Don, this story hooked my interest the first time I read it years ago and it continues to do so now. My perspective has changed quite a lot, I've noticed, but I still like the story. From a technical standpoint, the characters are a bit more archtypical and on this site, the 'rich gay boy' is used a LOT. Some of the newer people reviewing have been harsher than I feel is warranted, for for no other reason than they didn't read far enough. This first chapter was first posted in November of 1999 on Nifty. In the past 13 years, your writing has gone from interesting to deep and compelling.
Good start to a great story.