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  • Frostina
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  • 04/12/2011
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Poetry posted in this category are works of fiction. Names, places, characters, events, and incidents are created by the authors' imaginations or are used fictitiously. Any resemblances to actual persons (living or dead), organizations, companies, events, or locales are entirely coincidental.
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Shoulder to Cry On - 1. My Shoulder to Cry On

A sleepless week, a notebook, a pen and a very, very special person made this possible...

Calls, one after the other;

Problems... too many for me to sort.

Just sat through the night in silence;

With nothing to say for my day

A heavy heart is what I carried with me to the next day.

 

Burdens, each heavier than the last;

Chores... too many to handle.

Exhausted, I looked around at the mess,

That I didn’t get a chance to clear.

A weary body is what I dragged to bed each night.

 

Dreams, oh so elusive!

Nightmares... too many to ignore.

Sleepless, I toss and turn;

Warily eyeing the bottle on the nightstand.

The used pages of my notebook bear witness to it all.

 

A fresh breath of air;

A new smell – of freedom? (I hoped)

My eyes grew wide, my heart leapt with joy.

Could it be... could it be my ‘Shoulder to cry on’?

The weight of my unshed tears was what made me hesitate.

 

* * *

 

Broken promises, over and over;

Old wounds: dug up and raw...

Your words seemed too good to be true;

Was it really ‘You’ that I saw?

 

Too many nights I had hoped,

For someone like you to come along;

Someone who would tell me it’s alright –

I didn’t always have to be so strong.

 

Together we could fall apart,

And then pick each other up.

You didn’t really know what your words did to me,

The hope flared. It just – wouldn’t stop!

 

Promise me, tell me, when I take your hand

You wouldn’t ever leave.

It’s almost my nightmare, back again:

One step; then would I rejoice, or grieve?

 

Your hold is strong,

On my hand, my heart and my gaze;

The drop-off is just a few steps ahead;

The light in your eyes doesn’t let my trust faze.

 

The smiles break free –

The glee in us, unbidden. How?

We’d been waiting too long for each other,

We can confidently leap off the rocks now!

 

The heavy stone weighing us down finally gone;

The lightened souls soar – Into the Unknown!

* * *

This is my first attempt at poetry.. so... Please let me know what you thought of it :) Thank you in advance! Hope you liked it.
Copyright © 2011 Frostina; All Rights Reserved.
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Marzipan

I think it was honest and truthful and came from your heart.

 

That makes all the difference. Love this poem babe.

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SidLove

That was really good! I didnt know about this one... thanks for pointing it out to me! I know I have missing from here for too long lol

Anyways, I loved the way you wrote this one, the words were heartfelt - I could tell! Awesome Blossom, Frosty!!

 

 

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Frostina
On 04/18/2011 06:48 PM, SidLove said:
That was really good! I didnt know about this one... thanks for pointing it out to me! I know I have missing from here for too long lol

Anyways, I loved the way you wrote this one, the words were heartfelt - I could tell! Awesome Blossom, Frosty!!

 

Glad u liked it Sid, it's a personal poem and it's really really special! :) This anthology was published just today, so u didnt miss it for too long, lol. anyway, thanks for the review!
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Frostina
On 04/18/2011 04:49 PM, Marzipan said:
I think it was honest and truthful and came from your heart.

 

That makes all the difference. Love this poem babe.

Thank you darling. I knew i could count on you to know what was truly heartfelt for me! :) I'm glad u liked it! :)
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Agaith

That was an intense poem with a lot of truthful feelings in it.

 

never never never never never think you can't write poetry again otherwise i will come over to India and shake you until you agree you can :P

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Frostina
On 04/18/2011 09:25 PM, Agaith said:
That was an intense poem with a lot of truthful feelings in it.

 

never never never never never think you can't write poetry again otherwise i will come over to India and shake you until you agree you can :P

Thank you.. and yes.. there was a lot of feelings behind it! :) i'm so glad u liked it! Come to India, huh? well like i said before, i'd take that risk! :P especially if that brings u here :D:hug: thanks for reading and reviewing!
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Jwolf

There's a big difference between poetry for the sake of poetry and honest pouring out of the words inside one's heart, and I think you did that. I loved it! I also loved the cadence of the first section. Very interesting, unique. I liked it.

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Frostina
On 04/19/2011 01:16 AM, Jwolf said:
There's a big difference between poetry for the sake of poetry and honest pouring out of the words inside one's heart, and I think you did that. I loved it! I also loved the cadence of the first section. Very interesting, unique. I liked it.
Thank you J! :) it's really nice to see my heartfelt words appreciated :) The first part was my favourite too :) That brought out the turmoil well. I hoped :) Thanks again for the review :)
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jian_sierra

This was your first time, eh? You just make it seem so easy, don't you? First with the story writing and now with poems! **sigh** Anyway, I really like this one because I can relate to it in so many ways. Thanks :)

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Frostina
On 04/19/2011 04:21 AM, jian_sierra said:
This was your first time, eh? You just make it seem so easy, don't you? First with the story writing and now with poems! **sigh** Anyway, I really like this one because I can relate to it in so many ways. Thanks :)
Wow, I'm glad i touched your heart! i guess thats what we try to do when we write isnt it? And this time, with the poem, i had some help... The emotions made the flow the way it flowed. I had no idea abt poetry before i wrote this. and i literally stared at my notebook thinking , 'wow, I wrote this? it's a poem!' lol. Thanks again for reading and reviewing it! :)
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Frostina
On 04/21/2011 11:07 PM, Bumblebee said:
I liked it, It's a personal poem, and it's something I can relate to :hug:
Thank you :) Like i said earlier.. glad i could touch a chord :hug:
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Jim_83

To a common mind, unknown comes with a feeling of darkness, uncertainty and may be fear (at least to me and many people that I know of). You have the incredible ability to look at unknown under bright sunshine rather searching for it with a tiny oil lamp (!) and this poem just proves that... And that is probably the biggest source of inspiration to me till date... thank you and I am proud of you... :)

 

(No need to respond to this here- I just felt compelled to write something against this poem, because this is my 'favorite' among all your works so far - hungry to see more :P )

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Frostina
On 04/22/2011 06:09 AM, Jim_83 said:
To a common mind, unknown comes with a feeling of darkness, uncertainty and may be fear (at least to me and many people that I know of). You have the incredible ability to look at unknown under bright sunshine rather searching for it with a tiny oil lamp (!) and this poem just proves that... And that is probably the biggest source of inspiration to me till date... thank you and I am proud of you... :)

 

(No need to respond to this here- I just felt compelled to write something against this poem, because this is my 'favorite' among all your works so far - hungry to see more :P )

:*) Didn't expect to see this here.. but... Thank you :):*)
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Sara Alva

Okay, review below mine, so sweet! Hehe. You lucky lady :P

 

Well, a nice start to my day, reading such beautiful poem. Agreeing w/ what other's said-- you can tell that this poem has personal implications, which, imo, means it conveys emotions that much better. It does so well, in fact, that I could draw a personal connection of my own.

 

Look at me, reading poetry and sorta getting it :P Great job Frosty!

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Frostina
On 04/24/2011 02:22 AM, Sara Alva said:
Okay, review below mine, so sweet! Hehe. You lucky lady :P

 

Well, a nice start to my day, reading such beautiful poem. Agreeing w/ what other's said-- you can tell that this poem has personal implications, which, imo, means it conveys emotions that much better. It does so well, in fact, that I could draw a personal connection of my own.

 

Look at me, reading poetry and sorta getting it :P Great job Frosty!

Thanks Sara. and yes.. i do look pretty lucky, don't i? :P I'm glad I could convey the emotions well. because what i did was literally portray MY emotions ATM :) Thanks for reading and reviewing it :)
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Renee Stevens

I love this poem and how the emotions just leap off the page. Emotions are a hard thing to write about and I think that you did a beautiful job with this piece. You truly have a gift, being able to bring such strong emotions to your work. I look forward to reading many more works by you! Keep up the great work.

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Frostina
On 04/26/2011 06:19 PM, Renee Stevens said:
I love this poem and how the emotions just leap off the page. Emotions are a hard thing to write about and I think that you did a beautiful job with this piece. You truly have a gift, being able to bring such strong emotions to your work. I look forward to reading many more works by you! Keep up the great work.
Emotions do tend to leap off the page when its personal, dont u think? :) and thanks for the help on this! :hug: and i will keep on writing.. or so I hope :) lol
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Cailen

Cailen Poem Rating OVERALL: 10/10

Content: Even in your poems you show a master of setting a scene to build a powerful message, It carries well and the message comes through clearly.

Flow: As mentioned it is telling a story and it builds an emotional climax and allows you to leave with the strong feelings it expresses.

Poignancy: Masterfully Done.

Grammar: Would expect no less than perfection from you ;)

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Frostina
On 04/28/2011 06:36 PM, Cailen said:
Cailen Poem Rating OVERALL: 10/10

Content: Even in your poems you show a master of setting a scene to build a powerful message, It carries well and the message comes through clearly.

Flow: As mentioned it is telling a story and it builds an emotional climax and allows you to leave with the strong feelings it expresses.

Poignancy: Masterfully Done.

Grammar: Would expect no less than perfection from you ;)

WOW! a 10/10! didn't see that coming! :P just outts curiosity though, how much would u have given my story? :P lol anyway, i'm glad u liked it! it is emotional and thanks for the awesome review :D
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Mark92

Hey Frosty girl :) Just like you, this poem is both awesome and beautiful :D

You should do more and share your awesomeness lol.

 

Love ya loads frosty :wub:

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Frostina
On 05/26/2011 11:50 PM, Mark92 said:
Hey Frosty girl :) Just like you, this poem is both awesome and beautiful :D

You should do more and share your awesomeness lol.

 

Love ya loads frosty :wub:

Thank a lot Marky! ^_^ I'd completely missed this review, and that's why it took me so long to respond... I'm glad i could convey the emotions. I'm sure i'll share if/when i write more :D
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Lugh

Well Frosty, I like it.

Sorry it took so long to get to reviewing it.

You have some nice imagry here and a logical progression from beginning to end.

Kudos.

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Frostina
On 09/19/2011 03:07 AM, Lugh said:
Well Frosty, I like it.

Sorry it took so long to get to reviewing it.

You have some nice imagry here and a logical progression from beginning to end.

Kudos.

Wow, Thanks for the review Lugh. :) glad you liked it. just hope i get better now! :D also, i believe its better late than never. :P so, no worries abt the fact that the review was delayed. lol. :hug: cheers!
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