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Anikin called earlier to let me know our movie plans had to be rescheduled, because he’d been loaded up with work at the firm for the evening, probably some of the night as well, so he couldn’t say when he would be home. I wasn’t really surprised it turned out like this, most of the time had come to be like this lately anyway, and I didn’t want to be a bother to his work. The only problem about this change in my everyday life, was my boredom. Sure I could hang out with Sean and the other guys f
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Why is there still only two chapters???? I need more... now!!! I absolutely love it...can't way to read more:)
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Time line jump? I'm not sure I know whaat you mean...But I'm glad you like it so far:)
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I have a betareader helping me and originally I did fix the errors, and will see what went wrong and get it uploaded as soon as possible, also see to blend in the rest. Please come back then and let me know what you think:) thanks for all your help so far.
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I will see to fix the errors right away. I do have a betareader who helps me and I already did correct those errors once... maybe I forgot to save the chances... I will see to fix these errors right away and discuss the development of the characters. thanks for you ever hepfull critisism and ideas
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Anikin was in the kitchen brewing coffee for when he was going to work. In the meantime, I was in my room, pacing back and forth, trying to find the courage to go and tell him. Before I could get a chance to change my mind I walked out into the hall, as soon as I heard him leave the kitchen. He was in front of the door, mug in one hand and a stack of papers in the other, reading. “Anikin…!” I said taking a few steps closer before I stopped. “Mmm” He didn’t look up from his papers. “I… I lov
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Anikin’s birthday was coming up, I’d been out looking for a present for a few days and I wanted to give him something special. But everything I came upon was either too expensive or wasn’t just the right kind of special. The only money I had to spend was the small savings I had put aside from my allowance the past year or so, and it wasn’t much. Maybe I should get a part time job, I was still in good time to get first payment and get the present for Anikin before his birthday. Once at home I sa
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Sean bumped down on the bench next to me, saying nothing a first, but I could feel his gaze at me, and I believed he had this huge goofy smile on his face. “What?” I asked without looking up from my book. “So… tell me all about it.” He elbowed me knowingly, hard enough for me to tilt slightly. “Tell you all about what?” I looked up and just as I thought; his lips stretched his round face into a huge goofy grin. “How long have you known you were gay? I know you dated a lot of girls. They didn
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“Dom…”Anikin called from the kitchen. “Yes.” I came out of my room, still holding and half reading the schoolbook I had been working with. “I’m having some friends over for dinner tonight for at drinking party, so do you mind helping me in the kitchen today?” He’d just returned from shopping and was putting the groceries into the fridge. “Sure. How many will be coming?” I looked up from the book and went to sit on one of the bar chairs at the kitchen counter. “Three, Luke and William. Luke y
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I was recommended by my beta to go and ask my question here: Punctuation issue, here goes: Sometimes there are , in front of as/then/and/but and sometimes the word in itself are enough as a pause, how to know when and when not to? I suppose it is to be used if the sentence is too long without, but I found it used in shorter sentences as well... I find punctuation very confusing at times. I did try looking it up myself but did seem to find anything on this particular issue of mine
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Writing Tip Writing Tip: Grammar Rodeo #1
Avangelion commented on Renee Stevens's blog entry in Writing World
wow... awsome... This helped a lot, especially the last one, what an annoying word then how to know if to use . or , as punctuation after end dialog if you don't have ! or? - ?? have to say I didn't even know that you had to use any of them before today. -
Chapter 4 - Secret feelings
Avangelion commented on Avangelion's story chapter in Chapter 4 - Secret feelings
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Thank you:) I love reading chapter reviews:) it's still a story in progress but i'm really glad you liked it, makes the effort worth it:) I'll work hard:D Yeah I heard about it, but already got one helping, but thanks though:)
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wow... I just discovered that I love to read long reviews:D Your review got me thinking a lot about what to do with this story, so thank you very much. I was thinking about getting someone to help me read it over before posting, but I wanted to see the response to the story before putting in some more serious work on it. And since I'm not originally english speaking my gramma sucks... sorry about that, might happen again:D hehe Originally this story was a writing exercise for myself "write a whole chapter each time you write, and then post it straight after". hence the reason for the short chapters:) but I'll work on longer ones:) But now I will go back to work, make it better and write some more:) thanks again:)
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The next morning I was stopped in the hall, on my way to class, by a girl from a different class. “I’m really sorry to disturb you like this when you have class, but I knew it wouldn’t help writing a letter asking you to meet me. But” Jesus Crist, she was blabbering. “I like you, a lot, so I’d like to ask you if want to go out with me” she was writhing her hands in front of her, and she wouldn’t look at me while talking. Why did she have to ask, so annoying. I recognized Ethan and Alex’s voice
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OMG... how embarrassing, I pressed the unpuplish chapter instead of the edit chapter last time I had to fix something... hehe. error is fixed so now the chapter should be there with the rest. please injoy
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little less bouncing by the first part was over, but it was just as good, almost cried, got a little sniffle by the end. but when Evan went to leave I was like "nononononononononno, oh good, he didn't leave" and then "aaaawwwww" I have a feeling that I won't be getting much sleep tonight, I really don't want to stop reading =)
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I am literally bouncing... omg... You had me squrming at the first part shaking with anticipation at the second part Blushing with the intensity of the third part and relaxing with the promise of more like it at the end I am so gonna read this whole thing... I love this feeling when you get a really good book, you can't read on because it's too good, feel like banging your head against something with exitement... *more bouncing* *running in circles with exitement*
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Prompt 412 - First line
Avangelion commented on Caz Pedroso's story chapter in Prompt 412 - First line
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Prompt 385 - The Minor
Avangelion commented on Caz Pedroso's story chapter in Prompt 385 - The Minor
Aww... sweet... it was really good, but in the end I didn't really have the need to know more sadly, but well written:) so on to the next one ... -
I woke early the next morning, it was not yet time to get up and go to school. I was still wrapped in Anikin’s embrace, only now, facing him. An arm wrapped around his waist and my head tucked tightly under his chin; my nose so close to the hollow of his throat, that if I just stretched my neck a bit I could press my lips at this inviting spot. Only now, after I finished the thought did I realize I was just about to do so, my neck stretched and my lips parted only an inch from the skin of Anikin
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Let me start out by telling you who I am; My name is Garret, I’m 18 and a senior in high school. I know my age doesn’t fit my school year, but I started school late so I’m older than most of my classmates. Anyway, I am know to be the most handsome, gloomy and arrogant asshole in the whole school, and currently I am sitting in my seat, on forth row, by the window, looking, with shock, at the very reason of my trauma and my horrible personality. It all started at the first year of senior high, I
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Garret is a 18 year old senior at high school, an amazing student with good grates and is fairly popular because of his looks but he is left with a trauma that makes him act cold towards everyone. Starting his year as a Senior he is confronted with the cause of his trauma, how will this end out for Garret and the persons involved in his life?
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About two months had past and I’ve gotten used to the thought of Anikin being Gay, I’ve even gotten used to Jack hanging around from time to time. But, Anikin’s boyfriend or not, I despised the guy. Jack looked like a decent person, he was in his mid-twenties a year or two older than Anikin, always in a shirt even sometimes wearing a polo shirt over it, he was what I would call a typical spoiled rich kid, his golden hair always combed to the side. I had no idea what Anikin might see in him, sur
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Awesome... I'm not the only one... it will get lots better... If the staff would just hurry up and approve the next chapter:/
