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Hog Wild with Words!


Cia

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Every once in a while it can be fun to go outside the box, away from the usual style, and go a bit wild with your words. Louis did an excellent article recently about weak writing and avoiding overused words and phrases. That stuck with me, as it is something I strive for as well. However, I just entered a contest on Kim Fielding's blog where the goal was to write a paragraph that her kids would find boring. I decided to do something ... different.

 

Stepping outside the box from my normal style had me choosing my words with careful consideration to share an image, a thought, a scene but in the most flowery and complicated way possible. This is completely opposite of my usual style where my goal is to entertain in the simplest words possible.

 

I've obviously not been stretching myself enough with writing projects lately, because this was the most fun I'd had in a long time, oddly enough. LOL

 

I'd love to see what kind of boring paragraph you guys can come up with too (and her contest is running to the 19th for a copy of her eBook an a $10 GC to Dreamspinner Press). You can find it through this link, here.

 

My boring paragraph:

 

Hast thou come for me, at the waning of my twilight? No sound heralds thy approach, save that of my soul's entreaty. In winter night, at midnight's call, my bedchamber resounds with sonorousness of thy silent advent to sunder my mortal coils. Fosooth, most merrily dost I greet thee, a fulsome fate to some, but to this wearisome world I bid, not a lament from my lips, but a soft fare thee well.

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Zombie

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Gazing at nothing in particular the nondescript individual seemed to move slightly, but perhaps he didn't. It was difficult to be sure with the drizzle. Meanwhile, Mr Mellish - an average-looking and really rather dull person - was wondering why nothing interesting was happening in his boring and pointless life as he opened the front door into the brown-painted office and asked Enid, in his flat monotone, if the new paper clips had arrived. Enid, looking up listlessly, replied in a bland toneless voice that, yes, the new paper clips had indeed arrived and were in a box on Mr Mellish's desk awaiting his arrival.

Asleep yet? :P
 

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Cia

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LOL, Zombie. Paper clips, oh no, think of the myriad uses. I'm enthralled, enthralled I tell you! Didn't you know office supplies just do it for me? :P

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scotty94

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I woke one morning, got dressed, ate breakfast headed to school, on the bus home I stared out of the window at nothing interesting just a dull, boring, pointless day that night I feel asleep.

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Cia

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Ahh, a nice boring sentence Scotty, but the goal is a whole paragraph!

Dolores Esteban

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Zombie, I would like to read your story.

 

My attempt:

 

Artaban was a great king. He descended from a long line of great men. First was Sakan, he lived 82 years and fathered five sons: Emenel, Eded, Sinel, Hepham and Melen. Emenel lived 76 years and fathered three sons: Jaded, Esmal and Gamel. Jaded lived 91 years and fathered six sons: Kush, Hamael, Abel, Sagan, Tibel and Hamael. Kush lived 67 years and fathered four sons: Lomel, Rezer, Emeth and Simbel. Lomel lived 86 years and fathered five sons: Shim, Gomuth, Leth, Isher and Gethel. Shim lived 74 years and fathered three sons: Kebeth, Belin and Shesh. Kebeth founded the great city 564 years ago. He lived 77 years and fathered seven sons...

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Slytherin

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Gazing at nothing in particular the nondescript individual seemed to move slightly, but perhaps he didn't. It was difficult to be sure with the drizzle. Meanwhile, Mr Mellish - an average-looking and really rather dull person - was wondering why nothing interesting was happening in his boring and pointless life as he opened the front door into the brown-painted office and asked Enid, in his flat monotone, if the new paper clips had arrived. Enid, looking up listlessly, replied in a bland toneless voice that, yes, the new paper clips had indeed arrived and were in a box on Mr Mellish's desk awaiting his arrival.

 

Asleep yet? :P

 

:lol: that was fun ! Maybe time to change from Member to Author, Mr Zombie ! :hug:

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Cia

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LOL, Dolores! Very 'Genesis' which is extremely tedious to read. Thrown in a few thousand begats and you'd be right there with those ancient writers. ;)

Dolores Esteban

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Good idea. :) I'm planning to write a Genesis-like project during this year's NaNoWriMo. As you know, the word count is 50,000 words. I'm hoping to not make the story sound dull, but I might get stuck at 25,000 or so, who knows. A few thousand begats might make me a winner. Lol. Copy and paste...

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joann414

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Erin had less than most, but more than others.  HIs absence of wealth spoke volumes to the rich folk.  Who wants to associate with one of Erin's caliber or status in society.  Paris had no low society, only the high society, in which the socialites abided.  One only had to walk into the ballroom of the wealthy and be blinded by the glittering of jewels and observe the upturned noses to know that Erin, the one in the corner was'nt one of them.  He was the paragon of nothingness.  But, he was content to sit in the corner and observe those the city embraced.

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Cia

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I like it Jo Ann but I get this mental picture of a ball and jewels, etc... so I don't know how boring the paragraph is, though Erin sounds like a real buzz kill.

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Cia

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BTW, you guys should follow that link and post your paragraphs, along with your email, on Kim's blog.

Zombie

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Not a good day with technology today - won't let me post under Comments :(

But I think thebrinkoftime has the winner :P

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