A Man in a Room, and other poems - 1. "Where have you gone?"

Poem 1 Still a lovely description of the snow and ice of winter .. i can see coated branches and glittering snow falling... Lovely.
Poem 2 ... what wonderful gifts you ask for .. it would have to be a magical being to grant those wishes.
Two lovely poems AC to start the new year and your new book!!
Love the title, btw.

tim xo

Lovely gently falling snow, almost makes me wish for a winter landscape. Number one is evocative and paints a perfect scene in my mind. Number two claims my heart, and asks for gifts I would put under everyone's tree. Thanks for sharing both of these, and for letting us come closer to your twenty one year old self.

Reading of the snowfall, I had a the remembrance of a moment when--I cannot remember at which age--the silent carpet in the quiet of the night had exactly the impact upon me as your lovely verse has recreated today. Thank you for that nudge to my memory!

The fruitless entreaties to Sana Clause echos the pointless prayers to other invisible beings for an outcome which only we can affect. Another interesting memory for me, AC.

On 09/02/2016 07:35 AM, Mikiesboy said:

Poem 1 Still a lovely description of the snow and ice of winter .. i can see coated branches and glittering snow falling... Lovely.

Poem 2 ... what wonderful gifts you ask for .. it would have to be a magical being to grant those wishes.

Two lovely poems AC to start the new year and your new book!!

Love the title, btw.

 

tim xo

Thank you, Tim, as always. I appreciate your comments on both poems, and the snow poem might be interesting to contrast with some of the 'weather' poems that kicked of "My Twentieth Year." Hopefully improvement will be evident

On 09/02/2016 08:09 AM, Parker Owens said:

Lovely gently falling snow, almost makes me wish for a winter landscape. Number one is evocative and paints a perfect scene in my mind. Number two claims my heart, and asks for gifts I would put under everyone's tree. Thanks for sharing both of these, and for letting us come closer to your twenty one year old self.

Thank you, Parker. Reading your comments here make me think about my attraction to Romantic-era poems at this stage in my life. I was drawn to the evocation of natural settings those poems seemed so good at, but slowly left the pure picture-painting aspect behind. What mattered was an initial emotional connection, and then the image. I think this first poem in the lot shows me on that path, as opposed to earlier poems.

Thanks again for your support.

On 09/05/2016 12:31 AM, skinnydragon said:

Reading of the snowfall, I had a the remembrance of a moment when--I cannot remember at which age--the silent carpet in the quiet of the night had exactly the impact upon me as your lovely verse has recreated today. Thank you for that nudge to my memory!

 

The fruitless entreaties to Sana Clause echos the pointless prayers to other invisible beings for an outcome which only we can affect. Another interesting memory for me, AC.

Thank you, Skinny! Your memory sounds lovely, and your comments are gratefully received.

On the second poem, you bring up an interesting point. For my 1880 novella I've been listening to William Henry Fry's Santa Claus Symphony. It premiered in the 1850s and was something like A Christmas Carol is for us – preformed every year to eager audiences, and a scion of the season. I recently read the synopsis for this tone poem – the one written by Fry himself for the premiere – and was pretty surprised to see the artist link St. Nick to the Christ Child, and a hapless 'sinner' meeting his end in a snowstorm. Your mention of prayers put me in mind of that right now.

Thanks again.

Well, I suck at reviewing poetry, so I'll just say I like these a lot, particularly the Santa one. There's a lot he could bring to make everyone happy, but I think he feels that children need it more with their sense of powerlessness.
Older people have more control over what they can do to achieve happiness, but a lot of that comes at the price of sharing it with someone, and that is hard to accomplish.

All I can say is the tone, images, and sentiment in these, drew me in and I loved them..
Nicely done...

On 09/07/2016 09:53 AM, Defiance19 said:

All I can say is the tone, images, and sentiment in these, drew me in and I loved them..

Nicely done...

Thanks, Def. I really appreciate the support

On 09/05/2016 08:03 PM, ColumbusGuy said:

Well, I suck at reviewing poetry, so I'll just say I like these a lot, particularly the Santa one. There's a lot he could bring to make everyone happy, but I think he feels that children need it more with their sense of powerlessness.

Older people have more control over what they can do to achieve happiness, but a lot of that comes at the price of sharing it with someone, and that is hard to accomplish.

You're never poor at anything you attempt, ColumbusGuy

I like your comments on Santa and I just may be able to use them in a project I have on my plate at the moment.

Thanks again!