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ugh, I know teenagers can whip around between moods, but the swings back and forth between the boys being worried about violence and getting bashed, and threatening each other and slapping each other seem overdone. I guess it's a way to increase the tension, but feels like a forced gimmick,
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Good try from Emmerson. I think, maybe? Blue has a LOT going on in his head. Interesting to see how this develops.
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So, I get why Billy was baiting Clarke into arguing the character stuff, and I expected some version the demolition act we had today. But I still don't get why Billy was mixing in the vulgar insults to the judge?
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Argh, Mitch. Yeah, ok, I see the clues now, but there was a lot of potential good there too.
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Yeah, I remember from IHTT that Alec considered River a stable rock. I guess for Alec, he was, just not for himself. Alec's Seattle house backs up the " yes, I can afford something in small-town Iowa" that he rather casually told Finn in IHTT. Great vibe in the room, it's a weird fit between Kenji and River, but they're just what each of them are looking for!
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Rotator cuff Ok, Mitch standing up, Danbury fired, Carl arrested, State AG on it. Yay George! And school admin actually serious about capping this nonsense is excellent- edge of realistic maybe, but sometimes systems do swing into action properly. Ooh that's ugly if Carl was retaliating for the mine road thing, but I guess it's ugly no matter what.
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Rotator cuff is not a good thing to tear for a baseball player - but maybe something good will come from how public that all was. And yay for a reasonably large cast of allies And hehe, "Uncle George is an ordinary guy who owns some gold mines that are doing alright" does seem like it was a rather modest evaluation of George's situation.
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We're already at that Ashley is a terrible person. Luckily she's terrible in a dumb way that Billy can unwrap next court session. My current guess on Ashley isn't just that she's a liar, she's manipulating Calvin into getting the boys so she can enslave them (the marriage helps for that). Calvin will resist this at the end, because while he's an awful person, blood is thicker than water.
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The playlist one would be most likely to get my attention. The scam/hype line seems interesting and very current. Vampires aren't for me, but they seem popular around here. There was a line that popped up this week in another context: "I don't think the abyss is worth looking into anymore." The abyss can still hold an audience, but I don't think it's for me
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There's a real banging story posting at Awsomedude
Mattyboy replied to JamesSavik's topic in Stories Discussion Forum
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I'm with Diego that he might be making a mistake keeping Billy on the case. It's going to be quite doable to get Ashley & Calvin on the merits, and Billy seems to be playing for a mistrial/appeal, which strings the whole thing out for another year. Billy seems to be playing his own game, not Diego's, which is unethical and seems malpractice-adjacent.
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You guess? 🤯 🤯 I had you in the elite group of people who didn't need to guess as what Liam's up to! Very ethical of Liam if so, to not put pressure on Mike, who came in looking like he couldn't stand much extra. But interesting alright, and if so the Liam's plan is coming together nicely!
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Hehe, clever of Liam to hide with Mike, and come out of the closet on his own, and leave Brody thinking he'd looked. Interesting that line: The deal was Liam could drop hints -- Mike got to decide when and if. We sort of guessed at something like that a chapter ago. But interesting to hear Liam call it a deal. So who's this deal with? I'm guessing that's a rule Maggie made for Liam? Could be Olivia. Or could be Liam dealing with himself?
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Yay Mitch! Yay Coach and team! Things are looking up for Pete. After he, um, gets all the stitches out.
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Or you could tell him to up the posting pace, that'd help.
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Ashley seems to be a stronger driver in all this than we'd generally figured. Interesting if Billy finds out something that she's connected to.
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I like the baseball, and that description of Pete finding that he can be in synch with Mitch on the field, and figuring he's probably made the team. Ugh Carl. At least there wasn't much ambiguity about what happened there.
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The intriguing Mr Heyward
Mattyboy commented on Robert Hugill's story chapter in The intriguing Mr Heyward
It didn't take all that long to get to Russ Kahn's bottom, I seem to recall.- 12 comments
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I love how off-hand Peter is that George found a "good vein" and now there are seven trust funds and 3 more gold mines and George changed how he works. So that's cool, but he's more interested in how to plan his athletics schedule and what he's reading in AP English. I get that there's a lot of expenses in small scale mining, and mining can be rather more like an ordinary business than people think, but that sounds like it might have been a very good vein indeed.
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Interesting start. Sorry to hear that any of that is autobiographical, but strong move on the escape. It's absolutely the way kids are with family businesses, and Peter was quite small when he was at the mines, but amazing the way he normalizes that his father and George own GOLD mines. I was wondering with the "we have running water and everything" if this was set in the past, but with the phone I see it's present-ish/ recent past
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I haven't seen this as a major factor in the protest-circuit regulars around here. But you (and your characters) live in a different part of the world
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Yeah, but EVERY protester has a camera these days, and everyone's trying to get a clip of somebody taking a poke at them so they can run off and justify an assault claim. It's stupid as hell, but we live in a fallen world. And we also live in a world where if you utter a threat, and then a really stupid accident happens caused by someone close to you, the person you threatened is gonna own your house.
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Diego needs to get his shit together. He did two unlikeable and foolish things in this chapter. Even thinking about assaulting Raul in the courthouse was fucking dumb; Billy had demolished Raul, and that'd lose Diego the kids to CPS on summary judgement before anyone left the building. And the joke "I'll give you 100 per adult." One moron runs in front of the car and both Diego and Steve are up for murder 1 and conspiracy. No more jokes at court, Diego. None. He's enforcing that rule on Bryan, he should think about it for himself.
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I'm there that Billy isn't close to losing. It's a considerable advantage that Billy/Diego has that if the judge is going to be a stickler for the letter of the law (as he seems to be and is a reasonable way to judge), it's going to be hard to get past Calvin signing away his rights. Bryan-wants-to-do-it would be a reason to vary from letter-of-the-law, but it's clear that isn't the case. It didn't get settled officially, but the judge has to be pretty aware that "kids-must-be-on-their-best-behavior" isn't legally or practically enforceable. It feels it might be Debra Thomas' church bankrolling this nonsense.
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Epilogue: Normal Families?
Mattyboy commented on Robert Hugill's story chapter in Epilogue: Normal Families?
Thank you for this excellent and fresh story. Fine storytelling working through this arc: the issues your characters faced at the start (🌦️) have been sorted (☔). But where that arc has taken us is that your characters now have positive futures. 🌈 So returns to Netherwich to check in on your ensemble would be fun and - I'm pretty sure - popular.- 21 comments
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