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    Flown with the tears

    Aviana commented on Aviana's story chapter in Flown with the tears

    Thank you Jp...I ll keep that in mind!!
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    Flown with the tears

    Aviana commented on Aviana's story chapter in Flown with the tears

    Thanks a lot Micheal... No matter...if my poem touches you I m more than happy...after all I believe that's all wat a poet wants
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    FLOWN WITH THE TEARS The sand slips of the eternal flowing time Wrapped in the arms of riddles and rhyme I can hear the distant echo Of the once cheerful voice The cries of the desire of those warm rejoice; The choices I made are now hurt and bleeding The forlorn shadow of the Smile quietly pleading, The scattered parts of the dreams Swimming in my tear The hollow laugh of the values I held so dear; All vanished in the
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    Dogs

    Aviana commented on Mikiesboy's story chapter in Dogs

    This really made me sad...Just last year on 17th June...my chiki (my doggy) died
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    F.U.C.

    Aviana commented on MacGreg's story chapter in F.U.C.

    Truly this poem is one of it's kind...Cancer truly is a heinous diseases and like you said in the poem claims life mercilessly...extremely sorry to hear about your friend...!!! You made her proud with this...N very well written!!
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    Mother's Day

    Aviana commented on Mikiesboy's story chapter in Mother's Day

    oh man that was touching...sorry tim... fifteen...damn fate's cruel sometimes But m sure your mom will be very proud of you
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    SILENCE Mirror of the feelings hidden in our eyes A gentle weapon of the wise Politely avoids the question unknown Refreshes the past when sitting alone Expresses the infinite happiness within Suppresses the sorrow, not to be seen Humbly overlooks the fool's babble Allows our beloved to convey their troubles Hides the delicate feelings never shared Guards the secrets of the ones you care Silence has the unimaginable strength of endura
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    Rhyming and Ghosts

    Aviana commented on mogwhy's story chapter in Rhyming and Ghosts

    "Wandering from pillar and post.In and out.Never knowing the route.Going around people and places.Looking into lives with eyes," Reminds me of the time when I was totally lost and directionless in my life....touches a chord!!
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    Moon Shadows

    Aviana commented on mogwhy's story chapter in Moon Shadows

    "Memories of other moonlit nights flit through a mind.Memories of sighs and slow dances. Of heat filled pleasures." This lines suddenly made me image a beautiful moonlight night in a beach Very beautifully portrayed!!
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    I m no expert but even an amateur like me can also feel the emotion depicted (And trust me that's really something)
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    Beautiful poetry....The first one is like a lullaby....And the second one totally captures the feelings of the kid
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    It's a small collection of some of my poems; Writings is a great way to say the unsaid words....A call to the lost soul you could say....
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    This is the second story of yours that I read....I have to say you have gotta gift of making people sit on the edge as the story unfolds!! My hands were trembling as Avery was left to Degasio with the tension that what will happen next. Similarly, I was biting my nails whenever Matt and Avery met, wondering if their father would barge in and destroy their sweet time together and when Avery was discovered with the phone, oh God, my heart was in my mouth with dread that this crazy man might kill him....Damn!! Loved ur story man...I wish the ending was bit more elaborate but oh well
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    You see there r some stories where you have lots to say n some where you just can't find anything to say....this is one such story...I loved reading it...!! I felt like I went into a journey which started slow then became rocky n finally became smooth...! Keep it up
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    All In

    Aviana reviewed craftingmom's story in Fiction

    The story is very engaging. The thing that I loved the most was it's ability to pull you in the story. Even though, I knew the characters r fictional, so is the setting, still I just can't keep my feelings in control...I was horrified by the sufferings of Devyn, furious at Brad(villain) n rooting for Jason...! I think Craftsmom, you r one great writer to be able to move a person with just words....thank you for ur lovely writing
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