Andrew Q Gordon

Mike and I are discussing this - I see nothing wrong with calling us both dad - he wants different names - I don't see that happening to be honest, but time will tell.

Isn't it called DUCT - tape???

For all that Ramsey was playing politician, Granger is quite astute himself, just not in the finer, more nuanced points. Granger knew enough to include Nelson in the repairs but didn't seem to understand the issue of the discrepancy. The lost of Captain Sommers and his large presence doesn't seem to be bother granger that much right yet - perhaps there was too much else to distract him. My money is on Gatling being in love with Roberts. I'd say ' or Sommers' but Sommers doesn't seem the type. AND it fits with why Roberts insisted he be sent back to Belvidera - he knew what he was about to do and couldn't stand for Gatling to be either at risk or get captured. Poor kid.

Having just gone out to look at rings today, I don't envy you buying a dress - lord I had my choice in about 5 minutes - the classic wedding band in Platinum. But we had to look at, try on, compare like 30 rings. I hope you don't have the same situation with the dress, they take way longer to get in and out than a ring. That said, I second Rustle's comments. I think is kickin you two are doing this your way and would be pleased to see which one you select. Since Joshua doesn't want his picture on line we won't see him in it , but at least let us see which one you picked. I wanted to do our wedding at my Aunt's beach house on Fire Island in shorts, polo shirt and flip flops - or Jandals as my dear NZ friend Anyta would say, but I was told I had to dress up. So much for getting to do it my way. At least you two agree on what to wear

Funny how you put Jason's personality. I don't think I consciously thought of him as an all or nothing type, though he is fond of the the expression 'all in'. I think that is a spill over from the 'author's personality' I'm very much an all in type. If I decide to do something, I do or I don't. Interesting observation indeed. Gonna have to watch that in future writings Thanks for reading and commenting Maria.

No sir, there are no "F" award in Q'Topolis - I could make it a rule if you like, but as Master and Commander of my little sovereignty here on the web, my word is law. Though I must confess I didn't get the bubbles comment, maybe it's me who gets an "F"

Generally I read the first chapter of almost anything knew that I see. I confess to not seeing a lot of 'new' authors because they're still not out of Peer review. I also make it a point to read people who comment on my work. Might be a bit self promoting but honestly if someone took the time to give me feed back I try to do like wise. Then there are authors I like who don't comment on anything. But since I like them, I read. I'm not totally into one genre as you can tell from my writing. I kinda like variety. Second Shot is nothing like Purpose which isn't much like Archangel which is completely different from my fantasy writings like Not for Hire or The Price of Love. So genre isn't a biggie for me. So yeah, I'm so dag gone helpful aren't I? Andy

Chapter 10 the later part. Jake meets will while he's on the Univ of MD campus collecting his thoughts. Then the beginning of chapter 11 Ryan is upset that Will met 'Jake' So not the first appearance. Probably not the last either. But I'm not saying for sure. Also, I don't think Gar's 'disappearance' if that happens would stop any of the action. I think it's gonna shift. Remember, when did Gar care about saving people? Except for Ryan of course but that's a different issue all together.

Is that any way to deal with a confuzzled baby daddy to be???

If had even a whiff of Scottish in me - the bf does - I'd insist we wear kilts - I totally have the legs. But I so not Scottish it'd look silly.

Well that was just sweet as - but being the piker that I am, I think I stuff this in my boot with my teddy beer drinking beer.

I don't which should be first. Funny but what the heck was that??? oh yeah, the little green '1' was your 1000th

What are we wishing for anyway?

I don't even own a pair of flip flops, sandals, jandals, whatever. I once own a pair of teva's but the do chewed them and I didn't much wear em anyway. At work I wear Allen Edmonds Dress shoes, still made in American and worth every penny they're so comfortable even wearing em all day in court. Outside work I have three pair of shoes I wear, a pair of Merrill Low Cut trail shoes, extremely comfy for long days walking, lotsa support and feel good. Or my Adidas Samba's been wearing them for 20 odd years now and go through a pair every year or two. And my white - well whitish Chuck Taylors - I remember wearing them as a kid so I bought me some and almost feel 12 again walking around in them.

Wow Tejun, quite the introduction. Mine was so bland by comparison - er... wait, I never actually did one, Welcome and enjoy Andy

HAPPY BIRTHDAY MIKE!!! Hope you had a great day! Figured you might need the big letters now

Purpose: Chapter 14 is posted. There is a special appearance by our good friend KC - Grim. He being the winner help Andy get to 1000 posts. I'd say this is about the half way point in the story. Oh yeah, GA Stories had a brain fart when I posted chapter 13 and counted it twice. So while the Chapter count reads 15, I'm only up to 14. Sorry for the confusion. Andy

Antya is a bit miffed at me for having so many things in the air - there is even another one or two I haven't mentioned on here that she knows about so she is pushing me to revisit this and another one before going back to Second Shot. But Not sure any of the brother's dislike Nick - Raphael's interest has more to do with the plot for the main story than with Nick per se. But that is for another day for me to write. Thanks for the note and for reading Andy

Read Chapter 1 and was really quite impressed with your writing. Nothing really to over in that regard. The characters felt real, the dialogue believable, the emotions were there. One complaint - the time jumps - the whole going to the Corcoran [very cool place by the way] then zing - he's there and back and meeting Chance again in like two paragraphs. It took me three or four reads to figure out what happened. A suggestion - give us a clean break i.e. make it clear this scene is over, new one is starting. I usually give a double space, then a few *** then and another couple spaces and move on. But that is really quite minor. I second Conner's comment about the strength of characters. I have to say that the opening, followed by flash back makes it a bit sad - there is an over hang of impending doom because we know everyone is gone - except Mason whom we haven't met yet. That's good writing to get that emotion out so fast while still keeping us engaged with your story and characters. Andy

Okay, I'm gonna go out on a different limb here - yeah I'm such a rebel aren't I. IF the bf wants to wear a wedding dress - what's the big deal? It's their wedding. My only problem with helping is I have zero fashion sense. it's a good thing I only need a tux for our wedding, A black tux is easy to pick - um I take the black one with the white shirt and black bow tie. Sorry dude, all three you had look fine with to me lol.

Okay so I missed a few, but welcome to everyone. Glad to see new faces and hear new stories are coming.

I guess I'm back in the camp of less description of sex is better. You know, you get the characters all hot and bothered then end the scene with the implication they're about to do the mattress mambo. I say this becasue when I wrote Second Shot, I really had almost no descriptive sex until the end. I thought I'd toss some in and see. The result was that I got a lot of comments from people saying why did you do this now? You didn't do it in the previous 45 why now? That kinda stuff. IDK maybe they were sucky - no pun - sex scenes that did little to stimulate the reader. My point is more people - or at least more of the people who comment - seem to prefer you 'get us to the bed' so to speak then let our imaginations take over. You can allude to it in the next scene or not. But as a reader I prefer the make it clear something is gonna happen then cut away approach, which is why I didn't do it for most of Sec Shot. I'm not sure it's necessary in most stories and frankly I generally skim those scenes. In fact recently there was a chapter posted by someone that was mostly sex and it took me like 3 minutes to read 5000 words because I just scrolled down until they were at the 'smoke a cigarette' phase. In the end it is as someone else said, what is it you want to write. If you are asking will people read if you DON'T include it, the answer is yes. I don't think it will affect the readership if you keep out the detailed sex, step by step, dare I say 'blow by blow' description. Andy

Does that mean you aspire to be 'more' than you are??

Gotta say I was NOT expecting that from Doc. And I really wanna know what's going on with Jed and Bill though I have a bit of an inkling. I suppose David is looking better and better. - ugh you're a cruel man Jim, a cruel cruel man.

You know I was good with this chapter until you added that last word at the end of the end notes. Seriously that's not nice. I think Bill is a decent sort and I think T.R. going over shows enough that he liked Bill but then you add that maybe. Hmmm Maybe I'll just stop reading