My Twentieth Year - 22. an amber coal

That, AC, was the most beautiful sunrise I have ever seen!

I'm still puzzling over 46. My devious mind putting meaning I'm sure you never intended,
But I'll need to let her go for now, I have so much reading to catch up on, let alone writing.

On 06/21/2016 06:56 AM, skinnydragon said:

That, AC, was the most beautiful sunrise I have ever seen!

 

I'm still puzzling over 46. My devious mind putting meaning I'm sure you never intended,

But I'll need to let her go for now, I have so much reading to catch up on, let alone writing.

Thanks for your colorful review, skinnydragon. I assume this lovely shade of vermillion is what you got while reading? It's beautiful.

As for the first one, yes, do not read too much into it. Think of both of them as alliteration breaking out of its shell

46 made me laugh .. and dont ask me why cuz i've never had one but it reminded me of cats.. i said dont ask me why....an image of them just popped into my head when i read it
47 was fun with words, it was a sunset... the tone reminding me of Lewis Carroll's Jabberwocky. At least in my head, which after this pair of reviews, you'd likely not want to visit!

How very much I wish I had known your twentieth year self, if only to enjoy a sunrise once...liked this!

No. 46 should be included in every English textbook. Both funny and instructive for the use of tenses.

No 47
A sunrise so splendidly sketched shows substantial skill.

On 06/21/2016 07:19 AM, Mikiesboy said:

46 made me laugh .. and dont ask me why cuz i've never had one but it reminded me of cats.. i said dont ask me why....an image of them just popped into my head when i read it

47 was fun with words, it was a sunset... the tone reminding me of Lewis Carroll's Jabberwocky. At least in my head, which after this pair of reviews, you'd likely not want to visit!

Thanks, Tim. I like your take on No. 46 – I can see a cat lurking around there.

As for what you say on No. 47, I'm honored. I know Lewis Carroll was an early influence on your interest in literature, so to be mentioned in the same breath with him is an honor.

Thank you again!

On 06/21/2016 11:21 AM, Parker Owens said:

How very much I wish I had known your twentieth year self, if only to enjoy a sunrise once...liked this!

I doubt you would have enjoyed my insomniac ways, but it's nice to think we might have been a comfort to one another.

Thanks for the sweet review, Parker. You're the best

On 06/22/2016 04:41 AM, J.HunterDunn said:

No. 46 should be included in every English textbook. Both funny and instructive for the use of tenses.

 

No 47

A sunrise so splendidly sketched shows substantial skill.

Thank you, Peter! After I read your review, I went back and re-read No. 46. It made me laugh to think of it in textbooks, but I do see what you mean….

As for No. 47 – cheers. I rather like this poem, although it's more an exercise in words that an emotional plea, but most of my poems at this time are very emo. Maybe it's a nice break.

Thanks again!