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My Twentieth Year - 2. wings

Poem No. 3

 

I see you in a dream of blue –

the color a hazy melody –

a vision, set anew,

given me at a price hardly free.

 

 

Poem No. 4

 

"It is that rare thing, a perfect composition,

satisfying in its completeness, precise in its

detail – solid without weight, lightness sans

frivolity. It is like a last movement

by Mozart when the master pulls everything

together and brings off another miracle."

 

 

Poem No. 5

Lyrics:

 

You are a radiant sun shining on an unworthy shore

warming sweetly regions benign

hidden though they are in the cold dark

You stimulate them with your light.

 

Your light draws love from a very deep place hidden from even me

sweetly warming regions benign

which I didn't realize were there

Your light, so gentle, do I need.

 

You are a radiant sun shining on an unworthy shore

with your light can I take on wings

with you can I create dreams coming true

Your thought makes words dull in contrast.

 

because

 

You are a radiant sun shining on an unworthy shore

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Wow AC another lovely set of poems for us! I sort of don't like trying to figure these out.
In some ways because they are your history, I'd like to see some commentary from you... your choice of course!
Poem 3.
Made me feel like you met someone you liked but in the long run you realized they were going to cost you too much of yourself. Like he was a vampire of sorts. And not in the good sexy way!
Poem 4.
I don't know.. like you're speaking of perfection. Didn't someone say of Mozart that he sometimes wrote without an erasure or scratch out. Omg to be that talented...
Poem 5.
Some one who is like a muse, someone you care about and who inspires you. But someone whose love you feel unworthy of ...
Oh I don't know if I'm even close.. I liked them all, AC.
Thank you for posting them..
tim

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Poem number 5 is my favorite of this group. It's simply beautiful.

 

All of these poems show a maturity beyond age twenty. IMO :)

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On 01/12/2016 07:00 AM, Mikiesboy said:

Wow AC another lovely set of poems for us! I sort of don't like trying to figure these out.

In some ways because they are your history, I'd like to see some commentary from you... your choice of course!

Poem 3.

Made me feel like you met someone you liked but in the long run you realized they were going to cost you too much of yourself. Like he was a vampire of sorts. And not in the good sexy way!

Poem 4.

I don't know.. like you're speaking of perfection. Didn't someone say of Mozart that he sometimes wrote without an erasure or scratch out. Omg to be that talented...

Poem 5.

Some one who is like a muse, someone you care about and who inspires you. But someone whose love you feel unworthy of ...

Oh I don't know if I'm even close.. I liked them all, AC.

Thank you for posting them..

tim

Thanks for a great review, Tim. I welcome any feedback people may have to offer on these. When I can, I will try to give information as I remember it, as with the Two Doors Down poem.

 

Poems 3 and 5 give the impression of being written to/for/about a person/persons – but quite frankly, I have no recollection who that could be. If I had not been so careful segregating and sorting them, I would almost think No. 5 is a Ross Poem, but it is not.

 

With No. 4, it seems like I'm speaking about something specific, but again, I do not remember what :blushing: With the manuscripts of Mozart, I was lucky enough to see some in a museum exhibit once. Not only are there no corrections of any kind, but it appears like the composer could not write the notes down fast enough. The handwriting is so fluid, it looks almost hastily done, and yet remains perfectly legible.

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On 01/12/2016 12:44 PM, Lisa said:

Poem number 5 is my favorite of this group. It's simply beautiful.

 

All of these poems show a maturity beyond age twenty. IMO :)

Thanks for your comments and praise, Lisa. I appreciate your support and opinions. :)

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Being a slow reviewer has the advantage of being able to read other reviews and the replies to them. The absence of recollection of the who and why, fit the way I had read them.
The first two seem to belong together. I was intrigued by the quotation marks in the second one. It is as if in the dream of blue the words of the quoted lines came to you as if dictated; there was no escape but to put the impression in these specific words.
It is so exact and yet so universal, that it must indeed be difficult to remember what brought it about, for it can apply to many persons/things that may bring about awe.

 

The last one almost make me hear a melody to which it must be sung. I especially liked the notion, that someone else's love can stirr unknown places in the self. So true.

 

Thanks, AC. I enjoyed them very much.

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On 01/13/2016 06:22 AM, J.HunterDunn said:

Being a slow reviewer has the advantage of being able to read other reviews and the replies to them. The absence of recollection of the who and why, fit the way I had read them.

The first two seem to belong together. I was intrigued by the quotation marks in the second one. It is as if in the dream of blue the words of the quoted lines came to you as if dictated; there was no escape but to put the impression in these specific words.

It is so exact and yet so universal, that it must indeed be difficult to remember what brought it about, for it can apply to many persons/things that may bring about awe.

 

The last one almost make me hear a melody to which it must be sung. I especially liked the notion, that someone else's love can stirr unknown places in the self. So true.

 

Thanks, AC. I enjoyed them very much.

Thank you for a great review, Peter. The 'Mozart' quote had me wondering too, so I googled the expression to see if I had copied it from someplace, and found nothing. Anyway, I present it with the quotes as that's the way I found it written on the page.

 

I love what you have to say about the 'blue' poem, and the lyrics as well. Thanks once again for all of your support!

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A radiant sun shining on an unworthy shore.
I relate so well to this poem it is uncanny. There are tears at this image, and what it makes me think about. Thank you.

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On 01/19/2016 09:21 AM, Parker Owens said:

A radiant sun shining on an unworthy shore.

I relate so well to this poem it is uncanny. There are tears at this image, and what it makes me think about. Thank you.

Thank you, Parker. I think I mentioned in an earlier review that I do not remember to whom or what this poem was intended. On the one hand that's a bit sad, but on the other, maybe it was always meant to be a 'universal' poem. That is a possibility.

 

It touches me to hear it brought moisture to your eye :kiss:

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The theme of music that comes up with Poems 3 and 4 is enticing. Poem 4 in particular leaves me inspired and in awe at your gift with words ;). Poem 5 makes me wonder who this lovely person must be that you wrote this about (IF it's about somebody :) lol).

 

I'm enjoying your poetry. Thank you for sharing these.

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