Delaneym

oh my god, I love Wilber!

Great story., is this the end?

I think you should end this story and start Carlit's story. This was great, thank you!

I may be alone here, but I'm with the mother on this one. No one even had a second thought about keeping two mates apart? I mean ,okay he was a jealous friend, but what the heck! The end is pretty abrupt.

Well, that left me feeling like I just want to reach out and scream! This happens way too often. well done.

Wow! I'm still sniffling. Really quite moving. Loved it.

What a fun read. I remember seeing something on the news a bout a hall closing. Loved all the characters. Bummer it's a short!

Nice story.

This chapter seemed too rushed. Sometimes it felt like a lot of filler and nothing to really move the story along. Like when Ed went and helped his wife with lunch. The grammatical errors were a bit annoying. With that said, I still like the story and can't wait to see what happens. Just a note, I'm a reader who doesn't have the imagination to write, so yaahhhh Writers!

I like this story so far. Cowboys, who wouldn't? One thing that always bothers me when reading a story however, is the constant use of a name. Like " hunter said...", or "Hunter did...., then Hunter...". And so forth. I think too much of that kind of thing brakes the story flow. Since I can't write, I don't like to give criticism, so just take it as a suggestion from someone who reads a lot. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Oooooh, I like this so far. Robert=Bobby???