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Fleeting Eternity

I'm a nice guy.

I think about how others feel, consider their beliefs, and I try to be respectful in as many things as I can.

So when I write I do my best to adhere to those same principals.  Yet, therein lies a limitation.

Not rocking the boat of the reader, not challenging their beliefs, not forcing them to grow is a failing.  It's one that I struggle to move beyond, and it has kept me from posting work.  I know some of the things I've written will simply not pass muster for some readers who are decidedly experts in their own slice of experience - an experience I seek to depict as an integral part of my story.

A friend had to remind me that I'm not claiming to be an authority.  That I am only showing the lives and struggles of my characters, and not staking ownership on the only path.  I've put in the work.  I've done my diligence, and it's time to set it free.

Anyway, this one means a lot to me.  It means a lot.   Maybe that's a part of why I have such a tremendous trepidation around turning it loose.  The pictures embedded in most of the scenes are part and parcel of the work, which is why I am only linking it from my Google drive vs posting.  By the way, Pexels is a fantastic place to dig up free to use pictures for your own artistic endeavors, and BeFunky was the program I used to tinker with them and add captions.

Fleeting Eternity

It can be a tough story to read.  There's a lot of emotion here, but I love how it turned out.

So, here we go.  As terrifying as it is, I'm setting it free.

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I still think you should post this to the stories archive, man, but this is a start. ;) 

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1 hour ago, Thorn Wilde said:

I still think you should post this to the stories archive, man, but this is a start. ;) 

We'll see.  🙂  Thanks, Thorn.

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21 minutes ago, Mikiesboy said:

It's your job to rock the boat, and mine. I firmly believe that. I write about stuff i've never experienced. I research the crap outta things and find 'what if's' and could that be possibles. Then if it is even remotely possible i write it. Could my guy feel his dick after the accident? Could that stop? Could it come back? Yes, yes and oh heck yes.

Do not be afraid to tell your character's story.. Do not. Write bravely and with conviction. In this world or the next, anything is possible. It's your job, and mine to make it right enough for people to believe it. And if we do our work properly, they will.

All hail weasels, bunnies and polar bears!!   

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Thanks, tim.  I've had Fleeting Eternity in my back pocket for a while now, but it really is time for it to get out there, I think.  A few on this site have read it all the way through - beta readers and such.  And Thorn edited the crap out of it.  So the mechanics are nice.

I have hopes that it'll resonate with some.  It's a good little story.

All Hail weasels, bunnies and polar bears, indeed.  🙂

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Well, as a perfectly neutral reader, I’m able to tell you I enjoyed two chapters immensely. Thank you for unbinding this story...

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19 minutes ago, Parker Owens said:

Well, as a perfectly neutral reader, I’m able to tell you I enjoyed two chapters immensely. Thank you for unbinding this story...

Thanks, Parker.

This one is a rollercoaster.  It's intense, bright, dark, and sweet all at once.  If you choose to stick with it, then I hope it speaks to you all the way through. 

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This needs posting to the story archive. It needs to be seen by as many people as possible. It’s a fantastic story that deserves recognition.

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2 minutes ago, chris191070 said:

This needs posting to the story archive. It needs to be seen by as many people as possible. It’s a fantastic story that deserves recognition.

Thanks, Chris.
To do it I'll need to take the pictures out.  They won't format correctly, so ... I would just have to let go of the pictures, I guess.  Or maybe create an album and link them.
I've got a lot of irons in the fire currently, so this one will have to wait to be posted in the archive.  But, thanks for the nice sentiment.  I liked the story a lot too.

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Can be a difficult story to read in parts, but it's beautiful and enchanting in the end.

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Just now, Fae Briona said:

Can be a difficult story to read in parts, but it's beautiful and enchanting in the end.

Thank you, Fae.  You read as I went along, and I appreciate you for that.  Your feedback was helpful in many ways.  I know it was tough, but I'm glad you found it worth the journey.

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Please excuse my ignorance since I’m not an author, but is it possible to post pdfs as chapters? The pdf format was designed to maintain the look of a page across platforms for things like sales brochures and instruction manuals. It would seem to be a great solution if the software GA uses will accept it…

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4 hours ago, droughtquake said:

Please excuse my ignorance since I’m not an author, but is it possible to post pdfs as chapters? The pdf format was designed to maintain the look of a page across platforms for things like sales brochures and instruction manuals. It would seem to be a great solution if the software GA uses will accept it…

It won't. The text editor for adding stories to the story archive is by and large the same as this text editor, for commenting on stories, writing blog posts, posting in the forums, and so on. Same basic software. 

You can insert pictures, though. You just need a place to host them. But it won't format as nicely as what Wayne has made already.

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7 hours ago, droughtquake said:

Please excuse my ignorance since I’m not an author, but is it possible to post pdfs as chapters? The pdf format was designed to maintain the look of a page across platforms for things like sales brochures and instruction manuals. It would seem to be a great solution if the software GA uses will accept it…

I appreciate that you asked, but Thorn is right.

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5 hours ago, Thorn Wilde said:

It won't. The text editor for adding stories to the story archive is by and large the same as this text editor, for commenting on stories, writing blog posts, posting in the forums, and so on. Same basic software. 

You can insert pictures, though. You just need a place to host them. But it won't format as nicely as what Wayne has made already.

Yeah.  I think I need to just get over keeping the integrity of the whole thing intact.  My beta reader on this one was adamant it needs to get out there, which is flattering.

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Well, I've started it.  Two chapters are now loose in the world.

Thanks, @Thorn Wildefor additional edits.  Thanks, @Fae Briona, @chris191070and @Parker Owensfor reading and commenting on the work from my Google Drive documents.  I'm sure there are others too, but those are the ones I can remember.

It's a little scary.  When something is deeply meaningful to us, the way that this story is to me, it is a risk to share it.

But... someone once told me to "write bravely".  It's good advice.  It's advice that I'm taking.

I hope the story impacts people in a meaningful way.

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1, 2, & 3...  lots of elements beginning to swirl...  Do I sense the onset of "bubble, bubble, toil and trouble"?  I read on to see.  Well done Wayne.

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4 & 5...   Oh holy cow...  the caldron bubbles and the tables get turned.  You're doing one hell of a job Wayne!!!

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2 hours ago, Hawgdad said:

1, 2, & 3

🎶 1, 2, 3, 4

🎶 Come on baby

🎶 Say you love me

🎶 5, 6, 7 times!

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2 hours ago, Hawgdad said:

1, 2, & 3

🎶 1-2-3

🎶 It’s easy as A-B-C!

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Somehow it didn't  quite turn out that easily, did it?

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4 hours ago, Hawgdad said:

Somehow it didn't  quite turn out that easily, did it?

@Hawgdad, well you’re gonna have to try it again with the additional scenes I’m writing after, and let me know what you think of them too.

Though, you’re getting the pictures by reading the version in google drive.  😊

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15 hours ago, Wayne Gray said:

@Hawgdad, well you’re gonna have to try it again with the additional scenes I’m writing after, and let me know what you think of them too.

Though, you’re getting the pictures by reading the version in google drive.  😊

I'm game buddy.  Just let me know where and when.   

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FYI - @Hawgdad.  There are three chapters of Fleeting Eternity now posted, and chapter three has a scene you've not yet viewed.

 

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