Andrew Q Gordon

Sorry about the choke hold - I was trying to make a run for being King of cliffs when I posted that - thankfully everyone will forget about it by the time the next vote comes around.

Well, that was an ending within a new beginning. Poor Zeek, he seems a magnet for bad things. It was a good story with a nice ending. You left it with a sense of promise for the two. After everything that happened they are still who they were. There is also a hint of what could lie ahead for them. That the emotional damage from all that's happened is still there if they let it get to them. Nice ending, so much hope, so much promise but definitely not the fairly tale happily ever after.

Trev, I'm stunned there is a chapter you haven't reviewed - but come to think of it I did see another recently that had only on and it wasn't from you Yeah I get that dad's are usually the ones who are 'I ain't having no gay son' but NightOwl did the same with Indiana Summer. And I think it's true that sons go to their mom's for acceptance more than their dads - I guess, I don't have any proof of that either. But in this instance the idea was not so much gender as social status. Funny how you write something one way and it comes out another.

To me sexy can not be defined or described. You can give examples, but you can't quantify it. To me, defining sexy is like that famous Supreme Court 'definition' of pornography given to us by Justice Potter Stewart - I know it when I see it. 'I shall not today attempt further to define the kinds of material I understand to be embraced within that shorthand description ["hard-core pornography"]; and perhaps I could never succeed in intelligibly doing so. But I know it when I see it, and the motion picture involved in this case is not that. [Emphasis added.]' [Okay so I confess to being something of a nerd citing Potter Stewart in a thread on sexy - sue me ] To me sexy is something of an attitude, that rakish, biker bad boy attitude is sexy, the boorish Philistine pig ignorant type is not. You can look sexy until you open your mouth and ruin it, just as you might not be totally sexy until you speak. Yeah I'm so precise today. So to end, here is something more definitive - A great ass in pair of well fitting jeans is almost always sexy provided they don't ruin the look by wearing flip flops, scandals, mandals, or the like.

@Sara - yeah I couldn't make up shit this good, really. @ Mark - how did my blog turn into your problem?? J/K I'd bet you a couple of beers he ain't gonna agree to pay half - you have to come to DC to collect if you win - @Dave - - that is all - @Nephy - Yeah but you don't wave your hand over your food before you eat or make your son grow up in a pub do you? And I am not talking playing air guitar or singing, I'm talking full on, London Philharmonic Conductor style conducting here. however, it is always the same three movements so it must be a VERY lame piece she is conducting

So I usually do most of my 'talking' in a review but I wanted to weigh in on a couple things. First the idea of George and Winkler - I am SO glad you are so obviously opposed to that. It would feel icky. Winkler - for all that he was so sweet and innocent at first is nothing of the kind we find out now that he and Jeffers are nothing but mammals and doing it like they do . . . . BUT that aside, he is - despite being George's valet - something like a child/brother/cousin to George. I mean George saved him, and for a time he worshiped George and perhaps still does, but there is too much history/connection. Having them be together would feel like George had no morals whatsoever. Then there is the Calver/Granger thingy. This dynamic is SO interesting. I mean there is/was the obvious love the two share(d) but I sense it is waning. George loves him, obviously, but he seems to be gravitating toward Freddy and maybe even Peter. There is almost a sense that George has grown up so much more now that he is Captain and Calvert is gone. What I mean is that when they were together it was easy to just let it happen. They were good together and they had each other and didn't have to worry so much because they were so good at being together etc. George didn't really consider his position or that of his family. Then once separated he grew up - he matured a bit but still had Freddy. Freddy who didn't need to be reminded of status - who understood the need for decorum etc. That relationship helped him to realize how to have a relationship within the boundaries of discretion. Then along comes Calvert again and Calvert has shown no signs he understands. Worse, HE- Calvert - is the person who is 'in charge' he is the one who is supposed to be the older wiser, more mature half. And in that role, the one that Granger held in their tryst - he fails miserably. George still cares for him but it seems obvious that he is starting to rethink his ability to be with him, jealous as he might be that Calvert has a new lover. Quite the dynamic. Now to see the triple threat match between The Earl, the Captain and the Wanna be Earl. One dumb question. What is granddad's title? The one he hopes to give to George??

Mark, I assume you saw this post, but just in case you didn't, this is so perfect for George and his 'boys.' http://www.gayauthor...76-gay-pirates/ I can't take credit for posting which is why I give you a link and not an embedded video.

Just might??? Twack - that was an arrow into my heart Yeah Ms. G adopting Jason would make them brothers and well - yeah that's nasty. Better to keep it as it is.

Everything can't be all lovey dovey, can it? I mean things happen when you're young and hot. Peter is right to think his man is a hottie and Jason never really thinks about how insecure Peter is about being with him. He doesn't see the problem and this won't help things. But he at least stopped when he should have. Right???

Ice Queen, Hurricane, all these storm warnings for Jason's mom. Maybe Royce will have a chance, then again, maybe not. It's a tough call. But glad you're like the story.

Haha Mike, thanks so much - though I think this might be their family and friends as well. I have seen any Weiner pictures or topless flexing with one arm lately so I think we got rid of a few of them

Lugh - JUST DO IT - I bet it would be quite popular Antya - Just wait, if you visit, you'll see - **Shakes head in amazement** Thanks Vic, I suppose we will I can't tell you how MUCH I am looking forward to the day I walk into our house with our daughter. All the stuff I know is coming - no sleep, work etc, I just don't care

In theory I live in a 'college town' but given we are 'inside the beltway' - code for close to DC - I hardly think this qualifies as a college town. I mean it's really just a very close in suburb of DC. But I've never seen so many freaks in my life: First there's Mr. Wizard - he frequents the Starbucks near campus - he sets his drink on the counter, waves his hand over his drink twice, takes a drink, sets it down and does it again. He does it everytime before he drinks. Then there is Bird Lady - she is this tall thin woman who plods as she walks and reminds of us crane. She walks in all weather, conducting an imaginary symphony as she walks. I'm not sure she even wears earphones or has a music player with her. We also have this dude that I think lives in the Starbucks and the shopping center around it. He is there almost all day everyday. After school hours he brings his daughter and she runs around the store. Basically the employees are her friends. It's kinda sad really but smiling dad seems to think its all good. They eat dinner in the store sometimes - I mean they get pizza and bring it in - what's so freaky is they are raising her in the store. I've seen mom do homework with her in the store. Just weird. Last night at the diner near the house, we saw some woman in a pirate shirt and lederhosen She was reading the menu and commenting on how good things sounded. As if diner fare was 5 star cuisine. We have crazy neighbors too - there is this really nice house on the corner of our street. In our neighborhood, the corner lots were meant for large impressive homes, set at an angle to the street. This one is particularly nice. It's been empty for 15 years at least. The owners live else where in the neighborhood in a much smaller house. :wacko: The most common story I've heard is that it was the wife's parent's house and they are saving it for when their 50 something son gets married - The big oaf lives at home and I suspect is a hermit who never goes out. We see him and the dad - who's like 100 when they come over now and then to check on the house. Then there are the 'run walkers' this is a couple who pretend to jog while they are walking - meaning the put their arms up and act like they are jogging but they are still walking - and not that fast either. But not much beats our neighbors. He is late forties and still sporting a very stylish Prince Valiant hair cut. What's worse is he does next to no work on the house - which is falling down around them. He once commented when we hired someone to do some yard work he couldn't see 'paying someone to do something he could do himself.' I was about to say - yeah you gotta do it yourself if you don't pay someone, but Mike stopped me. He also has this idea that Members Only Jackets are still acceptable and that Jorts - [jean shorts] are a staple of modern living. I so wonder what the neighbors think of us

That was really sad on so many levels - his just taking it cause he 'deserved' it, his parents inability to be affectionate to each other or him, and perhaps most that he felt he was only lovable when he was an infant. Maybe that is the last time his family truly expressed genuine affection for him. Hopefully things will pick up for him, but somehow I doubt it will happen anytime soon.

Haha, you bet - happy to let you be wrong. As for a real book - well there are a couple reasons why it can't/won't be - too long for publication [in paper at least] and once you post it on line no one wants to publish it because it's been out there for free. BUT This was also my first attempt at something so I was planning to rework a few things and then try to get it published as a slightly different - and hopefully better story. Thanks again for letting me know how you like it - always makes my day hearing things like this. -- Andy

That was an auspicious start to the year - no doubt. Seem to hew true to the norm, the insecure bullies always look for someone to pick on. Usually it's the ones who keep to themselves because they have no one to watch their back. Okay, problem - you need to break up your dialogue into separate paragraphs. The part where Kade speaks to Ritchie needs to chopped. Separate each person's actions and dialogue from the others. It didn't flow as well as it would if you hadn't lumped them all together. Other wise well done - the end - where Kade asks is that it? seemed so sad and yet so right - sorta sets up an interesting dynamic between the two.

Your writing does not suck - for having no beta and no editor it's really very good. This is an ominous start in some ways. You give a touch of hope that amidst his sense of worthlessness he can find what he wants, a friend, a lover, etc. But the dark self despair leaves us sure he won't. I have some other comments - if you want them, shoot me a PM and I send em. I don't find it useful to the author to suggest things in a story that is already written so IF you want to hear them let me know, otherwise, I'll just keep to leaving my comments here. Andy

Well all things end, at least all stories have to end - I'm not saying jason and peter will end - as for emotions? IDK, - terrible answer I know, but really I just write it as I feel it - another terrible answer but I just don't know how else to answer. I am glad you enjoyed it - you did enjoy it right? - And thanks for taking the time to read and to let me know how you feel about it. Andy

Well, you do know that this is Uriel's story mostly. But in my head - Uriel and Gabriel are tight, Raphael is kinda a prick but not too much and Michael is the boss. So not sure how much into the back story I'm gonna get but things have a way of morphing into more when I least expect it. If you have other questions, shoot me a message on the forum, I think there is a link at the bottom of the story. Otherwise go to forums and look for mine under promising authors. -- Andy

Thanks for reading and taking the time to review. I think I kinda cheated calling them 'angels' but I think my psuedo-agnostic streak allowed me to insinuate that there are no 'real' angels and that angels are in fact aliens. But not to get started on the longer story - once I finish Purpose --- thanks again for the comments -- Andy

Okay, I'm inviting myself to Christmas at Peter's. I don't reckon Jason could EVER be Hyden--he feels geniune and caring and I just couldn't see it. And BEST THING in the chappy--the I love you! Aww. Sweet As! There were actually two twin beds. But I see your point. -- If you find their house, let me know I wanna go too

That is such a lovely line. The money issues still make me tense everytime I read this. I remember first reading it and thinking how distruptive and damaging money issues can be in relationships. How it gives one power over the other, or if not, it can seem that way anyway. I grew up with my parents having similar struggles and I do believe it was one of the reasons things didn't work out. Anyway, it makes me senstive and worried to read about these two boys with this issue itching at the surface of their relationship. I love the witty lines, btw! hehe, they may have issues, but damn if they're not sexy. Yeah well the whole different classes so to speak is hard for them to deal, each in their own way. For Peter it's don't let it be a hang up, for Jason it's try to be better at seeing Pete's side. Glad you liked the witty lines. I tried to make it a tad funny where I could

Haha, I'm surprised you didn't point out all the flaws that we corrected in later chapters No all the places, Harvest Moon, Java Shack, Graydon, they only exist in Andyland - any similarity to real places is entirely coincidental. And yeah, when I was writing this, I thought they were a cute couple too

Thanks John. I have to agree this was one of my two favorites. IDK, just something about this one, it was just 'there' for me. The other - and hopefully this isn't too much of a suck up - is Lugh's My Mystic Knight. Was a lot in a little space [yeah I know it was a billion words but still. Too bad he never finished it

I've decided, being 14 weeks away, I don't want kids anymore - I can't believe I thought this was a good idea - Okay, so I am already talking to Mike about baby #2 and hoping like crazy we don't get twins. BUT I agree with Krista, I would like two so they have each other. But after what the first one cost - I am not sure we will have the money for baby number two anytime soon. But I am going to see if we can't swing starting it next June so that they will be about 18 months apart. Otherwise, I'll be working til 80 just to see them get out of college.