shrugged. "I've been many places, seen and done a lot of things. I've met so many people." He turned back to Lee. "But my telling you about them, anybody telling you isn't the same as being there." Harlan leaned back. "Hrmph. Actually, I was about your age when I left home."

Swallowing the lump in his throat, Lee tore his eyes from the exit and continued wiping the counter. "I have a good life here. People are nice, and it's safe."

"You do. They are. And it is." Harlan's fingers drummed lightly on the counter.

But.

Lee shook his head at the thought. He glanced at Harlan who stared at him. "What?"

"Nothing." Harlan smiled. "As long as you're content, then this place will always be enough. And that is something of a gift—finding contentment." He shrugged. "It took a long time and a lot of wandering for me to figure out what I needed out of life. That's all."

Looking down at the rag, Lee sighed. "I'd be afraid. To leave."

"Why would you want to? Leave, that is."

"I … I don't."

"Oh. Good."

Lee clutched the rag. "I'd be crazy to want to."

"Yep," Harlan agreed easily. "Crazy."

Putting the rag on the counter, Lee rubbed his right hand with his left. He glanced at Harlan, then looked again at the exit. "I just wonder if … if I could do it on my own."

For the first time, Harlan's eyes softened. "Well, that doesn't sound crazy to me."

"Greg wouldn't like it." Lee inhaled suddenly, terrified of what he was thinking. "I can't. I can't."

Harlan laughed, though there was no malice in the sound. "You could." He leaned forward, conspiratorial and serious. "In fact, I happen to know there's a Christmas Eve bus running in Crescent City, late tonight."

"Tonight?" Lee ran his hands over his apron, feeling the raised letters under his fingers. "Where … where's it going?"

Harlan grinned. "Does it matter?"

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25 December (Friday, Christmas Morning)

Greg opened his front door, then looked down, confused. "Oh." He bent and picked up a badly wrapped box he'd knocked with the door. The rectangular gift had a bow taped on and a little paper tag. Greg read it.

To Greg from Lee

Greg smiled. "Why'd he leave it …" His smile slipped. Greg re-entered the house, the present in hand.

He sat next to their twinkling tree and slowly tore away the paper to reveal a plain cardboard box. He slid the lid off the box.

The apron lay folded inside. Greg reached, drawing it out with shaking hands. He'd known that something had been going on with Lee, but he'd not expected this.

A slip of paper fell from the apron, and Greg bent to retrieve it. Lee's scrawl covered most of the page, and Greg began to read.

I hope you're not mad. I don't want that. You and the others have all been so good to me and I don't want you to be mad. I have to see if I can live on my own. I need to try. I've always had someone taking care of me and now I have to try. I have your phone number and I'll get myself a phone. If I need to call I will. I promise. And I'll be back. Once I prove I can do this I'll be back. So keep my apron safe till I come home.

Merry Christmas.

Love, Lee

Greg read the note again, then he lay back on the couch. Fear, loss, pride, and hope all twisted in him. Hugging the apron against his chest, he laughed and shed tears at the same time, unable to separate the emotions.

"Merry Christmas, Lee." Greg squeezed his eyes tight. “Love you too.”

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26 December (Saturday Afternoon)

Straining to clear eyes that felt like sandpaper, Lee shook his head. After a day and a half of busses, with only a few hours of sleep, he struggled to think clearly, but he couldn't rest yet.

After dropping his things in the motel room, he walked outside and checked the address again on his prepaid phone. "Okay. It's a few blocks."

Colorado Springs was not warm, but luckily it was sunny. Lee bundled up as best as he could in clothes not quite suited to the colder environment and set off, careful to avoid slipping on the ice.

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"Stump! What'd I tell you about smoking that shit?"

"It's legal now, Mamma!" Stump whined, his bloodshot eyes telling the story behind his giggles earlier. With his good arm, he carried a bin intended for dirty glasses and dishes on his way out of the kitchen. He entered the dining room, the door swinging back and forth behind him.

"I don't care. Don't smoke weed while you're workin'!" Greta called after him and shook her head. "Duller'n a baseball bat."

"I heard that!"

"Good!" Grumbling, she pushed through the door.

"Mamma G, don't let 'im get you riled." At the main bar in the restaurant, Tiny cleaned glasses as he removed them from the dishwasher racks. Tiny was particular, and anything left on the glasses by the machine was soon removed by his attention. "I got your special here when you're ready."

Greta smiled. "Oh, if you're trying to get in my good graces, bribery may help." She swung by, snagging her gin and tonic with muddled blueberries and mint.

"I know what you like."

"You'd better!"

Greta moved through her place, sipping her drink, checking in with patrons. People came to Mamma's House for good food and strong drinks, but lately only one of those had been consistent.

Their cook tonight was a friend of hers who, frankly, stretched the definition of the word "cook". Ralph was working as a favor, and he tried, but he was not cut out for the quality her patrons had come to expect. Business had begun to suffer, and Greta wondered if she would ever find a replacement for her main chef.

Greta, or Mamma G, as most knew her, caught sight of Sweetie. The petite blonde nodded her way from her place by the door. A thin, young guy stood next to her, his eyes shifting around as if he were a mouse in a room full of cats.

"Mamma G," Sweetie motioned at the kid, "this is Lee." Sweetie cocked her head. "Says Harlan sent 'im."

"Oh, did he?" Greta felt warm, and it wasn't from the gin. "Well, why don't you just come with me, then?"

"Oh, uh, okay."

Lee trailed along behind the stout woman. "Stump! Come'ere."

The one-handed man put down his half-filled bin and followed.

Once in the back, Greta turned to Lee. "What does Harlan want, then?"

Stump whitened. "H—Harlan?"

Greta nodded at Lee. "This one says he sent 'im."

Even with the noise of the fryer and grill in the kitchen, Stump's fearful groan was audible.

Lee frowned. "I … he told me to come and ask for a job?"

"Did he?" Greta took a long drink from her glass. She made a face as she lowered it. "Mmm. Okay. A job." She shrugged. "I'm not sure about that. This one, he's scared shitless of that green-eyed bastard."

"I—I'm not afraid of him." Stump frowned.

"I can feel all the courage from here." She took another drink, put down the glass, then focused on Lee. "So, Lee, friend of Harlan, and searcher of a job." She crossed her arms. "What can you do?"

Lee looked into the kitchen at the griddle top and stove. He drew himself up straight. "That. I'm a cook."

"Mamma, we have to." Stump pleaded.

"No, we don't." Greta grimaced. "I don't know why everybody bends over a barrel for that man," she stabbed her chest with her thumb, "but not me." Greta pointed at Lee. "You want a job?" Lee frowned and nodded. "All right. You gotta prove you can do the work." She motioned at the griddle. "Go ahead! Wow me."

Lee blinked, then looked at the cooktop. He smiled slightly. "What kind of omelet do you want?"

Six minutes later, Lee slid a cheddar, mushroom, scallion omelet in front of Greta. Her glass had been refilled by an attentive Tiny, and Stump kept making excuses to hover near the bar where she had her plate.

Lee nodded at the plate. "Go ahead."

Greta cut and speared the bite on her fork, then popped it into her mouth. She chewed, expressionless as she stared at the young man. Swallowing, she daintily wiped at her mouth. She stood.

"Stump, show this one where the lockers are. Then have Sweetie get him set up with a nametag." She made a chopping motion with her hand. "You start tonight. You get paid every two weeks and have a share of the tips."

"Y—yes, okay." Lee tried to catch up.

"'Lee' isn't going to do. You need a nickname." Greta pondered as she looked at him. She cocked her head. "You're gay."

Lee opened his mouth, shut it, then nodded. "Yes, ma'am."

"None of that 'ma'am' crap." She put a hand on her ample bosom. "I am Mamma G." She pointed. "And you … you are …"

"Truckerbait." Stump snickered.

"Oh, that's awful!" Mamma G smacked Stump.

“Ow!”

Mamma G ignored Stump’s pained cry. "I love it. Truckerbait it is!"

Tiny shook his head, chuckling to himself. "Welcome aboard the crazy train, kid."

"What's crazy is my drink is empty again." Mamma G sighed ruefully. "I don't know how that keeps happening."

"I have an idea," Tiny offered helpfully.

"Shut up."

"Yes, Mamma."

"All right!" She rubbed her hands together. "Get my new cook set up." She turned to Lee. "Truckerbait, after Stump and Sweetie finish with you, get Ralph to show you the basics in the kitchen, and how the tickets from the tables work. You watch and help him for a bit, then see what you can do on your own." She smirked. "If you've not run off after tonight, then I'll bother putting you into our computer system."

"Okay."

Greta watched Stump lead Lee into the back where the lockers were. She nodded to herself. "All right. Let's see how long you last."

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26 December (Saturday Evening)

Hours later and miles away, Harlan smiled at the number on the phone. "There she is." Steeling himself, he picked up.

She started immediately. "You think just because you're some mobster bigshot, you can dictate who works in my place? My place?!" Harlan began to reply, but Greta wasn't done. "That kid just sayin' your name about caused Stump to pass out!" Apparently she was just getting warmed up. "We have an arrangement, you and me; I keep Stump outta trouble, an' he gets to keep on breathing."

"Ms. Oldfather, always a pleasure." Harlan lay on his bed. "Though I'm not sure what you're talking about. 'Stump?' 'Mob?' Hmm. Have you been drinking?"

"We both know the answer to that! And don't play coy with me. He's one of mine, Harlan. I don't care who or what you are—I will see you put in the ground if anything happens to that one-handed idiot."

Harlan grinned. "You've no reason to worry. Nobody in Jacob's … ah, Stump's old life knows he's still upright." He frowned. "And I think you misunderstand. If Lee doesn't deserve work, then you're not obligated to give it to him. He wanted to see if he could make it on his own, and that's all I want—for him to get a chance." He shook his head. "I won't hold Stump's safety as a bargaining chip to force you to hire Lee."

"Oh, I already hired him." She sounded annoyed. "Kid makes a mean omelet. Right now he's slinging steak and fries and loving every second of it."

Harlan smiled. "You got a good one, Mamma G."

"Only my friends call me that. I'm Greta to you, you bastard."

Chuckling, Harlan nodded. "All right then, Greta. I'll be around."

"I'm sure you will. Call next time or I might shoot you."

Without further conversation, she hung up. Harlan laughed, then shook his head. "Oh, you missed your calling." Sitting up, he slipped the phone back into his pocket. "You'd have made a hell of a Don."

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14 May (Friday Afternoon)

Spring had come to Camp Refuge. With it, the rainy weather had let up some, and that Friday promised to be bright with sun.

It was a good day for a wedding.

The nervous anticipation on Orson's face and the way Joseph shifted on his feet made Greg smile. He watched from beside Jeremy and Mason where they sat in the small group gathered on the fragrant grass.

Both men had dressed in suits, both dapper and sophisticated, each with a silver vest over a white shirt with a light suit jacket over that. Black slacks and sky blue ties set off their look and worked perfectly in tandem with the rest of their outfits.

"What an honor." Clay grinned from his place before the grooms to be. "I am so honored to get to do this for you both."

Officer Anderson stood at Joseph's elbow, a smile on his face as he enjoyed the position of his partner's best man. Most of the rest of the small police department was there too, in the group behind Greg. Some were in uniform, as they were officially on duty, and their patrols today took them conveniently out of the way to the campground.

As Clay began, an old car pulled in. Greg glanced with some annoyance at it, as no one manned the front at the moment. They'll just have to wait. He refocused on the couple.

The sound of the car door made Greg look again.

Lee.

Leaning against the vehicle, Lee crossed his arms. Greg stared.

"... take Joseph to be your husband?"

Greg blinked. He tried to concentrate on the couple. Orson grinned, tears of happiness on his face. "I do."

Unable to help himself, Greg looked back at Lee. The young man smiled, waiting patiently, giving the men their time.

"I now pronounce you married." Clay laughed. "Kiss him like you mean it!"

The crowd cheered when Joseph grabbed Orson and dipped him in a classic movie-star kiss.

Greg clapped along with them and congratulated the new husbands. Then, as soon as he could, he hurried across the campground to a man he could never have imagined that he could love.

⟽⟾

"Lee." Greg crushed him in a massive hug.

Lee squeezed back, just as hard. "Hi."

The men held on, and Lee felt wetness on Greg's face. He pushed back and smiled. "You miss me?"

Greg laughed. "Yeah. A little." He wet his lips. "We, ah, we rented your cabin."

Lee nodded. "Good."

"If … if you wanted, I could reserve one for you."

"Just for the weekend." Lee smiled. "I, ah. I have to get back. Poor Ralph is covering for me, and I don't wanna be away too long."

Emotion made Greg frown, and more tears came. He nodded silently.

Lee hugged him again. "It's okay. I'm okay, thanks to you."

Greg buried his face against Lee's neck.

Lee held him. "I hope you have my apron because I'm taking it with me."

Greg nodded. "Yeah. I've got it."

"Okay." Lee pushed back a bit to look at him. "Well, let's go get it." He turned to the kitchen where most of the wedding party milled about. "Maybe I'll take omelet orders while I'm here."

Greg laughed deeply. "It's about time you paid your way."

Lee only smiled. Everything he wanted to say was in the way his eyes locked with Greg's.

"Lee!" Clay approached, a huge grin on his face. "Holy crap, you look good!"

Lee turned to meet Clay, and that moment with Greg was over. Though, as he endured an embrace from the massive man, Lee knew there would be more.

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28 September (Wednesday Morning)

Time marched on. At and around the campground, connections grew, strengthened and bloomed into true gems, cherished by those nurturing them. But further afield, for one young man a full year and some months later, he pulled up in front of a well-known diner in the city of Colorado Springs.

The young trucker stopped in the parking lot of Mamma's House. He'd heard a lot of good things about the place, and one particular recommendation stuck out in his mind.

He'd been on a long haul, his third such trip from San Francisco to Denver. It'd turned out to be a profitable run, and he was happy with the work.

He'd tried to make himself come to the restaurant the two times before, but he'd been unable to take the leap. He'd used the short distance he'd have to go out of his way as a deterrent, but he knew that was simple cowardice. Finally, he took I-25 on a quick trip south from Denver. His GPS directed him straight to the restaurant where he sat in his truck, staring at the door.

Never know unless I try. He forced himself to open the vehicle and jumped out, his sturdy boots grinding on the asphalt in the parking lot.

He checked his parking job. Fresh out of his training program, he'd only been driving rigs for a couple of months, so he still had a lot to learn. Though Mamma G catered to truckers and others passing through town, so spots for big rigs had been set aside. Pulling down his cap, he walked to the door and entered.

"Hello, welcome to Mamma's House." A short man waved from the bar on the other side of the room. "Have a seat, Sweetie will be by to take your order."

The trucker nodded and walked to the bar. "It okay if I sit here?"

"Sure." The little man eyed him and slipped a menu across the counter. "You look a bit young to be drinking."

"I just want coffee."

"That works."

Voices from the back drifted out, and a laugh made the trucker smile. Coffee appeared, steaming and inviting in a heavy ceramic mug. "Thanks."

"Yep." The bartender shrugged. "I don't know where that damn girl is. You know what you want?"

"Yeah. Cheddar cheese omelet with sundried tomato, sausage, pancakes on the side."

"Comin' up." He scribbled on a pad, then pushed through the swinging door leading to the kitchen.

He returned in short order. "It'll just be a bit."

"I'm not in a hurry. Thanks."

Nursing his coffee, he looked at the walls. 'Best Breakfast in Colorado Springs' hung in a gaudy, gold-colored frame. It had been placed right beside the kitchen entrance—not designed for the eyes of patrons, but rather for the staff.

He smiled.

"Oh, Truckerbait is movin' quick today."

The bartender put the plate in front of him, and the trucker laughed. "Truckerbait?"

"Haha. Yes. Our cook."

A subtle smile played on the trucker's lips, but he resisted further comments. Instead, he cut into his breakfast.

Ten minutes later, he pushed back from his empty plate.

"How was it?" Tiny picked up his dirty dishes.

"Great." The man in the cap wiped his mouth. "Say, can I meet the cook? I'd like to tell him what a great job he did."

"Yeah, he'll love that. Hang on." Tiny took his dishes into the back.

He wiped a sheen of sweat from his forehead, then pulled the cap back down again.

Lee walked out, wiping his hands on a rag. He sported a tan apron, and though it had been well over a year since he’d seen it, the trucker recognized it. Lee smiled at the man. "Hey, good morning."

The trucker nodded, "Howdy." He looked up, letting Lee see his face. "You still make a great omelet, Lee."

Lee froze. "A—Avery?"

Avery grinned. "Hi."

"What—" Lee gaped. "What are you doing here?"

"Eating." He leaned forward, elbows on the bar. "But really, I'm wondering if you'd like to see a movie later."

Lee laughed in delighted disbelief. "I … it depends. Is it going to be scary?"

"Absolutely. Terrifying."

Grinning, Lee came around and Avery stood to meet him. The two hugged.

"Only if you hold my hand," Lee whispered.

"Deal."

⟽ The End ⟾

Here it is - the final chapter of this rather short addition to Camp Refuge.
I tried to fit more in here to explain some of what happened, but it didn't work. I tried to include a scene where Lee is heard talking about his wanderlust with Elias, and Harlan overhears, but Lee and Elias don't have that sort of relationship. And Lee wouldn't have talked to Greg about it ... because he doesn't want Greg to think he's ungrateful.
Instead, we've got Harlan. Watching Lee. Recognizing the signs of a young man itching to be his own person. And that has to be enough.
There's an entire backstory in my brain concerning Mamma G, Stump and Harlan. Snippets get explained, but not all. And ... that's okay. I wanted her to give the impression of someone who is rough, loyal, and tenacious. Someone you don't cross lightly. Even if you're a "mobster bigshot".
Anyway. Despite my limits, and despite all that is unsaid, I hope you liked what is here.
Thanks for reading. I appreciate you all.
Copyright © 2021 Wayne Gray; All Rights Reserved.
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4 hours ago, Quixo said:

Nicely wrapped up. At first I was disappointed in Lee leaving Camp Refuge, but staying wasn't going to complete the process of making him whole.  Surviving on his own was what he needed.  And glad for the reunion with Avery.  We needed that to make us whole.
Thanks for another great story.  Looking forward to the next opus.

You're right. Lee needed to move on. He'd been "kept" for so long, he didn't know if he was capable of living on his own. He and Avery needed to meet again. It's one of those things that just had to happen. Whatever comes now, things will be as they're meant to - finally.

Thanks for reading and for the comments. I appreciate them.

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I think your writer's instinct led you in the right direction with the way you approached this chapter.  Too much detail would have just been jarring and almost like it would have been meant to be another book.  Now, I'm not saying that another book featuring Mamma G's back story and the year and a half of Lee's working for her would be a bad thing (hint, hint).  And Avery becoming a trucker??  You just won't do Mr. Gray, and we wouldn't have it any other way.  Thanks for another amazing addition to the Camp Refuge story. 

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1 hour ago, spyke said:

I think your writer's instinct led you in the right direction with the way you approached this chapter.  Too much detail would have just been jarring and almost like it would have been meant to be another book.  Now, I'm not saying that another book featuring Mamma G's back story and the year and a half of Lee's working for her would be a bad thing (hint, hint).  And Avery becoming a trucker??  You just won't do Mr. Gray, and we wouldn't have it any other way.  Thanks for another amazing addition to the Camp Refuge story. 

Thank you.

I really tried to add more, but it wasn’t working at all. I know it could have been done better, but ... for now, it’s a little beyond me.

As for Mamma G and her story. Honestly, I’d rather tell that moving forward from this point in time. I’d like to do it in a way where anyone could read it without having previous experience with the series too. Bits of the past would be revealed, and background filled in, but from this point in time. I need to think about it.

Thanks for the comments and for reading. 🙂

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22 hours ago, Wayne Gray said:

Thanks, Michael.

I had no idea how easily it'd be to continue spinning off of the original story. I like that I can focus on a few characters and allow them to shine, while also showing snapshots of the others too. It can be tricky to balance, and I'm not quite happy with how I did this time around (we needed more Elias and Rayne, and I just couldn't figure out a way to make it work well), but I'll get better at it.

Till then. 🙂

I think you manage to get the balance between characters just about spot on. Trying to maintain the focus on too many characters can make the story difficult to comprehend and keep up with at times. Given that I read a 'lot' of stories (lol) this can sometimes be an issue for me... but never with your stories :)

Thanks again.

Michael

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4 minutes ago, MJC said:

I think you manage to get the balance between characters just about spot on. Trying to maintain the focus on too many characters can make the story difficult to comprehend and keep up with at times. Given that I read a 'lot' of stories (lol) this can sometimes be an issue for me... but never with your stories :)

Thanks again.

Michael

Thanks, Michael. I appreciate that. 🙂

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I'm awestruck by the economy of writing and elegance with which you wrapped up this tale.

We got to see Avery finally accepting the family relationship with Bill and Anna, and realizing that they really do care for him (which no doubt contributes to his ease with himself and his ability to grow into a good, secure adulthood).

Joseph's police comrades are perfectly accepting of his gayness and his wedding to Orson. O, sunny day, indeed!

Harlan gets to show that he's a good person at heart, despite his mobster origins, through his help to Lee. And that it's a recommendation for an acquaintance like an ordinary person, rather than an enforceable order, came through.

And Lee and Avery have both matured, showing themselves capable of an independent life, and they are set up for a realistic continued relationship, even perhaps the hint of a possible (though not proven) happy-ever-after ending.

--Rigel, who wants to get back to the redwood forests of the Smith River valley one of these years (which is quite a tribute, because he doesn't often need to go back to places he's already been to, albeit decades ago)--but he'll see the area with new eyes thanks to the characters of Camp Refuge

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2 hours ago, Rigel said:

I'm awestruck by the economy of writing and elegance with which you wrapped up this tale.

We got to see Avery finally accepting the family relationship with Bill and Anna, and realizing that they really do care for him (which no doubt contributes to his ease with himself and his ability to grow into a good, secure adulthood).

Joseph's police comrades are perfectly accepting of his gayness and his wedding to Orson. O, sunny day, indeed!

Harlan gets to show that he's a good person at heart, despite his mobster origins, through his help to Lee. And that it's a recommendation for an acquaintance like an ordinary person, rather than an enforceable order, came through.

And Lee and Avery have both matured, showing themselves capable of an independent life, and they are set up for a realistic continued relationship, even perhaps the hint of a possible (though not proven) happy-ever-after ending.

--Rigel, who wants to get back to the redwood forests of the Smith River valley one of these years (which is quite a tribute, because he doesn't often need to go back to places he's already been to, albeit decades ago)--but he'll see the area with new eyes thanks to the characters of Camp Refuge

Thanks for the comments, Rigel.

Avery finally let Bill and Anna love him. More ... he allowed himself to love them back. That has to be one of the scariest things he has ever done, but he took that leap. And they are all better for it.

Joseph's partner and his coworkers accept who he is. They've known for a while, and they value him regardless. They are there to see their brother marry. It is that simple, and that sublime at once.

Harlan is a complex little piece of quartz, isn't he? I can't call him a gem; he'd roll his eyes at that. Smoky quartz. Yeah. Let's go with that. But yes ... even Harlan has a heart. And he recognized the deep need Lee had to prove himself - which is why he was so specific with Mamma G. It was her choice ... and she chose Lee.

I love the journey both Avery and Lee took in their process. Both needed Camp Refuge. Both grew beyond needing it. One had to be pushed from the nest, while the other flew, maybe a touch early ... but he flew all the same. Now, they get a chance at that happy-ever-after ending. What will they do with a chance? We'll have to see.

If you ever find yourself headed this way, let me know. I'd love an excuse to book a campsite on the Smith, show off our trees, and beautiful river, and have some rum by a fire. That sounds like a great weekend to me.

Edited by Wayne Gray
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On 2/28/2021 at 7:54 AM, KayDeeMac said:

A wonderful ending Wayne - thank you so much for a truly heart-wrenching but loving story!  You are a master at writing great stories and I have the utmost respect for your talent!  AGAIN - THANK YOU!!

David 

Thanks for the comments, and for reading, David.

I like this one quite a bit. Yes, there are things that bother me, but overall the messages I wanted to convey got out there. The big one: Redemption is possible, but often only with patience.

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1 minute ago, Bft said:

Glad to see that Lee and Avery have seen each other again, but I keep wondering what too them so long to reconnect and have they been seeing other guys in the meantime? I think that we need book 2 to carry on their story. Hint, hint 🌈🥰

I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Some things take time. Internally, each had to work through some stuff ... and they did.

And if you can invent an extra day a week, I'll work on getting that new book started. 😄

Thanks for the nice comment, and for reading the story.

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On 2/26/2021 at 8:32 PM, kbois said:

**sigh**

Honestly, I'm disappointed. 

Disappointed that it had to end. 

Lee and Avery both made a huge leap forward(both figuratively and literally) on their road to maturity. 

I understand the need to jump forward by a large chunk of time. It just drives me nuts because I love this saga and feel like I'm missing out on a part of their lives. On one hand it would've been amazing to watch (read) their growth as they figured out they weren't kids anymore. But on the other hand an author can't force the characters to give up all the nitty gritty details. It's either there or it's not. If it doesn't feel right then the 'delete' key is the only option. Been there and took that pony for a ride. 

Overall it really was a good ending. Sweet touch with the wedding.  (You FINALLY let them have a sunny day!)  Harlan is Harlan. I like the dude. You've got a great segue for another story so.....

Go...have a nice little "Come to Wayne" moment with those voices in your head and quietly encourage them to cough up another story!!

Thank you Mr. Gray....don't make us wait to long. Things might get ugly. 😁

I agree with you this story was too short 

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5 hours ago, Bft said:

I agree with you this story was too short 

While I'm happy you like the story enough to want more of it, some things can be told in a shorter span.

It is a far worse sin to drag a story on too long as opposed to ending one early. To take a tale beyond the central struggle, and still try to create an artificial sort of interest to retain the reader. That is, to me, a sure way to destroy a good story.

I had similar comments concerning Ash and EmberGuarded, and Bluegrass Symphony. But they ended where the characters stopped speaking to me. Once a story is done, then I have to stop. Yes, at nine chapters, this installment was indeed shorter than any of the others in the series.

Is it too short? Maybe. But better that, than to write the spark out of existence.

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I loved how you wrapped up the story. Mamma G and her nicknames are fantastic lol! Truckerbait, Tiny and Stump hahahahaha 

I think it was a great decision to have Lee leave the camp and strike out on his own. An act of bravery and independence, supported by the love and care of a camp full of incredible folks.

Thanks for the heart wrenching journey and sweet happy ending. I loved this story the whole way through.

And thanks for reviewing and helping me find another great author and series of stories to read, @Parker Owens!

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19 minutes ago, headtransplant said:

I loved how you wrapped up the story. Mamma G and her nicknames are fantastic lol! Truckerbait, Tiny and Stump hahahahaha 

I think it was a great decision to have Lee leave the camp and strike out on his own. An act of bravery and independence, supported by the love and care of a camp full of incredible folks.

Thanks for the heart wrenching journey and sweet happy ending. I loved this story the whole way through.

And thanks for reviewing and helping me find another great author and series of stories to read, @Parker Owens!

Haha. Mamma G is her own little universe of crazy. But she's like a mean mother hen when it comes to her people, and now Truckerbait is counted among those. I think Lee is gonna do just fine there with her and his new, weird little work family.

Lee really had to leave. For him to figure things out, to gain confidence and self-respect, he just had to. It took Greg, Harlan, and Camp Refuge to make leaving possible, but when it was time, he took the leap.

You're welcome. Thank you for reading it. And absolutely, I'm glad you found me thanks to Parker's nice review!

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lol Crazy ending but i love it !👍

i had a feeling that sooner or later, you need to send some characters away, because places inside the camp were limited. Besides, since it is a "camp Refuge", shelter is only temporary, until the broken are able to fly by their own.

So Harlan is promoted to "angel" 😆 and we might have another spin off with Mamma G ? 😜

excellent chapter 👍

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9 hours ago, Danilo Syrtis said:

lol Crazy ending but i love it !👍

i had a feeling that sooner or later, you need to send some characters away, because places inside the camp were limited. Besides, since it is a "camp Refuge", shelter is only temporary, until the broken are able to fly by their own.

So Harlan is promoted to "angel" 😆 and we might have another spin off with Mamma G ? 😜

excellent chapter 👍

Haha. I'm glad you liked the crazy ending. Mamma G is something else, eh? 😛

You're right; people can't keep residing permanently at the camp. And you're also right about the name/mission of the place. People come, get what they need, and they go. The "Camp Refuge Shorts" show that off, and I hope you enjoy those too.

Harlan did what he always does; he got involved where he saw fit, and then he stepped out once he'd put the ball into motion. As for a spin off with Mamma G ... we'll have to see about that. 🙂

Thanks for the comments and for reading!

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On 3/9/2021 at 10:40 PM, Wayne Gray said:

Is it too short? Maybe. But better that, than to write the spark out of existence.

Like many others I'm sad to see the story end after such a short run. There are more than a few threads hanging (loose apron strings?) that could re-ignite the spark and fan the flames of maybe a '10 years later' epilogue. Someone drops in unexpectedly on Harlan. Avery and Lee combine their skills and start a food truck business. Stumpy goes to Vegas and becomes a 'real' one armed bandit with Mamma G, oops 'Greta' as the pit boss.

The editor in me has found few 'Red Pencil' issues in your writing Wayne. Listen to whatever muse you have. And consider this, writers today with computers and online publishing waste much less paper. (Although Camp Refuge would find a place on my bookshelf).

Thank you. Looking forward to what's next.

 

 

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5 minutes ago, Anton_Cloche said:

Like many others I'm sad to see the story end after such a short run. There are more than a few threads hanging (loose apron strings?) that could re-ignite the spark and fan the flames of maybe a '10 years later' epilogue. Someone drops in unexpectedly on Harlan. Avery and Lee combine their skills and start a food truck business. Stumpy goes to Vegas and becomes a 'real' one armed bandit with Mamma G, oops 'Greta' as the pit boss.

The editor in me has found few 'Red Pencil' issues in your writing Wayne. Listen to whatever muse you have. And consider this, writers today with computers and online publishing waste much less paper. (Although Camp Refuge would find a place on my bookshelf).

Thank you. Looking forward to what's next.

Thanks for the nice comment, Anton.

You're right - there are quite a few points where the story could take off again, and I'm listening to those whispers with some interest.

Though I'm happy to hear the red pencil didn't find much work, I think most of that is due to Thorn. That said, I am venturing out on my own a bit with the second Tales from the Refuge installment, just to see how I get on. And I have improved; I can see it here and there.

I'm seriously mulling publication of Ash and Ember. It's a good, stand-alone work, and I keep returning to the idea of both electronic and "dead tree," print on demand solutions for it.

Thanks for the encouragement. I appreciate it. 🙂

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2 hours ago, Jon Jon said:

I read your end of chapter notes where you invited comments but I didn't want to stop reading.  It is a sweet story well told. I thoroughly enjoyed it also I am so happy that Avery found Lee in the end. Thanks so much for all your work in writing it and mostly for sharing it with us .First Kiss Love GIF by Pose FX

Of course. Thank you for taking the time to let me know you enjoyed it. That often keeps authors writing, so it's appreciated.

Take care. And I hope you find another story to like.

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