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Week Two Sunday September 14, 2014: Confrontations
Parker Owens commented on skinnydragon's story chapter in Week Two Sunday September 14, 2014: Confrontations
So David socked it to the pastor. The gay agenda is pretty much everyone else's: live life, pursue happiness. Why some churches can't see that and accept it still a great mystery. Wonder what Danny is up to? And the urge on Tommy's part to dig the dirt on Twoey can't lead to anything good. -
Fantastic confluence of factors to raise the suspense, and leave the hapless reader on the edge of the chair. How fast can Bryan drive? How terrible is he going to feel when he learns the whole truth? And most importantly, will he be in time to save Wyatt? Wonder about the next chapter...will Sarah just get in Carol's face, or will she be learn to use her backhand before Bryan loses it completely? Or maybe the police will have arrived first...Can't speak for everyone, but this reader is very, very grateful for this chapter.
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Thank you for drawing these two together. Perhaps Felix will get more than just his fantasies fulfilled; maybe his reality will be better. And maybe Dorian can become something better, too.
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Very, very cool plot movement. Like how Marc and Nathan get fleshed out some more; love how the fingerprint database for people likely to go astray comes in handy for someone else who has gone...missing. Just when you thought it was Carol who would slip up, it's just good old police work. Very, very nice chapter. Many thanks.
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Week Two Saturday September 13, 2014: Danny's Room
Parker Owens commented on skinnydragon's story chapter in Week Two Saturday September 13, 2014: Danny's Room
Beautifully written. Very nice to see Twoey and Danny together. Maybe they will be good for each other. And maybe David can go do some serious self-discovery on his own. -
I am attempting to write my first story. It is long - possibly too long, because I really want to find a good way to make it come out feeing final and natural. If I couldn't do that, I would feel really unhappy, and wonder why I started. So I agree with Krista on that. Specifically to Krista, I hope she continues writing.
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Somewhere, there is a film in this. It's absolutely priceless to imagine. Many thanks for every bit of this lovely gem.
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Two words: Oh. Wow.
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The need to shout overwhelms the reader: at Bryan - come on, try to make some connections; go see Eddie...at Wyatt - hang on, Wyatt, stay with Bryan as long as you can, don't die yet... at Carol - you heartless, unfeeling, selfish, psycho! This was a shouting chapter, indeed. No sniffles here. Any hope of another chapter that rests reader's vocal chords? Soon?
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Very glad to see another chapter post for this story. What's more, this is a really great chapter for seeing what Dorian might really be like. Perhaps we'll be able to see beyond the exterior of his fears, work and habits.
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Week Two Friday September 12, 2014: Discovering Danny
Parker Owens commented on skinnydragon's story chapter in Week Two Friday September 12, 2014: Discovering Danny
Thanks for this chapter. I like Danny's verbal characterization, especially. You have to admire Twoey for being brave enough to say something out loud. David continues to be clueless; wonder if Matty will do something to clue him in. Thanks also for making me want more without leaving me hanging off a cliff. -
Davy hurts, and it's starkly written down. He must have plenty of anguish piled on in layered to feel this way. The simple beep distracts, but can it hold the blade away from the skin? Great suspense packed into a painful note. Nicely done. More chapters coming?
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The tension is so great, you could play the violin on it. Will Ryan break down and let someone in, or not? Can Colt take the step he needs to take in order to set just one little part of the world right? Oh, wonderfully done. Once fed and cared for, maybe Ryan can learn to trust and love again. Want to be there when that happens.
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I have been reading this story off and on for awhile. This is one of the best chapters. Let me echo SkinnyDragon's comment on the drama and helplessness packed into Zack's breakdown. Awesome. I'm not worthy.
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Great chapter. It illuminates a lot of the thinking in Twoey and David's minds, and nudges David and Twoey just a little closer together. David is getting sucked into a classic relationship vortex with Kathy that could spit him out in very unhappy shape. Disagree with ColumbusGuy here in that I don't think David has it in him - just too far outside his experience - to tell Kathy on the phone that he's not her guy. He's stuck, and doesn't know how to get out. David might need a deus ex machina to extract him from that.
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"Bus Stop," the Hollies. Addictive, very classic. Cannot pry it out of my head.
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A near miss! Augh! The things Bryan ought to hear, but can't, because of the clamor of his own heart and the things he thinks he knows. And the torment Bryan is going through is so very well illustrated and elaborated in this chapter. Readers will need a warning to check their heart medication - so many hearts will be breaking. So many other readers will be shouting themselves hoarse at Bryan to go back and get his brother talking again. Great chapter!
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Week Two Wednesday September 10, 2014: Erik's Room
Parker Owens commented on skinnydragon's story chapter in Week Two Wednesday September 10, 2014: Erik's Room
Agree with ColumbusGuy 100%. I wonder what might change David's mind? -
This is the best chapter yet. The picture of Wyatt's swift decline and despair is painted perfectly. Carol's heartless manipulation of both her sons - and especially Eddie - is completely exposed and the reader can't help but seethe in impotent rage at her. The offstage plot implied by Eddie's thoughts is really chilling. And through it all, who can't want to rush onstage and console poor Wyatt?
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Week Two Tuesday September 9, 2014: The Mystery Girl
Parker Owens commented on skinnydragon's story chapter in Week Two Tuesday September 9, 2014: The Mystery Girl
This is becoming an addictive story. Really like the way the dialogue comes off. Also think David's complete metacognitive blindness (obliviousness?) about Twoey is perfect. I think I agree with ColumbusGuy - I have misgivings both about Danny and about Erik. It looks like characters we might like are about to get hurt. Did I mention I want another chapter? -
I've tried writing endings of my own for GA stories that are incomplete as personal exercises. They brought a little bit of closure to me, and they helped me do some writing and work on dialogue, even though nobody else will ever read them.
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Another dialect (not dialectical) curiosity is the inland New England multiple preposition. As in the old timer who went deer hunting: "Had to go way up back through around on in there to get him." This also gets you the 'are you illiterate?' stare, I think.
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Dear God, poor Wyatt. He gets to hear his death sentence, and get left to freeze in despair, with a probably soon-to-suppurate shoulder wound to go with it. Great blast of sickness and wickedness in this chapter. Carol is revealed as her clearly unbalanced and evil self. Eddie is ambiguous here; not at all sure of how innocent or not he may be. Clearly, he knows what he did to help his mother, but not how it will hurt his brother. But did I detect a fatal flaw in Carol's plan? I think so...
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Mayonnaise: "may yo nays" or "may nays?" Or then there's the tiny bit of the country that says "my nez." I
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USA: restroom Canada: washroom UK: the loo USA: he's in the hospital English speaking Canada: he's in hospital (also works when you substitute the word 'university' for 'hospital') Most of USA: Submarine Sandwich Eastern New England: Bomber, Grinder Philadelphia: Hoagie There are doctoral theses on this kind of thing....
