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Well how you label yourself is what's important. If you don't... great for you. Why care about what others think? I know that's a rosy view but for the most part I could care less what others think of me. They don't like it they can keep it to themselves or become intimately familiar with my middle finger. I'm bisexual but married to a man and have 2 kids. I liked to be with guys and girls before I met my husband and I never worried about the future spouse back then. It happened to be a guy and yeah, I don't tell my bi-selfness to some people, like my redneck biased dad, but if it were a part of my life other than doubling my opportunities to eyeball cute people I would. Right now it's no one's business but mine and it's not like anyone really asks. I mean... how likely is it for someone to look at a mom of 2 with a hubby and go.. hey, do you like to look at a girl's ass too? LOL

I like this idea!! I read Over the Precipice by Dark, of course. I read this and didn't read the review attached so that my view would be just mine and I wouldn't see the other reader or author input. Summary: When his unrequited crush, Dallas, gets devastating news at work Alex rushes after him. When Dallas shuts down Alex takes him to his family's B&B. A weekend of talk, tears, and touching ends with a unique wisdom imparted from an unexpected source. Strengths: The emotions were very vivid and the descriptions are deceptively simple. A single short sentence could bring a whole setting to life. A big big thing for me is the proper use of words. My biggest pet peeve is people using words they don't quite know and getting it wrong. Shuddered/Shuttered, Taut/Taunt, Peeked/Peaked. Simple but oh so important. Taut was used in this story and used correctly, YAY! Also, there is thought behind this story, a hidden meaning and thrust that goes beyond just the emotions and scenes we are shown. Ultimately I saw this story as a lesson in the oft bitter knowledge that for every action we take we must also take responsibility and learn what we can and accept those lessons for good or ill. Life moves on and well, to steal an oldie but goodie, what doesn't kill you only makes you stronger. Weakness: The shifting pov. Third person omniscient is often used in short stories to some detriment to the flow for the reader. While I understand the need to not only see the actions of the main characters but also the thoughts and motivations behind those actions, writers will sometimes shift back and forth too often. The shift in showing the emotions and thoughts from paragraph to paragraph is just too much for me personally. Also, there are aspects of this story that were hinted at but not fulfilled and some questions I had that weren't fully answered that seriously bugged me plot wise. Such as: If the folds on the will were well worn that most likely meant that Dallas had the letter and read and re-read for some time. His mother in law doesn't seem the type to have cared. Dallas would have known his husband was dead and mostly likely contacted his ex-brother in law right off to get the information. Also, he got the cards on Thursday and went to work on Friday anyway. I could maybe buy shock but why then? Why not before when he got the will or the email? Why not at home before work even if he had never missed a day? What set him off at that moment other than it was the place he needed to panic in order for Alex to be there? What's with the 'closed casket/cremation' hiding himself away at the family estates and pushing Dallas to move on secondary plot that was hinted at? It made it seem as if perhaps the husband was dying of something awful and wanted to protect Dallas from that but I would think any spouse would have willed more to him financially/emotionally if that were the case. Unless the baseball cards had spectacular signifigance for the pair, in which case that needed to be emphasized much more. For me, it just made no sense to add that little bit of a secondary plot consideration. The rich boy who leaves his ex well off after leaving him because he's dying is a oft done plot and didn't really fit with this story, imo. Improvements: Honestly I would rearrange this story, not to change the story told but the sequence in how the story is told and clean up the way the pov shifts from character to character. I would put the initial scenes at the office in Alex's pov but I would have Dallas share his story there in the stairway, but only the very beginning up to the point where he speaks that the ring, a few trinkets and the baseballs card were all he had left in his pov before the car ride which would give him the catharsis to sleep. The car ride and the initial part of the weekend would be Alex's pov again up until Dallas continues to share his story, possibly expanding that part a bit. Then I would give Dallas' reason for kissing Alex so suddenly and initiating their sexual contact because that's something really missing because his emotions seem to shift from impulsive and 'chuckling' to 'oh god, what did I start and why won't I stop?' too fast. I would start Alex's pov again while he's being kissed and then through the initial half of the sex scene up until he returns to the room with the lube. Once there it's essential the sex and the aftermath be solely in Dallas' pov imo up until the end. It would have you alternating the pov about 5 times but it would allow for both of your characters to get the major scenes where we need to see their thoughts and yet not have the shift back and forth randomly through the story. Also, I would look at the points where I had questions in the areas I thought were weaknesses. Favorite part: The hidden depths to the story. I may not have gotten it right but I took something away from the story that I saw as having an added element that made me think and really apply the fiction to reality. A good story entertains and has meaning to us above the plot alone.

Awww, thanks dear! LOL, Coventina is a bit of a tattletale isn't she? At least it's all for the good of the mortals, right? The take I've always had on the gods is that some are better than others Cailleach... she's my villian. You'll see more of her to come for certain. I like Rabbie the most for reasons yet to come but he's very much my 'ideal' guy like quite a few of my protagonists.

Yeah, things are not going to get better from here, lol. I'm glad the accent is easing up from familiarity. Next chapter in a few days! Thanks so much for leaving me another review

Awww, thanks! I'm intensely stubborn and hate asking for help or accepting it most of the time. Independent soul and all that. Sean was that part of me in this story, that and I have fallen out a tree with my camera before. It wasn't my really expensive one but I guarantee you that thing was my first thought, second was not to hit the sharp stick on the ground. Thanks for the review and the compliment on the picture.

I already griped about the awful color. I couldn't think of another one that it might be changed to though. Honestly I call it pink, it's just hideous. Bleckies.

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Happy Birthday!!!

I think being in a committed relationship for so long (13 years) makes me more of a we than a me a lot of the time. I've never been cheated on, thankfully, but the emotions and thoughts I put in the story are ones I've thought about. I am really glad you enjoyed the story, thanks for leaving me a review!!

Almost missed it! Happy Birthday again dear!!

Okay, chapter 3 is up! I hope you all enjoy this next installment in Legends and Life. Leave a review, leave a comment, criticism, witty remark... I can take it! Legends and Life Chapter 3

Rabbie reached Tigh na Cailleach early on the day before Samhainn. He shook his head at the small structure with thirteen gray stones, shaped and resting on a long flat stone in front of the sheiling. They were pieces of rock, nothing more, and it galled Rabbie to be required to participate in this pagan nonsense. But his father laid down orders and Rabbie would follow them. At least he would be able to avoid the feast and dancing at the castle. If he traveled slowly on his way back he might

Awwww... Bandage is getting older! Soon to be old, yep, it's going to happen! dear, I hope you have the best day ever! Happy Birthday!

OMG, my stomach is so upset right now with all of the emotions I had reading this. Fear, anxiety, happiness, sadness, I felt it all. This story is GREAT! Not one of those overcoming adversity, happily ever after types but your story really puts the reader right there with the characters. The post apocalytpic genre is one that I occasionally get into and while I will admit to be mainly a sucker for a happy ending I don't deny that some of the best work can and does end in tragedy. The only quibble I have is that it appears the copy has 2 typos in it, some snippets of code or something, otherwise it has great flow with superbly written characters and plot. Thanks for posting this again, it was a very good read!

Oh no Nephy! Don't give his head any more room to swell! It'll go all kablooey and we'll have bits of Lughbert wit all over the place!

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No, I get it. Sometimes the sap overcomes us. It's not always obvious day after day, year after year, as we get comfortable in our lives and our partners. It's good to feel that rush of love overcome you every so often. Reminds us that what we have is just as special as those beginning moments in a relationship. Good for you, Mr. Sap Master!!

And so it begins! I like the dance you have beginning between Malfoy and Harry. And the twins... what intrigue! I always thought there were much more 'active' than they were written in the original books. Great chapter.

I try to leave reviews when I read but I'm still not getting as much time to do that as I would like on the site. However, I agree that reviews are still a bit lacking in the feedback area. Those who review tend to get them in return but it is the same small pool of people reviewing for the most part. Other than just bringing up the subject, reminding your readers and asking for feedback there isn't much more I can think of to do. Maybe I'll ask in my status message.

Not at this time. If we are not able to locate the original author most likely those unclaimed stories will be deleted in case they were plagiarized as well. We will not republish any story that we can not verify is not being posted by the original author. It wouldn't be right.

Hi Guldar, welcome to GA. Anyone can become an 'author' if they chose to purchase (for free) that status in the GA Store. Any member can post a story in GA Stories. Promising and Hosted Authors have forums, all other authors can post topics for their stories in the Story Discussion forum. Blogs, Picture Galleries, making posts/comments/topics in the forums is all up to an member as well. You can be as interactive with the site as you choose to be. Some people never customize their profiles and simply post stories and leave it at that. Others jump more into it and create topics, discussion forums and all sorts of input to just be a part of the community and/or promote their stories. Marzipan's suggestion of reading the help topics is a great one and if you have any questions that you can't answer after you've read that feel free to send me a pm or track me down in chat. I don't mind answering any honest question from new users. At one point we were all in your shoes. Welcome again!

Hmm... I've had my photography play a big role in my inspirations. From an article in a photography magazine about passionettes, to incorporating a fall from a tree and a dangle over the side of a drop off to get a water pic, to a blending of light and dark in a sunset cloud picture... it's a big part of my life and a big part of my stories at times. I'm currently writing 2 short stories, one set off by the sharp spiking pain of a bad headache and the other by a photo manipulation I did. Sometimes though I will just sit down with a blank document and see what comes to me. Twice I started off with a single line for the beginning as my only idea and just let it flow from there. Sometimes I have a plan for my ideas and sometimes I just let them have control of me. Both ways work for me.

Sorry, but I'm the blunt type. I'd flat out ask him out. I have never been one to play around and even back before I met my husband if I wanted a guy I found a way to tell him, either by invading his physical space or just by saying so. I don't know if that works for adults, lol, I've never been on the 'dating' scene but idk, why not take the risk? If there is something you really want, in this case a relationship with your tennis flirty friend, then you should go for it. Life is rarely exciting for the meek and hesitant.

Aww, well thanks for coming back and giving me feedback after the fact, I love it! This story came to me in a rush. I wanted to share a few things I loved and a possible new beginning for two characters who meet randomly in life. The story was brief, just about their dance around each other for the most part but that sort of feel good romance was all I was feeling at the time. Every once in a while I have to ease up on the angst Thanks again for the review!

Shut up Matt, the Packers rock! Great pic Rakuten!