Cailen

he drives me crazy sometimes... but I've never been happier thank you so much.

For all the crap I give you you probably are one of the very best people i have ever met, and i mean in real life too. I hope everything ends up alright and of course i send my fondest wishes to you as well. As maria said you're the #1 editor in my book no matter what, don't worry about my story, just focus on getting your life back on track. Wishing you the best Cailen

(Blushes) thank you

Cailen Poem Rating OVERALL: 10/10 Content: Even in your poems you show a master of setting a scene to build a powerful message, It carries well and the message comes through clearly. Flow: As mentioned it is telling a story and it builds an emotional climax and allows you to leave with the strong feelings it expresses. Poignancy: Masterfully Done. Grammar: Would expect no less than perfection from you

Cailen Rating OVERALL: 9/10 Setting: 9/10- Although the settings were varied their descriptions were often very static. Characters: 9/10- Enjoyable, but often at times they all seemed whiny. Plot: 8/10- No conclusion and the ending was rushed. Grammar: 10/10- you clearly have an excellent editor, props. This story was very enjoyable albeit a bit predictable. It followed a lot of classic rules for romances and i am glad for some of the liberties you presented. I am glad i read it, thank you for sharing it with us. Cailen

I realized when i was in the second grade, it started when i noticed a certain lack of understanding about girls. By third grade i would only hand out around guys and by fifth grade i had figured out what it was that was happening to me. so I was around 9 when i first figured it out but around 11 did i actually know what it was. My husband on the other hand didn't start getting attracted to guys until he was 20, he was a confused fellow. Cailen

WCD, My opinion live so many others in this thread is unique since I seem to be one of the actually gay married. I feel marriage is a very long and old standing institute that has been ingrained into our society since the time of it's foundation and will probably last long after we have gone. In the course of many years it has changed and altered from property holding to a symbol of love. I also grew up with a strong religious and spiritual sense, and ever since being kicked out of my church have not hesitated to pray when things are hard. I reached a point in my relationship when there was a need insdie me that made me what to shout from the rooftops how I felt about the man i fell in love with. I had reached a point within myself spiritually that i felt that i was ready. A, and myself had discussed our future plans, our desires and our hopes of having children one day and the decision to get married was an easy one. I can definitely respect a couple who does not want to get married but the stability it provides makes it worth it in my mind. 1. I am on my husbands health insurance. 2. He can make any monetary and health decisions if i am incapacitated. 3. If something were to happen to either of us, the other would be entitled to the others health insurance and retirement accounts. 4. We have the same last name, that our children will share to hopefully spare them some ridicule. I met my husband when i was 11 and we were childhood friends, he has been a constant figure my whole life, being able to be together with him and for us to share our lives together has been the single best thing that has ever happened to me and i thank god every day i wake up that I have him and that i get another chance to tell him I love him. I hope that others get to share the fidelity and joy i have had and that we keep this tradition for a long time. Cailen

When she's 18 she'll but giant hoops through her ears and get them pierced 17 times and cause more disfigurement than there ever was before. Instead of getting our children to believe in themselves and developing a positive self image naturally, we are encouraging children to value what we think we want them to be and not what they are. What a horrible thing to do to a child, in essence telling them they aren't good enough but we'll make them better through surgery. Now if the problem were developmental like an extra finger or extra toes, something that would be crippling to their abilities to write or walk then i can see having a procedure done, but this is quite silly I'd take that mother in for child abuse if it'd stick.

I see my signatures everywhere and i smile, lol but srsly that is awesome.

I am forgotten I am the hat that you like lurking under your bed I am the toy that you used, hiding out in the shed I am the pain that you felt, just a moment ago I am swears that you said when you were telling me so I am forgotten Your memory isn't serving you well You told me to 'shut up' and 'to go to hell' You go through feeling like you clean the sheets You play your games, and you play for keeps I am Forgotten I never wanted us to drift apart I

Happy Birthday Lugh, my favorite and most powerful tech.

I submit my story 'The day John got his wish' located here: https://www.gayauthors.org/forums/story/cailen/thedayjohngothiswish Cailen

A day in the life of John, a student at Graydon College.

John was sleeping peacefully when his door slamming shut woke up him from a deep sleep. He felt a foot kicking the base of his bed. He opened his eyes and saw his roommate glaring at him. “You’re still in bed, get up shithead or you’ll be late for class!” John rubbed the sleep from his eyes and took in his surroundings. He was clutching his navy blue comforter and was staring across his room to his best friend Trevor, who was throwing his backpack onto his bed and s

You've given me a lot of material to rip apart. The names are creative but some are too close together to keep distinguished when the story is moving at such a quick pace. Your main character Anarix for being an heir to the throne seems like a playa and for someone who is used to death threats and danger would have been more careful when mating... cest la vie. If you're going to end the story so abruptly on a cliffhanger which you did, you could have cut out a lot of the subplot as now i feel dirty for wasting my life reading all that extra dribble. It adds nothing to the story other than confusion. though i do really like Amberly and his sister's husband. You have a clear direction and intention with the story and yet you pushed us through many subplots and diversions and backpedaling extra material my brain feels like it's gone through a rusty cheese grater. The core of the story, very clean and well written, extremely polished work exactly what i expected from you. I like the creativity and the setting of the story. I find that your overall all tone, and your expectations of people are extremely cynical and at times angry and depressing. you managed to evoke all of these feelings as I read. I don't go into a story always expecting a happy ending, but it was clear from the start that this was not going to end well to the point that it was predictable and cliche. Cailen Rating OVERALL: 7/10 Setting: 8/10- tell us more about the homeworld. Characters: 5/10- cause you used about only half of them. Plot: 5/10- predictable and dirge. Grammar: 10/10

I told you when you wrote this that is was amazing, brilliantly thought out and well played. The stylized journal like writing and the way the scenes are broken up really plays with the concept of the two brothers. I really like this story and i hope that the sea of encouraging reviews gets you motivated to write more because you've gotten us hungry for more of your work. Cailen

You stand, looking away Bravely, so certain You said ‘I’ll be fine’ When you’re breaking inside Don’t turn this way I’ll have tears in my eyes And I won’t be able to see you Looking back with your own I’ll stand, watching you go Stoic and silently I said ‘just go away’ But Inside, I was begging you to stay Don’t turn this way I am breaking inside The words I said and felt Are not worth the consequence

thanks for the review, those are the real words I got to read for my wedding. I am glad the touched you, they did indeed touch me as well because we had made it and we were still together. Thank you

no prob.

thanks

we were lucky

Yea i cried like a baby when i got to read it, i almost forgot i had it until a few weeks before.

If I could just find the words to tell you how much I love you I would tell them to you everyday I would speak of how you fill up my life, And this is what I’d say I love you like sunshine, you give me all my light I love you like evening, because you tuck me in at night I love you like summer, springtime, winter and the fall For of all the beauty found on this earth, you’re the most beautiful of all If I could give you anything, to show you how much I cared

Standing at the crossroads of my life Looking towards the distant sunset Shining a warm glow in the sky Facing my future And all the while looking behind I have a lifetime of sad moments Things that I rather regret But all of those things are where I came from Where I am going, I do not know yet There are limitless possibilities But I know I haven’t the time To choose as many as all of them So I despair and say I am fine But I feel that sunset

As dark befalling a crescent moon Brings the shadows into eclipse The stars still shine behind the clouds But vanish as the sun emits It’s light to warn that morning's soon Reflecting light and in a haze It emits an eerie glow Upon the lights from the cityscapes And the remaining bits of snow Reminding us of colder days The clouds thicken and it will disappear The blackness shrouds upon the sky But will turn to subtle gray As the sun comes