knight1234 Posted June 17, 2008 Posted June 17, 2008 This is something I scribbled in one of my efforts to write something different.. Any thoughts...? What do you think this is about...? He jumped the gun! Realizing it was too late to run He smashed the door And it was heard over the floor He was frustrated and agitated And his will could not be executed Oh dear me, said he loud Knowing that the silver line has disappeared from the cloud!
AFriendlyFace Posted June 18, 2008 Posted June 18, 2008 This is something I scribbled in one of my efforts to write something different.. Any thoughts...? What do you think this is about...? He jumped the gun! Realizing it was too late to run He smashed the door And it was heard over the floor He was frustrated and agitated And his will could not be executed Oh dear me, said he loud Knowing that the silver line has disappeared from the cloud! It's cute and lively! I really like it! On a side note, it seems best fitted for the poetry discussion forum (and perhaps you might want to post it in eFiction as well!), so I'm going to shift it over there Great job! Thanks for sharing it with us Kevin BTW: welcome to the forum!
Qrmebrat Posted August 16, 2008 Posted August 16, 2008 I think it's about that moment when you could kiss and didn't, or when someone you loved moves away and ends the relationship.
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