Andrew Q Gordon

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Douw, First let me say I like your story and I want you to keep writing this - I want to find out what happens. Some comments - it feels a bit rushed - you are racing through things at times without giving us enough detail - Now maybe that is what you want right now for reasons only you know - but I could do with a bit more understanding of things. Clearly it was the Sky Witch or whoever that was saved you - I mean Douw - but I didn't understand much more than that about what happened. If it doesn't give away your plot, you might want to look at giving us more. Again, I don't know everything you are doing so I don't want to say it was wrong - next chapter I might look back and say - wow that is so great how he did that. I guess what I am saying is this we don't know what is going on, we don't know your character or what is happening unless you tell us. Don't skip over things too fast because we don't know all that you know. Take the time to develop your characters and set the scene. Yes you want to give us enough of a hook soon enough to keep our interest but you also want us to understand enough to be interested as well. But as I said to start, I like it and I will be disappointed if you don't continue. Andy

Anyta, STOP apologizing already The first four chapters are amazing - you really need to think about working with someone to get this published. I said this from the first chapter and I will keep saying it - this is so incredibly imaginative and creative. You give Scott and Rune such depth in a very short period of time that we feel them. I know Scott is more the focus but the way you have written about Rune is sort of heart breaking. His isolation, his turmoil - why we don't know exactly but clearly there is something so traumatic it has affected him deeply enough that he has tried to kill him self every year for three years, the hesitancy to act on his desires - even if just for friendship for get about romantic involvement with Scott - its crushing and make me hurt for him - Now I feel for Scott, just not as passionately - YET. One thing that this post a chapter at a time format does is it builds anticipation that would otherwise be ruined in a novel where I would just turn to the next chapter and keep reading BUT I don't see that as detracting from the pull of the story. If you ever have self doubts about your skill - ask me, I will set you straig errr set you right I might be biased - for reasons you know but I wouldn't wax this long trying to convince you of this if I really didn't believe it. Like I said, if you stop writing this I am on the next plane to where you live and I am going to haunt you til you finish this Andy

Much as I want to I am not sure I can disagree with you on this BUT I wasn't sure what to use as an example. 15 years ago I had a pink triangle on my book bag but that seems to have disappeared. Rainbow flags are rather ubiquitous these days in that I have seen it used for more than just gay rights, and finally my co-worker has an HRC sticker on the bulletin board in her office so that what I saw when I used that as an example. [i just have pictures of me and the partner on my desk] I didn't mean for it to be a touch stone for a political debate on the worthiness of HRC or it's actions/inactions so if you or anyone else has a better example I can change the poll question.

James, I about pissed myself reading this

Honestly? VERY disappointing - I am not saying he killed dad - I was saying he thought he had something to do with it, maybe he was IN the car at the time sneaking a ride into town for something when it happened. The thing is - for me at least - his leaving had really better be something major or else he is a class A jerk. I mean he had the picnic set up, he told Scott he had a surprise for him, a birthday surprise no less and Scott's dad died. He obviously did it on the spur of the moment, a moment of panic whatever, it was not something he planned to do as late as mid morning when he was setting up the picnic. Now I have my suspicions as to how dad's death ties in but I won't say in public BUT it would have to be momentous to forgive him for abandonng Scott like that. That is just me - of course I am perhaps not the most forgiving of people and maybe Scott is - who can say - oh wait - Anyta can

Something caught my attention today - it was an article on some guy who decided to be out at work - so it got me to thinking - I work in the macho world of Law Enforcement but am totally out - the partner's picture is on the desk, the local gay newpaper sometimes gets left on the desk, people ask about my partner etc. I am also very vocal about it when people make homophobic comments in front of me- usually these are police officers who say someone is a fag or something like that. In my case, I was out from day 1. My co-worker was doing the AIDs ride and I offered to have an event at my place to help her raise money. I was the lone out person in my office at the time. Today my immediate supervisor is an out Lesbian, my trial partner is an out lesbian and there are three other out gay men in our division - out of like maybe 100 people I would estimate. There is also one person who is totatally in the closet and doesn't think anyone knows - but go to the gay bar often enough and people WILL see you. It always strikes me as odd when I talk about my partner with others and he is there and will ask a polite question here or there but he has never come out. So with that as background - Are you out at work or school? If so how out? And anything unusual happen to make you come out?

That was an interesting chapter - I am intriqued by the Brian/Adam dynamic - and more so when you said he might die because he was in Adam's vision with the Seer - now I have to go back and re-read that chapter because I don't get the reference - and don't tell me, I will ask if i can't figure it out. Jacob is really interesting - he is fiercely protective and although they 'share' the same power - he clearly is the better of the pair at using it. To me it seems that only his love of Adam, and thus only Adam - is keeping him from being a one man disaster. His raw power and anger is dangerous and I think people are starting to notice. If something happens to Adam, he might just go bonkers. Two questions that I will hide ina spoiler - just to be safe:

UGHHHH I so hate you for leaving it like that - UGHHH How freakin great is that chapter??? I mean WOW. Since you asked - I don't think this will affect Scott as much in his ability to trust and love and make friends as it will affect him regarding his sexuality. He loved Rune, he kissed Rune, he let Rune know how he felt, that he liked Rune like 'that' and the next day Rune left him. He left after Scott tried to take a picture of him and it failed and then he brought up the kiss and Rune seemed different. Scott already wondered if his feelings were 'right' or 'normal' so this will only make him hate those feelings even more. So while I expect he will have trouble making friends, trust people and fall in love, I think all of that will circle back to how he trusted Rune with the secret of his sexuality and by revealing that he lost his friend and his first love. Given the isolation in which Scott lives, it is going to take a while for him to work through those issues. Toss in that he lost his dad and Rune on the same day, that will leave Scott an emotional wreck for a long time. As for Rune - well I know he is a tortured soul in some ways but what he did to Scott was flat out shitty - and contemptable. He knew Scott's feeling by this point and he also knew what happened. I bet he heard the call when mom got it. To just leave Scott like that - knowing he was the only real friend he had, is terrible. Sorry - as much as I hurt for Rune, he showed an enormous lack of compassion by just leaving with a one word note - sorry. And what in God's name would possess him to think leaving the camera and flower were going to help? All it would do remind Scott of his loss. If anything these 'reminders' were worse than if he took them with him. No doubt Scott tossed them both and never became a Photographer now - using a camera will be too painful a reminder of Rune. Like I said, WOW - I normally do NOT get worked up like that over a 'story' so awesome job. So now I truly hate you for not having written the whole thing so I can skip work and read it. Andy

LBJ Tricky Dick Nixon Chevy Chase - er Gerald Ford, J. C. - Carter that is Ronnie Raygun G Herbert Walker Bush B. J. Clinton - sorry could resist that W - the disaster Bush B.H.Obama That makes 9 - oh my god, I am SO freakin old sigh

Several things - First, I am sorry its over, hopefully the sequel and what not are still in the planning stage or at least still a possibility. You said before the last few chapters things would take a turn and they did. I like the way it went, it made sense, especially when he said in the beginning of chapter 12 Kiba says the changes in Avy made him less attractive as a companion. I like how you did that - because while it was what Kiba believed to be true when he left Avy in the end it was not true. The dependence on him was not really what Kiba wanted. You tied it up nicely but you should have nixed the very last line - it would have been more interesting if you didn't tell us he and Avy were still together, leave us wondering if they could make it to 13. The only other things I would mentioned and this is really not a bad thing, it just kinda cuts both ways - the tie up information was good but there was too much more I wanted to know. Like I said it is a two edges knife - it helped balance the end, so it was good, but left me wondering more - which I suppose is actually good - leave em wanting more Since it's over I can say thanks, this was a really interesting take on things, I like the balance between the relationship and the vampire tale. It kept me entertained and interested in what happens next. Andy

Interesting how old topics get resuscitated and gain new life - May - Taurus but that doesn't surprise anyone who know how bull headed I am

Sounds like a pretty kick ass couple of days for you - here's hoping it contnues.

Dude, in the world of Coop and Mich you are God - your wish is their command - :king: You want Coop to say something - done, want them to go swimmng - done, In the words of Nike - Just Do It -

This might be the funniest post I read all day. I buy the cheapo ones from Target too but that's because I am just cheap - and I don't wear jeans too much on account I have to wear a suit and tie to work.

I for one never doubted they were heading to altar - whether it was a human sacrifice or to get married was undecided - JK. If you recall Nephylim, my prophecy was THIS That and I knew you wouldn't let me spend all that money for the tux in the appropriate color. Seriously, this was a marvelous story. The action played a nice foil to the relationship you developed. Each little addition added to depth of the story and the characters. What was that? You are hard at work on a sequel? OH Nephylim, that is wonderful news. One last thing I am grateful for in reading this is all the interaction I had with you. Despite being the self professed 'Dark One' you brightened many a day for me while this was having its run. That is even more special that your story. So for that I leave you with this . .

I am fine waiting IF that is what you want. Don't let us push you - it will ruin your image

Not sure if it helps but I don't plan on leaving you alone even when Hostage is over . . . er, then again, maybe you want me to go away. Some how, I have this feeling you will come up with something else to draw us in, leaving us waiting anxiously each week for more. It's a gift you have, and we all appreciate it.

Don't you go getting all indignant on me now missy - I am old enough to be - er - your older brother And don't pretend you haven't been stringing us along and enjoying EVERY minute of it. So - suddenly - out of the blue we hear, "I m going to a wedding, be back Sunday" and you wonder why we would think you ran off to marry the boys - humph. Some Dark Ones, they just don't know when to stop teasing the rest of us. Glad you are back safe and I hope you had a good mini holiday and that the wedding was fun. Looking forward to the last two chapters. Andy

That was pretty brilliant dude -

I thought I was only one who noticed Nephylim went to a 'wedding' today??? hmmmm I think she went to marry the boys and deliberately didn't tell us.

Wow, that is some roller coaster - being the total geek/nerd that I can be, I actually cried writing, editing and reading it the first 3-4 times. I was going to leave it that the dragon was NOT Barh, but just couldn't pull the trigger. I gotta learn to do that soon, or else everyone will know the endings before I write them Thanks again for the comments, I enjoy hearing what people think- even if they tell me Andy

Don't know about trials but there will be a few tribulations. Coming out will be easy compared to what is in store next. But I don't want to say too much. Just don't expect a happy ending - [i am channeling my inner Nyphlim here - tone down expectations only to - hmm will I or won't I ] Thanks for the predictions Great Carnac . . . er Seer of Vegas . . . Benji Andy

I read that part and thought 'I can see why a lot of bisexual people would be frustrated by that description' But on the other hand, I know a lot of gay men who say they are bisexual - but never date women - they just think that because they find woman attractive they are bisexual. Me? I find plenty of woman attractive - physically and emotionally but I have not been inclined to date a woman since I came about 20 some odd years ago. Having been with both sex, I knew after my first real 'date and sleep over' that I was gay not bisexual. I avoided the path some gay men take by saying they are bi until they come to gripes with being gay. Which is why you are who you are and why we love you for who you are

Chapter 15 is up, this ought to be the second to last chapter of the first half. The rest is mostly written, but there are things I have already started to change. Any questions, comments or suggestions are welcome. I keep going back and forth on how to take this. There next several chapters are set - then there are a few things to add, then I am not sure - [nice an specific I know.] I have both ideas set - its all about making a choice. There are also a few scenes that explore more of Jason's family, and some new faces - oh yeah all that is wrapped around what really happens to these two. Read, comment, trash me, whatever - Andy