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12 when I first suspected... didn't anything about that until I was 21...

I loved this story. I really was worried about Jason and Peter for a while... and then I reread the story title I'm really happy they got back together... well... technically they never "left each other"... but you get the point. I like how your chapter titles are deceiving in a sense... I like it. To be honest, I think Second Shot could be a saga. You have well developed characters in which you could easily put your short story about the trial as Book 2 (which would mean I would totally agree with others in saying Second Shot Ch. 50 would be more suited for as Book 2's Prologue instead), and then have your next stories with the same characters be in Book 3 perhaps. I know calling them different stories entirely would also work, and perhaps give you more freedom to work outside the developments within Second Shot so you're not bound by the same constraints, but Jase and Pete have a lot further to go on getting their lives back together. Like others, while I wanted to read even more about the couple, my goodbyes were said at the end of Ch. 49. What a lovely scene with Jase getting behind Pete on the bike to Pete's apartment and calling it home. My thoughts are similar with many of our readers on GA in saying "Please write many, many sequels!!!" I would really enjoy reading more about these characters, and hopefully I'll be able to read it soon! Great job!

Last night when I selected Slayer to blast that filth out of my brain. It wasn't enough... some douche was playing it on the train to show her friends at how corny it was. Thank goodness I have Iron Maiden and Metallica to flush the rest of it out during the train ride, otherwise I would have been pissed off even before I had my morning coffee before my work shift started. On my break, I moved on to Disturbed, 5FDP, and BFMV... I think I feel a little bit better now.

This video is precisely why parents don't let their teenage kids to go out or drive cars... ever. If I had kids and this type of crap was going on I'd probably send them all to military school - including the women. I'm never getting that 3:47 back from my life.

Quake was adjusted to Magnitude 9.0

Wow Frosty! Reminded me of Fight Club... lol Except I guess less the Brad Pitt abs? I really enjoyed the story. It almost seemed you could have made it into a longer series if you wanted to... seeing how the relationship between Paul and Eric started, formed, and how the split happened. How much of Eric's life was Paul's? How much did "Jenna" play in terms of coming towards reconciling with himself or is she another like Paul? The chapter had an awesome twist at the end. It has great potential - and now that you've set your bar high, I can't wait until you post again

Happy Birthday!

Great read, it was a pleasure reading this story last night. I really enjoyed Cedric's many twists and turns in the story. I do, however, wanted more development between Joey and Daniel to mend their friendship, but I think that's slightly beyond the scope of the last chapter I guess. I hope you write more stories and after I'm done with my current reading list, I'm going to make it a point to read some of your short stories. Great job! Thank you for a wonderful experience.

That's so sweeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeet... makes me all fuzzy inside.

Little red ridinghood... oh wait... wrong thread...

Reading this story was a blast. I really enjoyed the tickle scenes. For the first time I've been able to read a story with implied sexual activity without either being too prudish that I become disconnected with the plot's development, but not feel like I'm bounced into a porno scene every other chapter. This was a really refreshing perspective that I respect immensely, and while I understand from your other works that I enjoy using the recurring Australia, hiking, swimmers, people who read a lot, shy and unlikely couple magically appear to bond perfectly, I look forward to slightly more plausible character meshing/introductions in your future works. Another plot uncertainty that I've held throughout the plot is that somehow all of the gay guys are on the swim team (besides Ricky and Andrew Crossman) and if you were somehow intertwined with Peter's social circle, you were most likely gay... except the one and only exception being Marty (who couldn't explore his "experimentations" because he knocked up Amy too fast) The other straight members of the swim team all randomly disappeared from the face of the earth at the last chapter. All of the members of the swim team somehow got coerced to all pretend to be gay in public competitions without the judges citing uniform violations that would have most likely resulted in DSQs in all of the participants who wore those pink flags. And every single recurring character somehow got matched together...except Kenny (poor Kenny...) The Andy/Andrew pairing was a bit odd, actually it was completely strange and unforeseen. He had shown no attraction (although that was addressed in the last chapter at how it abruptly started by those tutoring sessions...) but still I find this pair a bit too odd for my tastes. As young as Andrew Crossman is, I still find it nearing statutory rape practically... "praying on innocent high school seniors" so-to-speak, and while yes, they didn't and couldn't do anything until Andy turned 18 and what not, I find the relationship a bit matched too hastily. You've left quite a bit to write about actually, and I expect fully that if you want to, you can totally write a sequel to the story with the same main characters or some sort of a side plot where you can either explore the life of Andrew Crossman's earlier life, his later life with Andy, or even Kenny, Brent, Ricky, or any one of them. I hope you do consider writing another one. It's been a great pleasure reading this story and I hope to read more of your works in the near future. Keep up your great work!

When will they stop copying Minority Report?

Amazing chapter to follow-up to Chapter 19 I read last night. I am amazed again at Luc's sudden boldness in everything. I am glad he didn't just sink back into his bed and held everything in. Unless a significant plot twist happens, I can see how this could be a major turning point for Luc as he develops into a less hidden personality. I am also glad he not only caught the need for Matt not to be alone, but actually followed through with action. Good for Luc!

Thank you for fixing the formatting. I'm glad you posted a new chapter. I was hoping that this story wasn't going to just be another "20-chapter series" and Ch. 19 demonstrated that. I think this chapter provided a nice segue to merge your older and your future chapters. It also provided a new and different perspective/portrayal of Matt. No longer are we seeing this hard outer shell that's like a rock for Luc. This is not only refreshing, but provides a glimpse that each of the characters are finally broken down to their respect cores before they may be rebuilt (and let the light in...so to speak). I'm glad this touching setting allowed Matt and Luc to connect so deeply. I'm wondering why Josh had to keep his eyes closed during the speech. I'm wondering if Josh knew Jonathan back then that made him not able to watch the guy on stage, but rather close his eyes to either clear his mind from flashbacks from when he was a freshman or to block out certain memories. Quite a touching, moving, and vivid chapter. I hope you continue carrying on this story and keep writing! This was the third non-dkstories story I read on GA when I finally became active on here. I'm glad I reread the chapters to catch up and review the storyline a bit. Keep up your wonderful work, and I hope next time when you post you won't have the similar formatting issues you had with posting Ch. 19 this time! ~Jay

Get your collective heads out of the damn gutter... you pedos.

This was a great story! The ending was a bit abrupt (and I kind of figured out that his mother found out after he left his entire room unattended for that damn photo paper...) I hope when you get a chance to fix Colorado Game so I can see how this story ties into the other one. I heard it goes in around Ch. 39, so I'm waiting to see new chapters posted for CG past the 15 chapters currently listed. Thanks you again for a wonderful read!

I had to force myself from playing a few games because I was spending way too much time than I wanted to. It was for my own good...

Great story. I sometime enjoy the fact that the readers have to fill in the blanks when they're reading short stories. It allows them to paint the rest of the picture whilethe plot continues on. I liked the overall plot and the ending was something I looked forwarded to. While unlike St-st-stuffed, the way this story allowed the thought of James and Benny being a couple be an external though made by Gina - it wasn't necessarily forced, but a progressive nudge to take the plot to the other side. I think the most likable fact is that how the main characters actually wanted to pursue and embraced the idea of being in a relationship and with their deep friendship, it wasn't hard to find out that subconsciously they've been pursuing each other. Great job! Look forward to reading more of your short stories.

Guitar Hero Metallica was pointless yet amazing... but I still love GH3 and GH:WT. I don't like Rock Band's interface

The drive to the doctor’s office was uneventful, not like Jack wanted it to be full of close-calls. It was mid-morning after the rush of traffic as he drove, the fog seemingly rolled by his windshield as the morning chill in San Francisco continued to make even daylight seem ominous. Looking for a parking spot, reminded him he should have just taken the bus instead, but he knew he didn’t need to be on public transportation again after what happened on the street car earlier. His mind flashe

The way Jack stops breathing actually came to me while I was taking a shower. It actually blends quite well with how I want to write Chapter 3 and on, so I really hope you enjoy Chapter 2 when it comes out to tie what I have here to the direction I want to take this novel very soon! Thank you for your review!

Thanks! I wanted to paint a picture to start the character off, how low of a place he was in, and how he felt about his personal dilemmas before I began the story. I'm sorry if it came on too strong to make you want to hand him "an easy way out", but then I wouldn't have a novel to write Thank you for your interest! Chapter 2 is in editing mode now, I hope to post some time later this week.

Am I the only guy here who listens to "harder" rock? Nevermind, Jesse_James has a couple I like... It's rare to find people actually liking Disturbed nowadays... ;

I love Canada... to blame! (eyes at previous post) http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LAYMJnO9LBQ

Hey Cia, It looks like I read this story after The Price of Honor, so in a way I got a differing perspective, as this provided a wonderful back story to The Price of Honor. While this history was further discussed via Bel'lel's personal log entry, I am glad this provided a deeper understanding of how the "three-headed Lords" came to be. You should write something that explains Michael Sealer. Great Job once again! Fmd