Mark - 1. Mark

Short and to the point. I do remember your other poem. Great job.

I like it. Subtle and simple and without wasted words. Nice job. x

Repeated in vain sounds like the tear dropped three times. Whoever Mark is, he probably wants you to move on. Nice poem.

I just love this poem. It speaks of chances missed and opportunity lost. Simply lovely Addy!

Short, but touching. I think Ashi hit it on the nose when he compared the 'in vain' to three tear drops. Nice job!

I like reading things from Mark's pov, b/c we were first introduced to the story with Sam and the first story had to do with him and his pov. I hated Mark right away after reading that story. lol

But the last story and this poem say it all. Mark's wishes and his tears are all in vain. He can shed as many tears as he wants, but he will never get Sam back again.

Great job, Addy!

It was nice, thanks for sharing. Hope to see the third, fourth and…. of your poems in English.

On 05/02/2014 05:38 AM, joann414 said:

Short and to the point. I do remember your other poem. Great job.

Thanks Jo Ann, that's what I wanted.

On 05/02/2014 06:52 AM, carringtonrj said:

I like it. Subtle and simple and without wasted words. Nice job. x

On 05/02/2014 07:07 AM, Ashi said:

Repeated in vain sounds like the tear dropped three times. Whoever Mark is, he probably wants you to move on. Nice poem.

On 05/02/2014 08:35 AM, Cole Matthews said:

I just love this poem. It speaks of chances missed and opportunity lost. Simply lovely Addy!

On 05/02/2014 09:23 AM, Bill W said:

Short, but touching. I think Ashi hit it on the nose when he compared the 'in vain' to three tear drops. Nice job!

On 05/02/2014 01:43 PM, Lisa said:

I like reading things from Mark's pov, b/c we were first introduced to the story with Sam and the first story had to do with him and his pov. I hated Mark right away after reading that story. lol

 

But the last story and this poem say it all. Mark's wishes and his tears are all in vain. He can shed as many tears as he wants, but he will never get Sam back again.

 

Great job, Addy!

On 05/02/2014 02:35 PM, nostic said:

It was nice, thanks for sharing. Hope to see the third, fourth and…. of your poems in English.

A loss that will not come again. Seems so forlorn Aditus. I feel sorry for Mark.

On 05/04/2014 01:25 PM, comicfan said:

A loss that will not come again. Seems so forlorn Aditus. I feel sorry for Mark.

I never thought it could happen when I wrote 'The Wardrobe' but somehow I feel sorry for him too. He sneaked in and manged to become my favorite character actually. I'd like to give him his own multi-chapter story someday. For now it's just a poem. Thank you for your review Wayne.

Hey I missed this one too when it came out *pouts* I Think I was on holiday then.. hmmm.. Poor Mark, pain, lonely, sad, heartache

Yes, I am now even more convinced that Mark deserves a story ! Go to work - Mark needs you !

On 06/14/2014 09:38 PM, Slytherin said:

Hey I missed this one too when it came out *pouts* I Think I was on holiday then.. hmmm.. Poor Mark, pain, lonely, sad, heartache

 

Yes, I am now even more convinced that Mark deserves a story ! Go to work - Mark needs you !

Thank you. *hug*

Mark, the Haiku:

I stole Sam's keys to

run you over with a car

but, you were redeemed

To be honest, I thought I deleted this. 

4 hours ago, Aditus said:

To be honest, I thought I deleted this. 

What, no. It's one of your first English poems. And it's still good. Leave it.