myself_i_must_remake Posted October 24, 2009 Share Posted October 24, 2009 an interesting response to the discussion on pornographic stories, yeah? this is my new one: and Pornography. i'm really interested in everyone's thoughts. i think it's pretty different. i conceived the idea for it over a year ago, and even now it's still not complete. this is only the first semi-polished draft. enjoy. -billy 1 Link to comment
Fishwings Posted October 24, 2009 Share Posted October 24, 2009 That was a wonderful read. Beautiful language, sophisticated mood and conversations, and really complex theme. I'm not quite sure if I fully understand it yet, but I'll definitely read it a few more times : ) "The wind moves her hair into shapes typical only of nature and calculus." For some reason I REALLY like that line! Link to comment
Mark Arbour Posted October 24, 2009 Share Posted October 24, 2009 Billy, this story is as twisted and complex as you are. I love it. Link to comment
Conner Posted October 24, 2009 Share Posted October 24, 2009 I enjoyed that. Great writing, Billy! Link to comment
sat8997 Posted October 25, 2009 Share Posted October 25, 2009 Excellent piece. You're very good at this whole writing thing. Link to comment
myself_i_must_remake Posted October 26, 2009 Author Share Posted October 26, 2009 thank you, the five of you, for reading it. i will try harder in the future. Link to comment
Mark Arbour Posted October 26, 2009 Share Posted October 26, 2009 thank you, the five of you, for reading it. i will try harder in the future. Two points: 1. Just because we're the only ones who commented doesn't mean we're the only ones who read it. You've been around here and posted long enough to know that. Readers don't always give feedback. If you figure out how to get them to do that, though, tell the rest of us. 2. "Try harder" is always a good thing to do, no? But that doesn't mean that this wasn't good, or that it needed substantial (or any) improvement. 2 Link to comment
colinian Posted October 26, 2009 Share Posted October 26, 2009 Wow! This is excellent. The description of the difference of the four characters is handled with skill, and the reader gets to understand, or guess at, the motivations of each of them. The ending is perfect. Colin Link to comment
JamesSavik Posted November 23, 2009 Share Posted November 23, 2009 I was afraid of this story. The title is about something that I have issues with. I'm no fan of Porn. I've seen enough of it to know that I've seen too much. Billy pulled out the whole Jung's Encyclopedia of Man's Symbols and beat me over the head with it. A murder of crows makes raucous sounds in the gray distance. All I can say is that... yes. It does. Link to comment
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