Will Hawkins

If Leia was knocked up by some creature from another world, he could have made the baby disappear so that it would not show up at the autopsy. Otherwise, he might have gotten in trouble for rape. The non-mystical reason for no baby might be because Leia aborted it off in the woods someplace, then committed suicide out of remorse not for killing the baby, but because she violated her concepts of right.

The human mind, especially the human mind tormented by the contrarian forces of puberty, is a strange and dark place, Brandon is being so torn by hormonal changes he is ill-prepared for. It is at this time of life that a young man needs a mentor, not an authority figure like a father or a priest, but an elder brother or cousin, perhaps. Someone with a sense of humor and with a 'been there, done that, got the T-shirt, type of attitude. Brandon has the right attitude, but doesn't know how to influence others well enough to be the advisor for a PG girl. I think it shows, Cassie, that you are a creative author and can apply the pangs of puberty, from the female side, to your characters. At your age -- late 30s is it -- you are not too old to remember the female side of the problem. Boys are lucky, they have to go through the hormonal changes only once, not every month as girls do. Somewhat dark, but certainly creative characterization. You rock!

There is a contributor on Quora named Creepsy. Are you sure she didn't get into your personality and write this story?

The creation of an alternative reality with a pencil and drawing pad. Now that is a real wild start for a story line. I am hooked. Good on you Cassie.

The song is by Bill Haley and the Comets and the lyric goes, "See you later, alligator; after 'while crocodile."

divides the city into about two-thirds -- divides the city into about thirds

throw the robe in through the hole in the glass -- throw the rope in through the hole in the glass how much that costed them -- how much that cost them when I had poked myself on accident -- when I had poked myself by accident--

Because this tale was orriginally published five years before the date of my reading, it is very possible that the author is not reading comments any more, so, unless I receive a response that changes my mind, I ill not be making comments on the Chapters. If the author is indeed still reading comments he may confirm his interest in receiving comments from me by email misterwill2@live .com. or commenting on this message as i will turn on 'notifications'.

I am of the opinion, confirmed several times throughout history and in many different ways, that organized religion is the bane of life. He who inhales the smoke of a communion fire, is inhaling the death of love.

I realize there are places and people like you describe, Ace. Fortunately when i lived in Texas, my town, New Braunfels, was not one of them, possibly because the nearness of army and air force bases,--- I also went to HighSchool in San Antonio,--- had upgraded the thinking of the residents. Good characterization and an opening plot line that has much promise. Keep up the good work.

more than you'll ever now. -- more than you'll ever know. Yes, the Old Troll is still reading, but I have been skipping the Comments as they are usually of only one of two types: 'you are writing a good story' -- which I agree with, and 'Hurry and post the next Chapter'. It seems that many readers just can not get it into their heads that GA places a limit on how fast an author can post Chapters -- normally the limit being one per week. I am sneaky and wait until the entire book has been published -- then I can read Chapters at my own pace, not at the pace dictated by GA rules, but shhh, don't tell anyone, I don't want to piss GA off and be stopped from reading -- and re-reading -- my only form of pleasure.

And don’t you peak, --- And don’t you peek, peak the pointed top of a mountain; peak to look quickly, especially in a furtive manner. Hey, my favorite error, a homophone!

There is a near-zero chance of HIV infection from oral sex the stomach acids destroy the virus, but other STDs can be transmited and will infect the mouth, gums and esophagus.

I would wish that the next time, if ever, I visit a European City, I have a history teacher like Will along as a guide. He, you the author, is doing such a good job of presenting the history of the country, it makes me feel like I am visiting along with Will. But then there would have to be a William I, and a William II. Too much confusion.

A slight over emphasis on the pain aspect in my opinion, perhaps because of the imperfect lubricant. I guess my reactions at that time, God, how many thousands of years ago, was one of curiosity rather than anxiety. Excellent descriptive language, however. a great start on an interesting story.

The origin of the expression "Doosey": The brothers Duesenberg, beginning before WWI, set out to build a truly luxurious automobile. The brothers were engineering geniuses, but unfortunately did not know how to market their dream car and went bankrupt. The name s well as their engineering ability was purchased by a man named Cord, who did have the marketing ability and many models of the car were sold even through the depression in 1929. Each one was considered a perfect 'gentleman's automobile', but because of the hand-made engineering, was so expensive they fitted only into that restricted niche market. "Its a Doosey" became an expression to be applied to anything that was the ultimate in beauty and mechanical perfection. Cord was interested in racing and developed the Duesenberg into an Indianapolis-style race card which set many land-speed records, developing such automotive improvements as a supercharged engine until one of the brothers crashed in a downhill race in 1937 and the automotive market started to move toward smaller, cheaper, mass-produced cars and Ford and General Motors took over the market.

I was just caught with my pants at my knees. Hey, that sounds like fun. But the problem was I made a comment on the Forum which was intended to appear here commenting on the story. I still feel the comment was appropriate, though. I feel like I came in at the middle of the Second Act, but that was because I was reading the forum posts. Nw I feel like I came in at the middle of the First Act. There are many characters with whom I am unfamiliar. I guess I will just have to stick it out until they begin to make sense.

forked another chuck of dessert in his mouth - forked another chunk of dessert in his mouth just a suggestion for a better word?

It is a wonder to me how you, as the author, keep a;; these characters, relationships. and personalities separate and unique. Your notes must be as extensive as the published chapters. I cannot even keep separate and in memory the passwords I have used for various sites on the Net. I realize now, mostly too late, I should have used pen and paper to make a list of them. Excellent writing C. I am a committed follower--and I don't even nip at the author's bare toes when he walks across my bridge.

I did a little internet exploration just recently and discovered that some of my preconceived notions about Finland are unfounded at least. Firstly, the country is not as frigid as it might be because of the effect of the Gulf Stream on their weather, secondly, Finnish is not quite as difficult a language as might be supposed for native English speakers to master as there is a lot of Swedish influence in ordinary speech, though it is not one of the easiest either because it has no Latin or Germanic roots which many English speakers rely upon in learning a foreign language, and finally the coldness of the climate does not have an adverse effect on the warmth of the people -- except possibly toward their Russia neighbors, though that has warmed slightly in recent years. I feel the Finns should maintain their stand-offish attitude toward the Russians, keeping in mind the recent Russian attacks in the Baltic.

things between our three and a half boys are really getting complex. There seems to be an "I love Brian" club forming and unfortunately because of his commitment to his medical studies, Brian is just not available. The damage will affect all of them greatly. Your problem as and author, is to work out the best possible solution. I am looking forward to your solution.

Once again the description of anal penetration is beautifully done, but I am concerned thay Snowflake and Brian don't care enough about each other to use protection. Brian as a medical student has probably been checked, after all, he realizes that he is gay and knows enough to not infect a partner, but does Snowflake? It is most interesting that Snowflake feels that his native language is inadequate to express his emotions. Can a language express the coldness of the country? And are Finns really that unfeeling?

I feel I have to disagree with Homo Sapiens just a little bit. I realize this is the GA website and your readers expect a routine dose of MM sex, but also, too much sex in chapter after chapter can be cloying. It becomes clinical like incident after incident of gay sex on MM porno. It gets to the point that you can predict the scenes in the tapes -- Okay, first comes the conversation, now the oral action that seems to go on forever, and now the anal penetration, hey actor, being a bottom does not hurt that much, believe me I know, cut down on the screaming, and always there is the 'money shot' at the end, then fade to commercial. Gay porno on TV is ultimately predictable. On a GA story -- sometimes the suggestion can be just as sexy as minute description. Hey we all know, at least I think we all know, what it feels like. Sure, every once in a while a written description hits the spot, But it is like cherry compote, too much is too much. I feel you as the author of this series, are hitting the sex button just enough -- and you do a great job, too. Your descriptions are creative and original!

I will have to admit that much of the characterization you are creating here is new to me. Yes I am a gay man and have had experience with other gay men, but the inner thoughts of a Tranny are very new to me. So far as iI know I have never even met a Tranny in real life, and certainly not known one to talk to intimately, they are somewhat rare in the frozen food aisle of a local grocery store. It looks like I am in for a real learning experience. Snowflake has an inner self and a facade he shows to the world. He comes on as this strong ice bound Nordic type, but there is a confused man inside the glacier. Jimmy is just so young and eager, like a Cocker Spaniel puppy. He is going to be hurt, but will come out on top at the end. Really I am in love with all your characterizations, though to love the ice maiden like Snowflake takes a little effort!