C James Posted March 12, 2012 Posted March 12, 2012 Infinite DensityFate cannot be denied, and neither can Density.
Red_A Posted March 16, 2012 Posted March 16, 2012 (edited) When I first read the story, it was blind read. I did not know what the anthology title was. I found it was a CJ classic, although there are no cliffs in Phoenix, all the others features were there. A mystery story like an Agatha Christie story, all the clues were there but you did not realise until you finished the story. Then I looked at the anthology title, and discovered on a second reading, not only was the main theme, the anthology title, but there were other sub themes with the same title idea, and then after discussing it with CJ. There were several more sub sub themes. How many themes reflecting the anthology title can you find. Have a go, I recommend the story, and see how many you can find! Edited March 16, 2012 by Red_A
RobV Posted March 17, 2012 Posted March 17, 2012 A mystery story? I thought it was very predictable. But still super cute and fun to read. Nice change from all the cliffhangers, crocodiles and looming decapitations.
C James Posted March 18, 2012 Author Posted March 18, 2012 When I first read the story, it was blind read. I did not know what the anthology title was. I found it was a CJ classic, although there are no cliffs in Phoenix, all the others features were there. A mystery story like an Agatha Christie story, all the clues were there but you did not realise until you finished the story. Then I looked at the anthology title, and discovered on a second reading, not only was the main theme, the anthology title, but there were other sub themes with the same title idea, and then after discussing it with CJ. There were several more sub sub themes. How many themes reflecting the anthology title can you find. Have a go, I recommend the story, and see how many you can find! Thanks!! I wonder if anyone would be surprised to learn that when I set out to write this, I intended i9t to be far simpler, and around 2000 words, not the 12000 it came out as? Some might accuse me of being verbose by nature... in which case, I can argue back by posting a 37 page explanation as to why, exactly, I am not verbose. A mystery story? I thought it was very predictable. But still super cute and fun to read. Nice change from all the cliffhangers, crocodiles and looming decapitations. The story was first person, so we could only know what Chad knew. So, was it coincidence that it was Carroll who directed Chad to the discussion group "Matt" happened to be in? The same "Matt" who was trying to find out more about his roomate's past (perhaps by making phone calls topeople who knew him back then?) And then at the end, Jason snatches up the phone to Carroll, quickly explaining that he'd spoken to her once before, while Chad was in class. So, a coincidence?
Benji Posted March 19, 2012 Posted March 19, 2012 .............Haha! Great story, even though I saw it all coming down, it was a great read. I remember leaving San Diego for a visit to my family in Las Vegas. Even though I I left at 4am it was still warm and just after passing Victorville and entering the lower basin of Barstow I too heard the thunk sound of a belt falling off my trusty Datsun pickup.It was probably 98-100 at that time in the morning. Perfect nickname for Chad, and although told mostly first person by Chad, I would have liked to have heard about Jason's situtaion from Utah. Jess more then deserved what got handed to him, I shudder to think what would have happened had he not given his GF the heads up. Great story CJ!
EMoe57 Posted March 19, 2012 Posted March 19, 2012 Here we go - post #666 Hey CJ, Don't you think a Spoiler alert on that reply would've been appropriate?!?
C James Posted March 20, 2012 Author Posted March 20, 2012 .............Haha! Great story, even though I saw it all coming down, it was a great read. I remember leaving San Diego for a visit to my family in Las Vegas. Even though I I left at 4am it was still warm and just after passing Victorville and entering the lower basin of Barstow I too heard the thunk sound of a belt falling off my trusty Datsun pickup.It was probably 98-100 at that time in the morning. Perfect nickname for Chad, and although told mostly first person by Chad, I would have liked to have heard about Jason's situtaion from Utah. Jess more then deserved what got handed to him, I shudder to think what would have happened had he not given his GF the heads up. Great story CJ! I hope it was a belt for just the AC; I've had them go like that on the alternator belt, and some cars have one belt for both. Jesse definitely got some poetic justice. Here we go - post #666 Hey CJ, Don't you think a Spoiler alert on that reply would've been appropriate?!? I added the spoiler space to my post; good point!!!! And 666? The number of the beast!!!! And next comes 667, the neighbor of the beast!
StefanAustria Posted March 20, 2012 Posted March 20, 2012 This one is indeed nowhere near a cliff. Strange. But then, cliffs in one-shots are somehow counterproductive With regards to verbosity I very much prefer 12000 over 2000 words, so spot on. 1
C James Posted March 24, 2012 Author Posted March 24, 2012 This one is indeed nowhere near a cliff. Strange. But then, cliffs in one-shots are somehow counterproductive With regards to verbosity I very much prefer 12000 over 2000 words, so spot on. Thanks!!! And of course, nowhere near a cliff... I'd never go anywhere near a cliff, or a cliffhanger.
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