Andrew Q Gordon

The dedication was true, I was going to pass on this until you 'suggested' I submit something - glad you liked it. The longer story will definitely have to wait, though when the mood hits me, I jot down a few thoughts and scenes. Someday, no promises on when Thanks for the review Cia.

I definitely see Trevor and Nick as side kicks. Trev still loves Nick and even if he accepts 'their' fate, he is not going to disappear from Nick's life. Fortunately, his feels for Nick won't affect Nick and Alex, their bond is too strong - or it will be in time. Thanks for reading Frosty

There might be a bit of a comparison to another story but the differences are so vast it's not worth mentioning. Fantasy is an acquired taste. The issue is how much of the story is devoted to 'the fantasy' and how much is devoted to the characters. In this short story, the 'fantasy' is confined to a few lines and while it has a major role in the plot is is a minor part of the story. I think you have to take fantasy on a case by case basis. So long as the story focuses on the characters it is worth you're checking it out. When it gets bogged down in world building and wizard duels and stuff, it can detract from things. Hopefully, if I write it and you choose to read it, I won't get bogged downed too much Thanks Trev.

You do a great job of conveying your characters. Wylie and John draw you in with their causal banter or their day dreams. I just have this terrible sense of foreboding - not from dad, - cause Poppa Grant seems to know all, knew it before the boys did. Why do I think he set it up so these two would be roommates? Just get that sense. Anyway, so far enjoying this, just waiting for the shoe to drop.

Okay so you too have learned at the foot of the mistress Nephylim on the art of leaving us hanging from a #$&@ cliff. HE MOVED! Moved what? How? UGGGH oh wait, Chapter Six is already posted. hehe Actually that was a good chapter, the cast of characters was fleshed out nicely without a lot of boring unnecessary description, I do not mean this as a criticism of your writing, but rather an observation on the character - how can those two boys be that dense?? I guess that's some good writing that I feel like I 'know' the boys and can ask - what are you thinking. {I have given you two thumbs up but I'm still grumbling about that cliff thingy - just kidding really, nice way to end it.}

I find that I am what I wold call a realist. If the story doesn't feel real, if it is too pat, to contrived all with the goal of getting the MCs in bed together to write sex scenes, I shake my head, roll my eyes and stop reading. This is nothing of the kind. The way these two push it to the limit but won't go the extra inch has me waiting for one of two things, either they take the plunge, or they crash and burn in a most horrific way. You story flows so well that it is an easy read - did I mention that before? If so my apologies. Great job sir, glad there are more chapters for me to read

Quite the little dance these two are doing. The way you paint this picture, it is so realistic. I can just see the boys fumbling for a way to get together without the other knowing how much they wanted/liked it. Humping, then kissing, then jerking. Be interesting to see what's next. Good chapter.

:music: HAPPY BIRTHDAY VIC!!! :music: **Sings 'Happy Birthday' in his off key, east coast accent**. Enjoy your day - do something fun and memorable - like maybe eat something bad for you like a slice of cake. You know you want to!

Guess it's true what they say about fooling some of the people some of the time but you can't fool all of the people all of the time -- Purpose will get finished first - I hope - but IF not, just hold off before you start to read the new one, problem solved -- Thanks for reading and for the comments. -- Andy

Okay so I left chapter reviews for the story, but this is an overall review. I really liked this story over all. The twists and turns at the end pretty much surprised me - I didn't expect the Christian is Michael, or the FBI, or the network of Michael that had it's tendrils so deep into things. for that you get: I feel that with the exception of a few minor blips, you did a great job of developing the characters - sure it was a something of a shocker when Levi kick the shit out of Michael, but it was still in character - you could SO see him doing it if he got the chance - hell the way you wrote this, I wanted to go smash Christian/Michael's stupid face in with a hammer, so it was easy to see Levi doing just what he did. I liked the human element to the agents. They weren't the cold, super agent who can shoot 7 men with a 6 shooter and still have one left to shoot the control panel out at a key moment. I left you my other general comments in the PM and you addressed those so no need to repeat that. I really liked this one, now I'm sad I don't have reading material for the train Andy

So cycling back to my review of 17, I still think the Levi being distant thing is wrong. Levi was never like that the entire time - by that I mean it was out of character - it was a sudden shift and then a sudden shift back - there 'explanation doesn't work for me - of course I am just one voice among many. I like how you wrapped up the Derek subplot, with him explaining his background - it tied up a few loose ends concerning him. But accepting I didn't buy Levi's 'dilemma' the way it ended, back where they began, was a nice touch. If you want my suggestion, and I know you didn't ask for it - I'd suggest Levi walk on egg shells around Blaine but not be distant. Maybe be overly protective, or overly concerned - a far more likely reaction given what happened. Then Blaine can leave him a note or something saying he was going camping, and have Levi truck on out to 'find' Blaine - that way they can be back where they began and Levi can see that Blaine isn't a china doll and he doesn't need babying. Just my suggestion FWIW.

Dag, do NOT piss off Levi - he did what no one else was able to do, take down Michael - to steal a phrase from the Rock - he layeth the smack down on Michael's candy ass Okay since I know you are planning at some point to rewrite - I don't think the Levi getting weird works - at least not for me - especially not that soon after the rescue. I just find it doesn't add much to the plot. I think I would have left that part out and gone to the final chapter to wrap up some lose ends. BUT since you raised, it, i am off to 18 to find out how it gets wrapped up

Well that was one of your more titillating chapters - so much that was said but not said. You know as I was reading these stories, I always wondered how it was that with all the dick and ass Granger got, he never caught a disease - was it just that the nobility was more careful? Hardly right? And Sir George the Randy was anything but discerning - he'd suck or f**k any hot guy that came along. One wonders if this will snap him into being a bit more selective in his partners. Probably not, but one can hope - Now lest you think that is ALL I took from this, Bertie got played by a girl? Freddie's wife? Frankly, Bertie was foolish to trust Freddie, what with the Earl giving Bertie the signet ring Freddie thought was his birthright. Lucky for Bertie, George and by extension Caroline favor him over Freddie, even if Freddie will become a Marquise eventually. This one has so much more intrigue in it than the others - and it doesn't involve the pathetically inept WIlcox family - or does it hmmm

Thanks Maria - sorry for all the killing, just sorta happened As for the longer story, well if you saw the comments below, that story owes its beginning to this. This is not a part of or the back ground for that, just this one gave me the idea for the longer one. That one might be WAY too uninteresting for you I fear as there will be a war and the like in that one. But thanks for reading this one Andy

HAPPY BIRTHDAY BOB!!! Have some fun, have some family, make some memories. {Psst - I suggest running down the street naked yelling "It's my birthday!" But that's just me }

Welcome and enjoy. And if you liked Shane and Trey, you'll her other stuff even more. You picked a good author to start with

The longer story will not include this, the characters will be different. The idea behind the MC of the longer story grew from these two. I have a lot of fight scene left in me - once i get the new stuff edited, reworked and re-written Thanks for the review Sara

Egads that was a wild chapter - I was all set to whine and complain that Allen couldn't be the baddie because in the prior chapters you had Michael not knowing who they were until WHAM. So he's blackmailing Allen eh?. Then, rather than be double crossed, the decides to kill the lot of them by shooting out the copter. Nice twist. What made it better was that Derek didn't know that Allen only JUST became a mole - he probably thought he was a long time informant. So with out that piece of info, he couldn't properly plan for what would happen next and ... well I am explaining it to you and you wrote

Well that was a fine lesson in how NOT to protect your people IDK, Levi's reaction seemed a tad off - yeah I know I'm a tool for saying it, but it did - but that is probably just me. For a smart guy, he seems to totally ignore how truly dangerous this is - this might be my law enforcement background coming through - you know the side that says do what they say cause they know better than me? Clearly something is off here, I mean Michael has SOME Set of connection to infiltrate this. Nice tension however, I kept wanting to skip forward to see what happens.

Why do I have this image of super agent Jason Bourne when we are talking about Derek - just an image. Michael is interesting, where does he get this money from? And how does a wanted killer have such connections in Law Enforcement?? Question you will not doubt explain in your own good time

Duck?? um yeah monsieur Kenard who has the brain of a duck you know - That was a paraphrase from Monty Python's and The Holy Grail. Stealing the master wizard's apprentice might have been a good thing had he the time - but that might be for another story :PThanks for the review

Hey Cailen, Well if we do make it to Mass to get married and you make it, you two will be the only two there besides mike and me, that is sort of the plan it seems. But still would be grand Thanks for the info and for being willing to help.

Thanks Nephy, the 'expanded' version isn't entirely connected but it should be easy to see the relation to the characters once you see it. yes, folks WILL see it, just a matter of when, lolthanks for reading

Whew - caught up to what I read on the train - just in time to go read more today. LOL Well that does clear up a ton about Christian. Okay here is a for you. How perfectly you capture gay men - death looms around the corner from a psycho ex-bf who is really a serial killer and the 'boys' are oogling pictures of agents who are going to be guarding them and wondering what they can and can't do. Typical. I once went to a funeral of a gay friend of mine and my friends who went with me were cruising the church. I was SO pissed [i was newly out at the time so I guess I was naive] but the point is nothing is too serious for us gay to cruise.

I've got a few comments - 1) You're mean - first you give us the horrible ominous sense of doom that Christian has an inside man in the police department, then you give us the boys going rock wild doing the mattress mambo. We can't even enjoy that because we're waiting for Christian to show up an knife them or something. 2) The first scene shouldn't have been shown. For a suspense story, it would have been better NOT to know what Christian is thinking, then just have it happen and explained later. This, IMHO, gave away too much. Of course the flip side is it has us on edge but we know too much about HOW Christian is doing it. Just my thought. But it is good too see the boys having so much fun