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I hate you! Actually, I hate a certain pesky letter and not you. What have I said about things slipping through before? Countless readings by several people and something manages to sneak by us. Thanks, you horned animal.
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LMAO Perv! I think the author and lead editor have spent enough combined time under tattoo needles to guide the children. However, that wasn't the type of ink I was referring to. I'm old and still think of writing as an exercise involving a pen and paper! 😁
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The Importance of Discipline
Carlos Hazday commented on Dodger's story chapter in The Importance of Discipline
I've been doing a little research on PTSD for a story. I found it interesting police officers have similar issues with it to men and women in the military. The macho attitude within the cop and soldier communities for too long refused to acknowledge mental health issues. Fortunately, those attitudes are evolving. But a report I recently watched stated 25% of cops have substance abuse problems developed in response to their PTSD. Someone like Jeff, without another adult in the house to help identify it, would likely fail to notice or acknowledge they have an illness. And boy does he need help. -
Thank you. For reading and the praise. A connection between the deaths exists in more ways than one. The sense of loss they all experience may even help tighten the bonds between them. But this is it, no more killing off beloved characters. I think the guys have had enough sorrow for a while and need to concentrate on the upcoming wedding.
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I'm intrigued and await future installments. Great job hooking the readers, boy.
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Hey, Tony- Ritchie was born July 2002. At the time of this chapter, he was 15 1/2.
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As far as we know, Ritchie has two blood relatives left-- CJ and Olga. But he has Brett, Cesar, and Owen to also provide support. I have a feeling the resiliency of youth will limit his sadness and acceptance will come much as it did with the death of his parents. Flashes of pain will occur but they will not be crushing. Did you like the video I shared in the discussion thread? Every time I watch it, I want to get out on the waster!
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I may have to skim the previous books! Now I know how my readers feel when dealing with my large cast after a hiatus. And while on the subject of my own story, reading about the guys partying in The Rocks for NYE made me smile. I've had my kids do the same a couple of times. It was nice to see an Aussie's perspective on something I described based strictly on research.
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Couldn't have said it better myself. Abo will not be forgotten anytime soon.
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I'm humbled by the praise. Thank you. This is one instance where CJ's views mirror mine. Having had a couple of close calls with illness and accidents, and watching my grandmother fed through a tube as Alzheimer's ravaged her mind and body, I see death in a different way most people do. We tend to be selfish about losing those dear to us and often forget their suffering.
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Blame the watch on CJ and his extravagant ways. We know the dads are lenient when it comes to him spending money and he seems to delight in doing so for the benefit of others. Remember how he paid for about a dozen friends to fly to Colorado to celebrate his 18th birthday? As for buying Ritchie a car, the kid's 15 at the time of this chapter and he's been taking flying lessons. Convoluted laws and regulations mean he'll be able to fly a plane on his own before he can drive a car without someone over 21 sitting next to him. I thought the watch fit him since he wants to be a pilot.
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I promise. No more deaths in this book. I also promise this one will end on a happy note. As for the future, the next book's about 75% written, and although I do mention people dying, it does not happen to anyone in the named cast.
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Thanks, Dave. The initial draft of this chapter was much longer and I worried it was too short when I settled on the final format. In the end, I think the juxtaposition of the two separate trips to Miami worked well to stand on their own. I liked starting it off with a jubilant CJ and ending it with him being somber and reflective. He's still transitioning from child to man, no matter how mature he may be.
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LMAO At the time this chapter takes place, Wingnut's about four. I plan on keeping him around since he'll play an important role in the future.
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Thanks, JP. I've been telegraphing Abo's death for a long time so it shouldn't have surprised anyone. You know my aversion to overly melodramatic scenes so I tried to show grief without it going overboard. Glad it worked for you.
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Ritchie's lucky he has such a great support system. The dads, CJ, and Owen will be there for him. As for Harley, he gets lots of time in two chapters. 😎
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Thank you.
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Thanks for reading and commenting, bud. Even in this short chapter, I tried to show the difference in how even siblings deal with a tragedy. You're very right about each one of us having to deal with loss in our own way and our own time.
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I think Owen's a bit more sensitive than CJ who tends to think in more practical ways. Him asking what they were going to do with the grandmother showed his accepting Abo's death but already thinking ahead to how the family could support Aba. Ritchie's lucky he has such a loving, supporting group of men around him.
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Thanks, Dugh. As I already mentioned, deaths and funerals aren't fun to write but I tried to make it touching without getting too melodramatic. Glad you found it acceptable. I was scared the chapter was too short and too close to the one about Liz.
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Thanks, Tony. I wanted Owen to share some of what he learned when he lost his sister six months before. His comments also helped show how much he's become a member of the family.
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Thank you!
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Thanks, AR! Someone aware of my plans to kill off a few characters called me a mass murderer a long time ago. Abo's death was expected and even welcome but the pain's still there. However, I think I'm done writing funerals for a long time. This is the fourth one and they don't get any easier to write. It's hard work!
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Thanks, Chris. I don't think CJ will get over the death of his grandfather any time soon. His reaction's more mature due to his age and personality but the pain's still there.
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“FUCKING A! I CAN WALK ON WATER!” CJ’s feet skimmed over the canal’s surface while he shouted; his toes barely touched the water. His outburst went unheard over the boat engine’s roar and the whoosh of water flowing through the Jetlev-Flyer attached to his back. Weaving his way right and left in front of the boat, he caught a glimpse of his brother. Ritchie had been the first one to strap on the device with the long, thick black hose connected to the vessel. Water pumping into it flew out th
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