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Chapter 15 – Justice Really is Blind
Ron commented on Bill W's story chapter in Chapter 15 – Justice Really is Blind
When you take the story as a whole body and not by it's separate parts, it is one of the gloomiest things I've read in quite sometime. Those two boys were frantic and grasping at life from the beginning until the end. Sure there was some happiness but that was pinched from life like it was a miser. Understanding that it was a story about intolerance did not make it any easier to disassociate myself from the tragedy of these boy's lives. Call me disturbed. -
This chapter has been a delightful read. '..., always near at hand, cutting yet diminutive proof...', this is one good example of both wit and humor in your writing, I find it so appealing. I found myself laughing many times while reading this. One can believe that a group of characters such as these might have become friends and then family. The fact that blondie is so beautiful, intelligent and insightful is, well...
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Well, I just posted the topic of 'Missing Authors' and then this topic popped up. DomLuka was one author I mentioned in it. At least I have somewhat of an answer... No one appears to know. Yes, folks, I used to be what you call 'a lurker' but I suppose since I've registered, I am now a 'newbie'. DomLuka stories are one of the first that I read when coming to the site and I have seriously been wanting a fix since I've finished the posted stories. Is what is posted the extent of the body of work? or is there more on another site somewhere?
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I find that I'm missing a few authors that have written and published here on Gay Authors. Perhaps someone can enlighten me as to why they may be here no longer. Dom Luka - nothing published since 2010 Gabriel Morgan - nothing published since 2011 - '52 Panhead, is incomplete viv - nothing published since Jan 2011 - 'Underneath This Big Ol' Sky', this I would buy as a novel if it were complete There are more, I'm sure, but these three so far have stood out among the authors works I have read. I know there are many reasons we may not hear from an author and whether death, illness or just moving on are the culprits, it would be nice to have some closure as a reader. Thanks
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Your first attempt here was quite an enjoyable read. The progression from the parental tension and on to Trevor's feelings of freedom and adventure set the tone for the actual journey very nicely. I didn't find a stagnation in the writing for the journey. It was important to the character to create the time and distance needed to separate him from home. The connecting at the beach and the revelation of the facts later was nicely done. The ending left us a promise for the future and was very appropriate for a young man beginning his adult life.
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The ending of the story in such a blunt force manner sucked all the enjoyment out of learning about the characters. The adventurous road trip disappeared somewhere along the journey without finishing and then the author slapped the reader in the face with the end. If more of a connection were to have been made between those two points, the ending still wouldn't have been easy to digest but it would have made more sense.
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I rather enjoyed the story. It contains some rather too frequent issues facing some youths, gay or otherwise, but it deals with the situation rather even handedly in the context and length of the story. A more lengthy read would be required to explore anything further with greater depth.
