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This is a slowly building story that develops Oli's character and relationships clearly. I am hoping to see more actions in future chapters. Two things bother me. The first is Oli's father who seems cold to Oli and doesn't seem very social for a wolf. The lack of a pack in the story is also odd for any story about wolves and shifters. A shifter with out the social connections and protection from humans seems unnatural.
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The flashback in this chapter was indeed very sad as I remember all my beloved companions in my long life. The part that was surprising was how Oli's parents announced that he was a werewolf. I am interested how Buddy will react to Oli's change.
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Interesting start to this story. I am wondering how the flashbacks will connect to the main story and the visiting wolf.
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It is great that Tristan has now found his family again and the healing has begun.
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I did love this story with its great plot and characters. I agree with your ideas about flash stories completely. Unfortunately, since I read the story after it is finished, I cannot participate in the comments like I normally would. I know it would be a lot of work, but it would be great if the story was rewritten in the normal story format. Looking forward to reading more of your stories. Thanks again for your work.
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Epilogue part six - Tristan, Carl and Gideon
raven1 commented on Caz Pedroso's story chapter in Epilogue part six - Tristan, Carl and Gideon
As Geemeedee said, there are a lot more questions to be answered. Why don't you write a prequel or 10 to clear up and expand this universe? -
Epilogue part five - O'Connor and Angel
raven1 commented on Caz Pedroso's story chapter in Epilogue part five - O'Connor and Angel
Angel and O'Conner back together again is wonderful. They had to face Cheryl separately which weakened them both. Neither had hope that they would survive. I hope they do tour the world. They need distance for the tragedy that shocked their lives and love for each other. -
Epilogue part four - Helen, Zion, Karen, Charlie, and Jilly.
raven1 commented on Caz Pedroso's story chapter in Epilogue part four - Helen, Zion, Karen, Charlie, and Jilly.
Another wonderful reunion. Thanks for the great work you did. -
Epilogue part three - Carl and Tristan
raven1 commented on Caz Pedroso's story chapter in Epilogue part three - Carl and Tristan
Great pair of lovers. I do think that Tristan should find out about his father. The guy maybe one of the innocent victims of Kersin and Cheryl. -
Hey Albert, Thought you might like to see some pizzas available here. https://www.pizzahut.co.th/order/pizzas You might like those with the Thousand Island base instead of tomato base, or those with Hokkaido cheese instead of Mozzarella. Also, if it says ham or sausage, it can mean hotdogs, so look at the pictures first. You might like the seafood pizza. It includes shrimp, squid and fish flakes with the fake crab. 😜
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Hi All! Sawasdee Khrup 🙏 I'll stay neutral in the Pineapple Pizza War.
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Shhhh Albert. Don't give Texy any ideas. He or his spies are around lurking around here so keep it quiet.
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You should try some Thai pizzas from Pizza Hut. They include fake crab sticks and hotdogs with tons of Mozzarella on a thick crust. They also use hotdogs on a sausage pizza. Maybe you will meet a pizza you don't like here. 😜
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Epilogue part two - Kitryn and Simon
raven1 commented on Caz Pedroso's story chapter in Epilogue part two - Kitryn and Simon
I am sure that Kitryn will love living with the Vamps in Carl's coven. He might even get along with Carl eventually. Tristan is now there to smooth things over and help keep Carl from getting too outrageous with his teasing. -
Now for healing.
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Kitryn gets to get his revenge. Go Kitryn!
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Good Riddance! On to the rest of these A...holes to do the same thing.
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So far, so good. Keeping my fingers crossed.
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The tension is nicely building at this point. I'm ready for the whole thing to blow up!
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Fast start to the battle. Wishing all goes well for everyone except Cheryl and those willingly serving her.
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I worry for them all. I am sure the battle will be tough.
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Now they know were to go it won't be long for the battle to begin. Since there is to be a battle of the minds which includes Fran, I wonder if she needs to be there also. If she does, who will protect her?
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I hope they find Cheryl this time. She's insane and has killed and hurt too many people. Justice for her is long overdue.
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The gif was great, but the alliteration was better. Jenny does need to get the message through. Cheryl is insane. She killed her own true mate without any regret. What a bitch.
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Short chapter. Tristan now knows how powerful he is as well as a mentor to help him develop that power.
