Andrew Q Gordon

Wow, guess I am the lone weirdo here. I do and don't. Precise answer right? I do when we are going to sleep/sleeping/ napping. And I do on the couch when watching a movie etc, but the couch in the TV isn't the best so it is hard sometimes to get comfortable. I don't when I am hot, or it is excessively hot out - and I don't when I am grumpy tired but not ready to sleep. [Mike has accused me of being a crack baby at times, something my mom was not too happy to hear. ] So I can't be in the camp of yes all the time any time etc.

While I like guns, I am willing to give that up for a place where there is gay marriage or at least civil unions and the voters are not insane like they appear to be in this country. Mike and I talk moving to Canada, and that looks more appealiing now that ever. If this is a sign of things to come in 2012, we will need to seriously look at moving. lol

Benji, I see you have a convert to the 'let the grandparents ride to the rescue' club. I ain't saying nothing one way or the other, BUT if they don't I hope no one is disappointed if the grandparents do not save the day, just as I hope no one is disappointed if they do. Good thing I have THAT part written or else I might be easily swayed by fan pressures. Not promising Peter will be giving anyone a beat down, but his training will have a bit more of a role in this half. I am not planning a Batman/Dark Knight type fight scene, but there will be more dealing with Peter's skills coming up. In fact it is somewhat prominent in what happens to them. Think Peter gets mad at Jason, someone gets their ass beat, hospitalization, police officers, arrests, jail - sorry no prison rape scene - that sort of thingy. That way when what really happens, you will be surprised LOL. That's what all good independent minded authors do, they succumb to fan pressure and turn out commercial drivel. Thanks for reading and especially for commenting. Hope this post cleared up nothing.

---------- Happy Birthday Bee! ! ! ! ------------------ Enjoy your day Andy

Bowing to intense peer pressure - and the fact I am scared Agaith will kick my ass as he is far more advanced in Martial Arts than I am - I have posted Charter 17, the start of the second half. As I have noted in the announcement, I am not quite done with Chapters 22 & 23 but if I stick to one chapter a week, this will give me plenty of time [and motivation] to get them finished in a timely fashion. To recap slightly - Jason got outed by his one time best friend Jordan and his mom, the mouth that gossiped. Jason's Dad, brother, best friends, and team all took it well, but his mother - Saint Barbara the Evangelist - was less than pleased. The second half will deal with the ramification of her displeasure and how it affects both Jason and his relationship with Peter. Sadly, money talks and St. Barbara has enough to make waves. So with that in mind, I give you the second part - enjoy. Andy

So why is it that amidst so much happiness - the blossoming romance between Tap and Dane - that I hear ominous music playing in the background??? UGHHHHH!!!!! Okay so I am not THAT frustrated, in fact I am rather engrossed; far be if from me to expect sweet and sappy with out a whiff of conflict from Ms. CIa It is an interesting twist on things that Dane is more concerned with being out than Tap, who is the big Jock. I think you handle Dane's situation quite well, showing us his angst amidst so much confusion and upheaval in his life. Brett's razing of the pair is priceless. Sounds like that is almost biographical, perhaps????? One tiny little bit - and this is more professional nit picky that anything else. Alan Kendrick's trial would NOT have to be put on hold, there is no jurisdiction in the country that is that quick to trial. Most cases wouldn't come to trial for 4-6 months or more when the person is released on bond. Like I said, just me being a dork. The idea that the police are still looking for something is interesting, though I sort of suspected that leaving the file where the Officer did is going to come back to haunt him. Not sure if I read too much into that but I am sure I will know soon enough. Soooo now that you are on a posting roll, when do we find out what happens next?????

Antya, Wonderful story - and to think you were concerned no one would be interested when you started this - pffft Since you asked my opinion before you wrote the end, it feels a tad odd saying that I loved how it ended, but since I didn't write it or even suggest it, I can say how much I loved the last two chapters. It's odd how characters that don't exist seem so real when they are well written. A part of me wishes I was the one who could see Rune instead of Scott - not that I don't like Scott. Scott's character went from the wide eyed 13, almost 14 year old, who was sweet and innocent to the hardened, jaded young man for whom life held little joy then onto the young man who found he could love again with hesitation. That was hard to pull off but you did it really well. But my heart still belongs to Rune, the sweet boy who refused to let his 'curse' keep him down. It is interesting how just a whiff of what it felt like to be happy, the hope he could really find 'the one' changed him from despondent, 'I should kill myself' into someone so beautiful of spirit. Despite the shitty hand he was dealt, Rune rose above it and kept not only his sanity but his dignity and his compassion. Perhaps it is only in fairy tales and imagination that such people exist but it is easy to see why someone would never want to let go of him once they could call him theirs. Well that way too much information I suppose, but again, thanks for this, it was beautiful. Andy

Montco?? You mean 202 U? I grew up a stone's throw from campus, learned to drive in the parking lot and played basket ball in the gym. Best of luck with the PhD and the job hunt. Must be real pretty around there this time of year, there are a lot of trees around campus.

My favorite part - " Do you know what happens to nice little boys like you who go to jail for reckless driving? Ass be hurting for a month." I mean a month?? Really??? Wow! Where do I sign up?? J/K

Just a quick clarification - the question wasn't will I post the rest or never post the rest, the question was should I start NOW with the expectation tehre might be a time where there is longer than usual break while I finish writing a chapter, OR should I wait until that is done so I can post on a regular schedule with out any extended breaks. Either way I will finish posting, just trying to see if folk would rather wait a week or two while I finish this last pesky chapter OR start now and risk I don't get it done before I get to it. Andy

Okay, so given the underwhelming response, I will just wait at this point. Sorry Anyta, but as the lack of responses shows, there are not too many 'fans' who want to find out what happens next. Aside from you - who as my Beta reader/confident has already read the next few chapters - only Caedus, responded and he would prefer I finish the few scenes I have left to write first before I start posting. So with that in mind, I shall finish what I was working through, then start again so as to avoid even the potential for a break. Thanks to you both, always appreciate the feed back and support. Andy

Oh I remember these and many many more - though I was too young to remember Star Trek when it first ran, I grew up on the re-runs. There was also Adam 12, Emergency, The Six Million Dollar Man, and the infamous - Dragnet - 'Just the fact ma'am'

I know I said I was going to wait for the new eFiction to be up and running before I post the other half of the story, but I am thinking I can manage to transfer over the entire story if i get that far before the new site is up. Question, I have the next three chapters edited and ready. The two after that are written but need some self editing - as well as being sent to the person who is beta reading/editing. Then I am still working on the next chapter or two [not sure if it will be one long chapter or two shorter ones,] After that I have the bulk of the story written except for a few final chapters. So if I start posting, I can probably go one a week for 5 weeks and hope i get the rest of that in between chapter written OR I can wait to start posting until I get that last part written. If I start now there is a chance - a good chance - that I might take an extra week or two to get that part out, but if I wait a week or so, I should have it done and I can go right through. Thoughts???

OOH OOOHHH **Raises Hand and waves it around!!*** Can I answer this??? I know this one!!!! Okay, so a) that was NOT offensive sexy stuff. That was brilliant, sweet and leaves just enough for the imagination to figure the rest out Lily?? Are you reading Nephylim story?? [Actually I like it - just teasing although I am partial to Sophie since that was our first dog who died in July] Having talked basics with you about this chapter and the next I try to be careful in what I say, BUT this was a pretty great. Mom is still a bit a basket case, one hopes she improves, but I am not holding much hope out for that. As for Lily, Hmmm. Very Interesting indeed. Lucky 13 is the last eh? Oh well I am sure it will be fabulous. Andy

The short answer is yes. If it doesn't affect me later, it was written well enough. Now I am not sure everyone else will feel the same emotion I intended, but if my writing doesn't make me feel what I was feeling at the time, then I don't think I did a good enough job. Case in point, the Fall Anthology - the part where the two separate made me cry three times or so while I was editing it, which goes back to your therapy issue - I mean they aren't real YET I was still crying. Maybe my meds aren't strong enough, Hmmmm. Andy

I am with the other two. If you have the idea, get it down, the particulars can be arranged once you are 'feeling' it better. Otherwise you might lose the vision and then you will be annoyed at yourself

Matt, I am going to side with you partly, no in the end it might be an empty gesture, but what if? What if someone who is being bullied sees others, school mates and adults, wearing purple today and thinks, maybe I am not alone, or sees someone they know wearing purple and feels comfortable enough to confide in them? What if you make adults aware - like Steve said happened at his work - and they happen to be parents and they talk to their kids about this - to check to be sure they are okay and to be sure they aren't doing it. What if people who might take a stand against it but felt alone and doubted one person could do anything alone, sudden found support in numbers and rallied to help a friend or classmate. Given how little it takes to do this, or took, vs the potential for good, it is worth the effort even if it reaches only one person. Yes it is not the solution, your post is correct, and sometimes people do the simple stuff, like wear purple, but never show up for the hard stuff - like stepping in to help someone at risk to themselves, but then again, what if? Andy PS only 2 of 20 wore purple today - just myself and a fellow gay co-worker. the 4 other gay co-workers didn't know it was happening - sad in a way that it was not better known.

Curious. This was your least favorite chapter?? Why? It certanly wasn't mine. I suspect I know why, or at least have a few ideas but I want to hear it from you. I realize this is something of a transition chapter, but it also helps define the inner struggle of both. Whatever happens to these two, the background on their feelings will be necessary to define what they do and why. One set of questions . How does Rune know if he is invisible? I mean he draws in his aura so mom or someone else can see him, then lets it out. He also is covering Scott - but how does he know if it is far enough to cover Scott completely? Does he extend it for an area or just an object or objects. Meaning does he just cover Scott or the area around Scott. how far apart can they be before Rune can't maintain the field or is it that once extended to an object or person, it stays hidden until he draws it in. And how can he be sure he got it all back? Feel free to tell me you don't know - Rune never told you I am just curious about this. Andy

You can put them on a leash as soon as you take them home - 8 weeks. It is preferred you do this so you train them asap. You can use gentle choke collars - I think they are called modified martingales - these do not fully choke the dogs like choke collars but they tighten just enough to make the dog stop. we use these on our three dogs. Training is so important, teaching them a routine is also key, it helps potty train them if every time they eat you take them out. reward them for doing their business outside with a treat or pets etc. consistency is key for dogs so they know what to expect. teaching them to 'come' is also important. Mike and I would train each of our dogs to come by standing on opposite ends of a field and call the dog. When they came running we gave them a treat, then the other would call, and he/she would tear off for the other, and get a treat again. and we would do this for a while - until the dog was tired and we did it often. Our dogs come when we call, and we still have treats for them occasionally. Two syllable dog names are best, more and they don't always react less it can sound like too many other words. How about CeMe? as in See Me? something like that. just an idea. Andy

Disclaimer, I did not read the other comments so I could give you mine without being tainted by theirs. [i believe that is the M.O. of one Anyta Sunday ] Going day by day is definitely NOT needed. So skipping weeks is fine, so long as there is some way to account for the time - they could be talking, drop a shot blurb about how long it's been since - something like, Rune says, these last two week have been the best of my life - something along those lines. The key is are you leaving out a pivotal moment? If you then I would say don't do it - but I suspect you knew that. But I for one and fine with and often do write a short scene here, another a few weeks later, etc without painting a play by play story of every date, or every moment they have. Summarizing Scott's life after Rune left was fine, because it just needed to be there so you could get to the part where they meet again. Skipping their reconciling their 'relationship' would not be so good because that is the focus of part two. However, that said, this new phase of their lives is pivotal - so glossing over it, might be a mistake. doing it by summarized flash backs would not be my preferred method. Once you have established their relationship - whatever it is - friends, lovers, somewhere in between - then you can skip weeks or months and summarize through a conversation or something. As we both know, you understand the need for each scene to move things along, but the converse is too many scenes moving things forward can be a problem as well. It is the author refusing to let the story take it's natural course and get to the conflict and resolution. So I think you can skip over weeks but the the week(s) following the end of Chapter 10. Andy

Sweet Mother of Jesus Alex is one bad hombre :mace:- and to think I thought he was sweet and fetching. Not sure how Keegan is going to react living with Raging Bull. That was some cold shit Louis, remind me not to mess with you either . Not that I want to know the answer, but will you ever explain where Alex's power comes from?? Well the shit hit the fan now, lets see where it lands. Since these are short chapters you will be posting more frequently, right? Andy

Add mine to the long list of people wishing Momma a most happy birthday. Enjoy your day.

Okay so 8 & 9 left me pissed at Scott, sad for Rune, cheering for Rune, not quite so pissed at Scott, even more in love Rune, and not mad at Scott at all. Nicely done Having seen these two before you posted, I didn't want to comment because I might get confused and say something while commenting on 8 that was coming in 9. BUT now I am free to comment It is the mark of a good writer that you have me so angry at a character for not doing what is clearly in their best interest to everyone but them. I don't much like Mom's regression, I got the sense from Scott's reaction that mom hasn't been setting places for 'dad' at the table on a regular basis, so to quote someone - can't remember who said - 'that ain't good!' Poor Dear - reminds me of that line from Copacabana - 'she lost her tony and she lost her mind.' Mom lost her sweet heart and now it seems she lost her mind. Sad So fabulous chapters [i need to use a few gay words every day so count that toward my quota] waiting for the next ones. Andy PS, got the dogs name and the family question wrong but got the other three - meh - not so good. but I read the chapter a few days ago so I have a small excuse.

Louis, I read Chapter 12 a few times - kept getting interrupted. One complaint before the stuff I like - the cheer in the airport?!? Total cheese Louis - total! Must have been a fantasy of yours lol. Okay onward I like Alex more and more. There is a moral center to him that matches Keegan's. We already knew Keegan was a good soul, but then he hints at Alex helping him. At first I thought he just wanted Alex there, not to 'help,' but for support. Then he says not he wants 'help'. At which point, Alex says that's not right and Keegan has to do it himself, adn that he can. Then at the end, before they leave for the airport. Keegan is back to just wanting Alex there for support. It was a nice transition for Keegan toward understanding what strength Alex really gives him. I like the realism of your characters - team cheers aside. One thing I am struck with is how well you portray the depth Alex's affection for Keegan. Clearly Alex has been 'stalking' Keegan for a while. Stalking in the sense he has loved him from afar for quite some time. Now we never were told that, but you 'tell' us by how deeply he loves Keegan in so short a time. Keegan has some catching up to do, but he seems to be doing just fine. Amazing how quickly emotions can develop when they are allowed free. Okay so I lied - here is a second complaint - the hint that bad things are coming??? You had to ruin a great moment with those comments? UGHHH!! Just kidding - sorta kinda not really. Nephylim must be proud of her newest disciple. Waiting for the next chapter. Andy

Actually, you need to decide if it works for you because everyone won't agree, as witnessed by the different answers you got. As I understand it, you are letting this story evolve as it wants to evolve, that should dictate what happens not everyone else's opinion. So far you have done that very well. Why mess with a good thing?