carringtonrj
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Great stuff, N. Really made me think of someone I know/knew who would love this story. Great build up. Keen to read more!
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Well, there's a lot to take in there, isn't there?! You're obviously so much more strong and chilled than I am. When I think of losing my job, it makes me feel lost! So I'd be hopeless to advise you on this one, but I would say that doing things for others obviously makes you happy - why wouldn't it? So I wouldn't underestimate the importance of that for you. Hope you find a way of squaring the circle! x
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It's good, because of the unexpected nature of the outburst. I think it reads well generally. Nothing jarred for me. So, yeah, take it further - that would be my advice. It's already different, surprising. A great start.
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You're too modest in your response to the other review. You write really well. The build up is beautifully handled. You should certainly write and post more. In my non-expert opinion!
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Bippity-Boppity-Boo or How Charming Fell For Cinder
carringtonrj commented on Lugh's story chapter in Bippity-Boppity-Boo or How Charming Fell For Cinder
I'm all for gender confusion. Fun story. I like how your imagination works. Happy (and gay!) ever after. -
Great opening, N. Pace. Interest. Drive. Imagination. I'm curious to see where this is heading!
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Ok, that's sexy.
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sweet. good use of "auburn" - a great word to use! you write directly and emotionally. interesting reading. you obviously have talent.
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I was enjoying reading this a lot. Very nicely handled little scenes, nice build up. Thought I knew where it was heading. Good fun, reminding me of school years, etc. Then I found myself reading the very end and feeling really emotional - not sure why. Beautiful story-telling, really got to me. Thank you.
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Chapter 7 - Meeting the Family
carringtonrj commented on Nephylim's story chapter in Chapter 7 - Meeting the Family
you handle the conflict really well here and give us plenty of reason to hate the horrible aunt. there's something horribly familiar about that kind of self-righteous prejudice. i wonder what drives someone to be so hateful. -
ah the banshee! who could resist? lovely writing. there are so many great folk tales and ballads out there - it would be interesting to gay some of them up, wouldn't it?
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i wonder why bridge is such a favourite? more tremendous energy in this chapter. once you get on a roll, you really go for it, i guess.
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good pace here. moves on rapidly without losing the detail that is so delicious.
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steamy!
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um, does it mean i'm shallow that i like this so much?
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very fine prologue. sexy and scary.
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brilliant build up. you handle a lot in a brief space. real skill.
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Chapter 6 - The River's Other Man
carringtonrj commented on Nephylim's story chapter in Chapter 6 - The River's Other Man
a grim twist! adds some interesting new dimensions. good stuff. -
has a real energy and is disturbing to me. the end works and leaves a whole book in the suggestion which you don't need to write but the reader can start to imagine. a real example of less is more.
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sweet story. relatively little pain! you show real patience in letting things scarcely develop rather than rushing to the thrill. works really nicely. i enjoy reading your stuff.
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it's great. a little sombre! but you have a talent for handling characters and situations in a sharp manner. hope we don't have to experience horror to arrive at bliss, really!
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Interesting style. Good way to discuss an age-old problem. I think in theory, sharing someone ought to be fine, especially where the bisexual thing is involved, but in practice it's not easy. I mean, I don't like someone reading my magazine before I've finished with it, so I don't cope well with the idea of my partner in someone else's hands. Plus, there's the horrible self-doubt - obviously I'm not good enough for him/her and so they need someone else to feel fulfilled. Then you start to wonder if you need to compete - be a better lover to make sure they don't make the final choice to go with the other. In a sexy fantasy, all sorts of threeways are cool. In reality, I think you've hit that enervating trouble they cause perfectly. Um, in short, I enjoyed this.
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intense and hypnotic. aren't we all just children all the time or half the time anyhow?
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lovely. reminds me of 'the dead' with the "would not let me come to you"
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I remember hearing a colleague proudly proclaiming: "some people live to work; I work to live." And I thought, I am living whilst I'm working, and a lot of my life is taken up with working. So if it wasn't something worthwhile and important to me, why would I do it. The ideal is to love what you do, surely.
